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MeLoVeGhOsTs

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    What will come tomorrow?


    What will come tomorrow?

    What will come tomorrow?
    What will come today?
    Will it be joy or will it be sorrow?
    Will it remain the same way?

    What will come tomorrow? Mother doesn't know.

    Do I have to cry?
    Do I have to laugh?
    Will I have to lie?
    Or will I have to love?

    What will come tomorrow? Father doesn't know.

    Will I fear pain?
    Will I fear death?
    Will I break the chain?

    What will come tomorrow?

    Will it be rain?
    Or will it be snow?

    For you will never know...    ​

    Written here and now, probably full of spelling errors. It just felt I had to write a poem. Sry 'bout that.
     
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    I loved it!
    It shows the uncertainty of human kind...we wish to know many things...when pain comes, when happiness comes, etc. And when we cant find out, we ask our elders..but yet they do not know either.
    10/10! ^_^

    Just one thing...
    "Will it be rain?
    Or will it be snow?"
    I think it might sound even better if you take out the "or"

    ~Eli
     
    This isn't bad.
    The only problem i had with this poem was that the questioning part became to repetitive.
    Anyways, this was decent.
     
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    Oh thanks. Nice to see you loved my first work. :)

    The repetive questioning part was actually ment to be that repetive. To make it very clear that the we all have millions of questions. But since I'm a n00bish poem writter I probably didn't really took time how to bring it out in public. My bad, thanks anyways ^_^
     
    In my opinion, the repetitivness isnt bad at all ^_^
    Questioning is meant to be repetitive...
     
    MeLoVeGhOsTs said:
    What will come tomorrow?
    What will come today?
    Will it be joy or will it be sorrow?
    Will it remain the same way?

    What will come tomorrow? Mother doesn't know.

    Do I have to cry?
    Do I have to laugh?
    Will I have to lie?
    Or will I have to love?

    What will come tomorrow? Father doesn't know.

    Will I fear pain?
    Will I fear death?
    Will I break the chain?

    What will come tomorrow?

    Will it be rain?
    Or will it be snow?

    For you will never know...

    Written here and now, probably full of spelling errors. It just felt I had to write a poem. Sry 'bout that.
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    Actually there were no spelling errors. XD I am happy to see you've written a poem too, woot! X3

    This poem signifies the unknown in a way. For you never know what will happen tomorrow until the day breaches its limits. You'll never know what's to come until it happens. Awsome job with the entire poem, I adored it. ^o^

    ~Kelsey
     
    ^__^ great job =D i like this... wow lotsa great new poets around!! ~origin
     
    Well I'm not really new *coughcheckmyCLOSEDwelcometopiccough* (:p), but it seems like you guys liked my first work =D. Kewl! No spelling errors? Lol. XD

    Well glad you liked it, I'll write some more later.

    Bye,
     
    Some more poems.

    Another Poem.

    Another poem, I will make.
    Another poem, reputation at stake.

    What am I saying? Reputation?
    Why am I staying? Transformation?

    I have no reputation, no title, no pride.

    Who will respect me?
    Who will destroy me?
    Do not ask, you will see.

    It is only a poem, another poem...

    Written by who?
    Written for who?

    Is it for me? Is it for you?

    It does not matter. It is only another poem...    ​

    ****************​

    Well there you have it. Another poem. Nothing special. It doesn't really fit. It are diffrent questions mixed up. No harmony what so ever. Just some louzy facts/questions written together. Enjoy.

    *****************​

    Love

    How does it feel?

    Does it feel nice?
    Does it feel cold?

    No,
    I feel sold.

    That precious feeling.
    It feels like I'm healing.

    I cherish it so much.

    It loves me on the inside,
    But eats me on the outside.

    Why does it happen?
    Why is it there?

    Love.​

    *******************​

    A love poem. 'Bout feeling, I know it sounds a bit stupid, but I don't care...I feel good by posting this. :)
     
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    Wow MeLoVeGhOsTs from GHPF? Here? XD I haven't been there for ages now...

    Those poems are really something else ^^. "Another One" really speaks the truth when it comes to being noticed and the way people preceive you to be in this strange and unusual world that we live in.

    After reading "Love", it really asks the question "What is it?" and why do you feel the way you do when it comsumes you.

    Nicely done ^^.
     
    I enjoyed "love" alot, that poem seemed as if it reflected on personal experiences.
     
    good job =3 i like em both... just a little more improvment, and you'll get there ^__^ ~origin
     
    Oh, I edited love ^^:

    Love

    How does it feel?

    Does it feel nice?
    Does it feel cold?

    No,
    It feels like gold.

    That precious feeling.
    My heart, is what you are stealing.

    Your love is what I desire.
    Your smile is what I admire.

    You love me on the inside,
    But hate me on the outside.

    Why does it happen?
    Why is it there?

    Love.    ​

    Wow MeLoVeGhOsTs from GHPF? Here? XD I haven't been there for ages now...
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    Yep the real deal =P Well it's kinda quiet down there, not to many members out there, but still 1337 =P. I crossed FrostFire in postcount yesterday, not that postcount matters, but it's about the most intresting thing that happened in 2 days XD.

    Oh well glad you liked my poems, why don't you join the DPS?

    Btw: Do mind that I have only been learning english for 2 years, so know you know where the spelling errors come from XD.

    I enjoyed "love" alot, that poem seemed as if it reflected on personal experiences.
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    The edited version clariffies this even more...
     
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    Before I post: This will get annoying, so could a mod place all my poems in 1 topic? Thankies ^_^

    Cinquains:

    My Guitar

    Guitar
    long, expensive
    buying, playing, dying
    Will it work? It is hopeless.
    Scrap    ​
     
    Its impressive that you you just started learning English, and can type so well... I dind't even notice XD.

    Don't worry about minor spelling mistakes though, its the quality of the work that matters the most ^^. Not that you shouldn't worry at all about it, but its something very minor that comes next to quality.
     

    Well, here is something the poetry section of PC doesn't see often: a cinquain! So congrats on your originality! ^_^

    Again, no spelling or grammar mistakes, so that's something good to see.

    Also, you do not want to place extra work on the mods, so do it yourself. Delete all of your old poem threads, and make an anthology, and then post all of your poems in there. ^_^ If you post poems quite often, it is better to make a collection, so it doesn't get annoying, or so your poems arent scattered all over the place. XD;; But keep up the good work! ~origin

    Edit: I did not see this before, but I have realized you have double posted. Please do not do that again, it is breaking the rules. Thanks.
     
    No its ok xXxLaYdee0rIgInxXx ^^, if its poetry or fan-fiction its ok to double post as long as its a post related to that, and not a comment.

    You really seem to know your poetry MLG, and followed the rules really well. I really enjoyed reading the haiku poem, its relaxing ^^.

    Also, I just merged all of your threads MeLoVeGhOsTs into one.
     
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