Pokemon Master Journey (the comic)

[frogla]

Pokemon Master Journey

Ill make a real title later but for now i post the first few pages of my first comic.

Info
well.. i reveal this as the comic goes

Prolouge
Cover
Page 1
Page 2

Rate it please and heres credits.

Video Game Atlas- SOme maps
Shyguys Kingdom- Some extra people
MD- POkemon Sprites except Manyula i made it.

Oh yes i used text boxes to start with cuz i diddnt really begin speech until the story but tell me which is better

 

[The Dash]

Ok,
First off I like the fact that you got proper overworlds for the Pokemon and dident just use their Icons, thats a rare factor. You switched from speech bubbles to text boxes, you need to stick to one of the kind. In the speech bubbles I couldent read the text easly, Use a Pokémon font. Do the same for the text boxes. Add some ripples around the Lapras to make it look more like its in the water, try and add borders to your text boxes and frames. Not bad overall just work on the things I said.
5/10

 

[♥Naomi♥]

i like the fact you used the sprites from pokemon mystery dungeon.where did you get them?
i like the idea of the story,but overall i think the text and the way the boxes are set up could be improved.
7/10

 

[Chizzy]

Komo: You can Rip the Sprites Yourself :p or find various sprite sheets on the Net.

Its a Good Start, but as Already said stick to one form of Text. I tend to use speech bubbles with Veranda, size 7. Its not a journey Comic, so thumbs up there. Id like to see how you go with this story, and to see you maintain this comic.

 

[SuperGuy]

i think its good, though i like all sprite comics XD. keep up the work

 

[Fox♠]

I dislike the way you used mysterious dungeon sprites the way you did, there;s a reasont aht mixing bitages is usually frowned upon, especially when the Pidgey is now bigger than the trainer.

 

[Chizzy]

Yeah...Frogla, could you send me the MD sprites please...I'll give Credit...

and when is the next episode...this comic kinda seems dead...