Poem thingy

Sean Fury

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    Years
    Depths of the streetlamp
    Street is cold, street is damp
    A once white moon, now colored blue
    Like the ocean, dark of hue
    A shadow crosses, just a blur
    Was it flesh, or was it fur?

    A stalking figure, at a glance
    Seems to dissapear, at a pass
    "Who is there?!" You call out
    No one answers, and so you pout
    You turn your back, "Only the wind."
    But was it wind, or was it 'him'?
    Iori Yagami says:
    Within the darkness, there is a crack
    You freeze in place, and turn your back
    "Who is there?!" You shout once more
    But you only hear the opening door
    You turn around, there is a house
    In the sill, you spy a mouse?

    "What is this?" You dare to wonder
    But travel in at the sound of thunder
    A distant cry, the sound of dead
    Your body shoots up, sweat drips from your head

    You realize it was just a nightmare
    But you turn your head, and at the door
    A shadowed figure, in the moor
    Then 'he' is there.
     
    nice job i liked your poem very much. very thrilling. (seriously! :) )

    i especially liked how you added the "oh, it's only a nightmare" thing and then, boom, the thing from the dream is there. kind of like jeepers creepers...oh, sorry, getting off topic.
     
    Thank-you ^^. I really didn't think it was good at all, but you've encouraged me to write more now...yay x.x
     
    I thought it was very good! Very good indeed. It was very realistic.
     
    Sweet Lady, that's good. reminds me a lot of Poe. You've got a lot of talent, and I mean a LOT. Please, do write more. If you don't mind, I'd like to post this on a couple other forums for critique.
     
    This one, I wrote just yesterday, is called "The Raven, Revisited". It's modeled after my favorite poem, "The Raven", and it's basically told from Poe's nephew's point of view (pretending he has one if he didn't). But anyway, here it is:

    I went to visit my dear uncle?s grave
    But upon arrival, my knees did gave
    From the call, which caused my fall
    A ghastly cry, shaking me to my core
    Quoth the Raven ?Nevermore?

    So I rose, for one last time
    Yelling at the beast for his rythme
    ?Go Raven, now, back to the shore
    You aren?t wanted, back to the shore!
    But alone called the Raven ?Nevermore?

    Wondering what to do, with the beast of ghastly hue
    I called to him, ?Come hither, I wish a better view.?
    Yet alone he sat, not to move, perched upon the stone
    I rose to meet him, but soon he had gone
    Calling behind, ?Nevermore.?

    Uncle?s house was rather silent
    Until I spied the Raven defiant
    Perched upon a painting of Lenore
    ?Down!? I called, ?To the floor!?
    But alone he called, ?Nevermore.?

    Upon uncle?s chamber finding
    The Raven soon despising
    A sickly smell that was rising
    In the chair and above the door
    No longer alone, quoth the Raven, ?Nevermore.?
     
    Yeah, double post, I know, but I can?t get online that often anymore and I wanted to post this one too!

    Thunder roars and lightning cracks
    Like the sound of a baseball bat
    People run and people flee
    While one man laughs with glee

    Dressed in black, cape and sword
    He kills without a single word
    No thought or expression cross his face
    He only lives to destroy this place

    All the Earth, shouts in fear
    As he draws ever near
    Reckless and wild, the bullets fly
    Screaming and whistling, they race by

    He doesn?t dodge, doesn?t move
    Just basks in the glory, of his blood hue
    With a last breath, he finally speaks
    ?Life is only for the weak.?
     
    That was a very good poem. :classic: :classic: :classic:
    Very well done!!!! :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:
     
    Since I have FINALLY gotten my computer back online, I think I will just bombard you all with a bunch of poems, sound good? I thought so. Just because I haven't posted any like this yet, these are five love poems dedicated to this girl I like...I actually wrote about twenty of them over the past few days, but I won't post them ALL :p

    Feelings
    Someting I don't normally discuss
    Because I don't want to cause a fuss
    These feelings of mine, so complicated
    Although they make me so irritated
    And always with the agitation
    Because when I turn the ignition
    My feelings burst from their hiding
    All this time, went into biding
    I've been peaceful, and waiting so very long
    So maybe I'll write, one more song
    To tell her my feelings, so very true
    I love you Auna, yes I do

    Take A Chance
    Though you've done this in the past
    Taken risks, that wouldn't last
    However, their mark remains
    It's still the same
    So perhaps I'll do this on my own
    May I have, one last dance?
    Just come with me, take a chance
    You may enjoy it, you'll never know
    That is, unless, you don't want to go
    But I'll understand
    Can't let it go to my head
    I'll be alright, and I won't die
    Just sit here alone and cry

    Endless
    Forever still
    You'll see the light
    Coming in the window sill
    And even in, the darknest night
    Keep your candle burning through
    For if your fire, is burning bright
    You will know, I miss you too
    But if it faulters, out of sight
    Don't worry, I will not forget you
    All my fights, my endless plight
    Everything is for you, all I do
    But even with all my might
    I can't make you say "I love you too"

    Love
    Pain driving inside of me
    From all these feelings I don't get
    But if you could only see
    How high the bar was set
    I think that you'd agree
    I shouldn't waste this bet
    On something that'll never be
    Like a fish, caut in a net
    Undoubting concern, this self-regret
    I can't stop, feeling this way
    I can't help it, getting harder to breath
    I feel like this, every single day
    I'll swear it until the day of my death
    But that's when you'll hear her say
    She'll swear those words unto me now
    I love you, forever now

    Auna
    A delicate face and meaningful eyes
    A personality that leaves nothing to despise
    Wonderful talents, like skillful fighting
    Such beauty you see, just like lightning
    A gracious smile, kind words too
    Speak with her, and be no longer blue
    Generous words with much gratitude
    Did I mention that sweet attitude?
    So many, many things...
    Yet so little synonums
     
    Well, since I received some praise on them, I guess I'll post some more. Oh, and not like you all care, but the girl (Auna), is falling in love with me :D (or so I've heard).

    The Last Kiss
    Now that it's finally come down to this
    Maybe we can speak alone
    Everyday, my chance is amiss
    But I always act like a stone
    While the others hiss
    I just want, you to throw me a bone
    And give me just, one last kiss

    Not Just a Crush
    Why is it, always like this
    All I want, is one dumb kiss
    Fragile lips, spit so sweet
    All I want, is a kiss so deep
    I love her so, so very much
    It's much more, then just a crush
    What kind of prood do you want?
    I'll take any test and I will not fault
    I'll prove my love, just wait and see
    For something that, should really be
    Someday, she'll be with me, for eternity

    Just a Day
    I hate to say this, but I have to say
    There is no one, for me today
    But even with, flowers of May
    And fresh water of the bay
    I'm certain this, won't be okay
    All I ask, is for a single day
    A single day without your pay
    Spend time with me, and maybe, hey
    A good time, sure, call it gay
    Even though, please don't vote nay
    For it would be my happiest day

    [Please ignore spelling errors and/or messed up words, I typed these late at night]
     
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