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Only Spirals -- A Romantic Horror Story

KaniTheri

The Lopunny Queen
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    16
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    I wrote this a few days ago and have been seeking critique. The plot is somewhat difficult to describe, but even though it gets off to a slow start it builds up to a story that I've heard is chilling and gripping. I'd love suggestions for improvement.

    Story Rating: I'd call this a heavy PG-13. There are allusions to mature subjects, and while it's tastefully executed and non-explicit I'd really advise against people below the age of 15 reading it. I can't control your actions, but that's my warning :) I'm hiding this under an age limit for this reason, as well as hiding it in spoiler for length.

    Edit: Age limit thing is confusing, just exercise discretion. :P

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