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Poke'mon Elemental

Jake

Pearly White Dream
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    • Seen Apr 4, 2012
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    this is great but you will need more epsoide comics to make this one great one a day will get untreatable
     
    i kno #2 is coming out in a couple minutes
    so has #3
     
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    Alright first off, the trainer is a re-color that's not good. They're a few minor grammar mistakes, your battlefield and effects suck. Word bubbles are to big at times, also if your going to put your text to the sides put names before what they say. I mean sure it's obvious who's, who. But some people might still get confused. Overall this comic isn't to good, also to me the Lapras seems like a godmodder with the whole talking thing. Anyways I give this comic a 3/10.
     
    yea i saw were i messed up on the talking lapras grammar i spelled know wrong in #2 and the recolor took me like 10 seconds, so n e ideas how to improve it? Are u saying maybe i should make a different comic?
     
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    should i make a new start and make a different comic though?
     
    i dont c were i messed up on the recolors and my new comic is going 2 b called "The Characters", i dont kno y, but it will feature Jake and some special faces from the show
    Tracey
    Drew
    Richie
    Max
    Ash
    May
    Brock
    https://i6.tinypic.com/120mmb6.png
    all done me except ash, and look at brocks clothes were its orange, you will c that its the anime style,in other words, without the circle, and i added wes from colosseum
     
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    you didnt mess up on the recor its that recolors suck in sprite comics ya need to put more work into it
    now time fore some crits..

    talking lapras:NO.usually talking pokemon arnt good,put what they say in (-text here-)

    recolors:like i said before,get more origonal

    1 big panel:NO it would be better if there are more panels and why is there a regice in water?!?!it would sink.

    things to work on:ok,you should put waves to show that the pokemon are in the water.fix up the trainer OW,more panels,no talking lapras,and like he said,catching lapras as a started is kinda godmodding
     
    The Bad.....Is There Good?

    Dont Take This Rating Offensive Take It As Info To Learn How To Make Your Comic Better....


    The Bad:
    -Talking Lapras Is Kind Of Poorly Introduced, Im Not Agianst Talking Pokemon Seeing As My Comic Has One But If Your Going To Have One You Need To Put More Effort Into Its Character Rather Then Acting Like Some First Battle In Generic (Annoying) Comics.
    -You Need Panels...No One Screen Because Then You Cant Go From Place To Place....
    -I've Seen many Many Many Many Many Generic (Trainer Journey) Comics Fail Here So Dont Get Too Generic With This
    -Agian The Panels Sort Of Ruin It And Make The Comic Less Exciting...And The Speech Bubbles On The Side Just Plain Stink.
    -The Hero Is A Recolor....No...No...No....Bad.
    -Starting In A Cave Isnt Really A Good Intro Because We Dont Know What This Guys Backround Is, Where He's From, Or What Region This Comic's In.....And Using Icons Like That All Together With A Real Overworld Pokemon Dont Generally Mixwell And It Looks Sloppy.....
    -The Sprites Have Room For Improvment....Tracey Looks Like A Transvestite....Max Looks Like An Ugly 30 Year Old Man........And Drew Is Adult Looking As Well....

    The Good:
    -Ughm....You Have 11 Posts! Yay!

    Overall Raiting 3/10....Improve
     
    thnx, yea this is my first comic, so thank u all, ill try 2 improve, right now im trying to make sprites from guys on the show
    (i like the tracy 1)
     
    Jake said:
    And if any one wants to help just ask. I need more sprites and ideas. I'll even take your characters.


    I don't think you will...Joining comics is now against the rules and has been for a little while now...

    My Main comment is try not to use recolurs with paint defaults. and don't get too generic...
     
    sry,should i make a new comic and remake everything, make it totally different?
     
    No need...Just follow the tips of some experienced comic makers...
     
    2 late, i kind of already started, my new comic
     
    OK...Fair enough...hope this next comic will be great! and if you don't need this thread anymore, have it closed...
     
    well i need a mod to close this down, i think this is a start of a wonderful thing
     
    well i'll try, but who nows wut it will be like
     
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