Origin of Legends

[Miss Reyna]

this is my 1st fan fiction and i hope you guys like it. i feel a bit nervous ,but here it goes. :nervous: oh this is a 4 part thing. hopefuly i can do all 4 parts.

Origin of Legends: The Begining

Long ago. Before history was written. There was a war between the pokemon of the world. Most of the fighting took place on an island far away from Kanto and any other lands. Many pokemon fought in this war, the pokemon in charge of these battles were the legendary pokemon of the Kanto, Johto, and Hoenn region. The war began because of a disagreement between the fire and the water type pokemon. Then the others pokemon types got involve and then the legendary pokemon came. Then a group of pokemon trainers with the help of magic made a pokemon from the sorrow and pain from all the fallen pokemon. This pokemon was a dual type of fire and water. It had a flygon looking head but it had two spikes on it head. It had a snake like body with arms and long nail like fingers. It was as big as a colosseum. It was black all over and it had patches of blue and red scales on some spots. It name was Kileta. It?s eyes were sad looking. This pokemon was made to stop the fighting, but the only way it knew how to stop the fighting was to destroy the world. When the legendary pokemon heard about plan. They all banded together to stop Kileta with the help of a great pokemon trainer. The legendary pokemon came from all three regions. From the Kanto region came Mew and the Legendary Birds. Representing the Johto region was Celebi, Ho-oh, Lugia, and the Legendary Dogs. Last from the Hoenn region was Rayquaza, Groudon, Kyogre, Latios, Latias, Jirachi, and the Regis pokemon. The Legendary Trainer came from the land the war was fought on. The pokemon and the trainer fought Kileta on the largest mesa of the land. The battles between these pokemon shape the look of the whole world. Then the Legendary Trainer did a spell that made all the Legendary pokemon fighting for good give a little of their power to his pokemon and made a final attack on Kileta to stop him. This attack left a burn mark on the mesa where Kileta was last at and is said that he is buried deep under the mesa waiting for the trainer to return. After this all the pokemon separated to there own homelands and the Legendary Trainer and his pokemon never to be seen again.

well that is it. like i said i hope you like it. the next one will be
Origin of Legend: The Hoenn Legends Featering the Regis Wait for it!

 

[Mr Cat Dog]

@_@ MY EYES!!! That was just one big long paragraph which made my precious short sighted eyes go beserk. You need to paragraph when you change the subject... and that means leaving a line... Anyways, to review:

The plot seems interesting, but it lacks real substance... like strawberries without cream (if you've been to Wimbledon you'll know what I mean). It feels like it's missing all the action since you didn't describe any of the battle. It would have made it look loads longer, but it would have been descriptive and much better (well, if you got the description part right). The description about Kileta was nice, but it was still a bit vague. How big exactly is a Colosseum? 30 feet? 40? 50? You need to be specific on these type of details if readers want to imagine the size of th4e beast. Other than that, and some grammar and spelling errors, this fic seems fine :D

~ MCD

 

[Miss Reyna]

orgin of legends:the hoenn legends Part 1

After the battle with Kileta. The legendary pokemon of Hoenn return back to their homeland only to find that it was in chaos. The legendary pokemon, Rayquaza, Groudon, Kyogre, Latios, Latias, Jirachi, and the Regis pokemon, then took their position as the governors of the region. With Groudon, Kyogre and Jirachi taking the high shogun position they told the other legendary pokemon what to do to bring order back to the land of Hoenn. Then Jirachi took it 1000 years nap, that when the problems started.
Groudon and Kyogre decide to fight about which one of them should get the head shogun position. This feud then leads to a fight just between these two pokemon. The Regis pokemon also join this battle in hoping to get a higher position since they got tired of doing all the hard dirty work. The fight between these 2 titans of the water and earth barely had any contact. They try to show who was the more powerful of the two by seeing who could cover more of the earth with their power. Groudon try covering the land by expanding the landmass using the sun intense rays. Kyogre try to flood the earth by bring a major downpour upon the world. The Regis pokemon were caught up in the middle and were in a worst position then they were with before. The others legendary pokemon saw the suffering that the Regis were having and they wanted to stop it. They try to ask them to stop the fighting but it look like Groudon and Kyogre were not going to stop. So that when Latios and Latias came up with an idea to stop the fighting. They decide to get the region wise and powerful pokemon wizards to help. Then their plan started to form. They plan was to get Groudon and Kyogre together by using the Regis pokemon to meet. Then Rayquaza will attack them. Then with the help of the pokemon wizards, Latios and Latias will use their Psychic powers to stop Groudon and Kyogre.
The battle between Groudon and Kyogre was still going on and the planet was half way cover in water and the other half in landmass. Then Registeel told Groudon that Regice was planning his own revolt and Regirock told Kyogre that Regice was going to revolt too. Both Groudon and Kyogre rush to Mt. Pyre. When they got there, Rayquaza attack with a Hyper Beam to Kyogre and Regice use a Blizzard attack on Groudon. They were both hit hard but they weren?t going to fall that easy. Kyogre use a Sheer Cold and Groudon use a Fissure. That when Latios and Latias use a Protect Attack to shield them and the fight continued. Groudon and Kyogre attack the Regis a lot to punish them for their unloyalty to them. This is when Latias and Latios stared the spell with the wizards. But Rayquaza was surrounded so he led both to the ocean. They both follow him but the psychic dragons stay their place and continued the spell. Rayquaza try to fight them but it was hard. He then tried to use a Twister to hit both of them but they survive but then Latios and Latias spell was finish and they both glow bright red and blue and that light change into 2 orbs. One was red the other was blue. Then Groudon glow red and Kyogre glow blue and then their spirits came out of them and they stop glowing and then went to the orbs and stay their. Then the bodies of Groudon and Kyogre fell into the ocean and sank to and underground cavern and stay there. The orbs then were place at the top of Mt. Pyre and the wizards hoping that these orbs will never be separated. If they are ever separated then the chaos that they witness will restart it self again and it could he worst.

:rambo:
well stay tune for part2

 

[Psychotic_Demon]

my...eyes...straining...to...hard *eyes pop out* LOL wow reyna, i like this story!
if you wants some tips and hints about writing pm me! :D

 

[Miss Reyna]

Orgin of Legends: hoenn legends part 2

When Jirachi woke up. He found the world in ruin. Half of the land was covered in water. The other half was cover by land. He saw that many people were dying because of these conditions. So he fix the problem the only way he knows how. He use his power to grant wishes to fix this. Jarachi stared to glow white and the tags on his head were turning into big orange balls of light. These balls were growing bigger and bigger until they cover the whole world. Then the world was back to normal. And everybody who was hurt because of the battle between Kyogre and Groudon were heal and Rayquaza, Latias and Latios appear before Jirachi to thatnk him. Jirachi was glad to see things were ok.

 

[Psychotic_Demon]

better...much better. this time only one eye poped out. :laugh: just kidding!