Oni's place of weird poems

  • 7,901
    Posts
    21
    Years
    Yeah...
    Since I've been making so much poetry lately, I think it's good that I make a thread for all of them...

    Here's one that I recently wrote:

    Fallen Angel

    My wings mock me as they cease to function
    Vertigo envelopes my head as I plunge
    Down from the heavens, I come like lightning
    My own existence, they meant to expunge

    Down through the clouds and through the atmosphere
    There?s nothing I can do as I fall headfirst
    My sins made me an unholy being
    Was my own existence meant to be cursed?

    We are not supposed to feel any emotions
    But what is this that I feel in my chest?
    It wasn?t my fault but I couldn?t help it
    That?s how someone like me became unblessed

    He didn?t punish me but my kin did
    I was suddenly an outcast in their eyes
    They turned me down because I was different
    They didn?t have to listen to my cries

    So here I am the fallen angel
    Cursed by my own society, such shame
    The vices where one couldn?t understand
    How could I ever take away the blame?

    My useless wings are stripped away from me
    The halo of light on my head has disappeared
    What were once gleaming clothes are now rags
    The death that is below is what I feared

    I closed my eyes as I continued to fall
    Is there someone out there to catch me?
    I couldn?t scream as my stomach felt sick
    Is there anyone who could answer my plea?

    Before I knew what was happening
    I felt her arms lift me up and hug me
    I opened my eyes to see her blue eyes
    I held her tight as we both smiled with glee

    My feet are weak as I stood on solid ground
    But her love suddenly made me strong
    What actually is love? What is desire?
    She told me that the answers are in a kiss

    ~*~*~*~

    Comments or criticisms?
     
    Oooooh, this is such a wonderful poem Oni! ^o^ This poem kind of ties in with your other recent poems. <3<3

    Now, this poem made me think of being an outcast to sociaty. There seems to be nowhere where you can possibly fit in. You wings have been clipped and you are cast into an upmost Hell.

    You search for the strength yet keep falling, you call for help but either no one hears you...or no one listens. So, you feel that fate has been decided as you plunge into fiery depths of betrayl and defeat.

    Then, you are saved by a glimmering angel, who strength and love bring color back into your world. Even though no one else can accept you, her love is strength enough for you to go on. <3

    Shweet job Oni, me likes what me reads. XD *glomps*

    ~Kelsey
     
    awesome, I don't know about you but from reading this poem, I got an understanding of a perfect person making a mistake. This was nicely written, and I look forward to more of your work.
     
    Thanks for commenting! ^__^

    Here's another one. (1/24/05)

    Transistion

    I hear the song echoing in my mind
    While I lay here in a state of depression
    The rhythm, the melody and the words
    All seem to find the right expression

    The song was boring into my mind
    It?s about the useless things in regret
    On things that you wished you didn?t do
    It?s also about someone you want to forget

    Time moves on, the song goes
    You can?t stay down there doing nothing
    Because if you couldn?t rise from your woes
    It doesn?t make you part of the living

    And then it dawned in me
    That the universe is vast
    There are still many things to do
    Aside from looking at the past

    Agitation, fear, and paranoia
    All disappeared from me at that moment
    And immediately I felt new feelings
    Happiness, freedom, and anger were evident

    Suddenly I felt free like the wind
    It was as if I?m free from my own chains
    Sadness was gone and I was happy
    And inside, I couldn?t feel the pains

    As the song ends, I felt new
    The last strumming of the guitar
    Was just so beautiful to hear
    Even though I have this unbearable scar

    My broken heart was mended
    Every piece fitted in place
    I stood up and stretched my arms
    Even with a wide smile on my face
     
    We can double post like the fanfiction forums, right? O_o Here's for Valentine's Day! ^__^

    Love Is A Mystery

    Love is a very mysterious thing
    It can be this warm feeling inside
    A feeling of longing or happiness
    Or something that is so hard to hide

    Love can be the sun whereas it shines
    Down at two lovers sitting together
    They would be holding each other?s hands
    Today under such a fine weather

    Love can also be the rhymes in this poem
    It?s every word escaping my lips
    Sweet like nectar from a beautiful flower
    Soft like cotton through my fingertips

    Love can be the weight of a human heart
    It?s the guide that leads my soul to her
    Love can be anything in this world
    It?s also the thing that makes my spirit stir

    Love can bring down the strongest man ever
    It can bind that man in love?s strong chains
    Love can make that man weak and powerless
    But it can also take away his pains

    And yet love can also be so cold and so cruel
    When one longs for someone, they become love?s fool
    What exactly is love? One might question
    Is it a feeling or is it an obsession?

    When these questions are left unanswered
    We could only ask ourselves: ?What is love??
    To me, love is a very vast mystery
    It could be or could not be the things above
     
    Back
    Top