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Pokemon Sinnoh

Shino_Black_Card

Hikozaru PWNS!!
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    • Seen Jul 28, 2007
    This is my first Fan fiction. I hope you all enjoy.
    Chapter 1- Arrival into the Sinnoh Region​

    Tyler took a seat close to a nearby rail. Tyler was on his way to the Sinnoh region to live with his mother. Tyler had been living with his grandparents in Johto for the past few weeks while his mother got moved into their new house. Today was Tyler's 12th birthday. Tyler had only one pokemon and it was his trusty Korinku nicknamed Spark. Korinku stood on Tyler's right shoulder smelling the fresh air and looking into the sea seeing Goldeen, Seaking, and even the occasional Horsea.

    "Hey Spark were almost to the Sinnoh region," Tyler said as he looked over the railing over the railing of the ferry. Tyler was about the normal height of a 12-year-old 5'0 and weighed 100 pounds. Tyler had raven black hair and sea blue eyes. Tyler had been wearing a pair of light blue baggy pants, a black shirt with a white hoop on the bottom, and a pair of black & white gloves showing his knuckles and up. Korinku was a small mix of a blue & black color pokemon. Korinku had yellow dizzy eyes, and a short black tail, at the end of his tail was a small star. Korinku didn't like the going inside his pokeball for unknown reasons, so he just rested upon Tyler's shoulder. Tyler's grandfather had given Korinku to Tyler at a young age of seven after his grandfather had his Blaziken save it from a pack a stampeding Taurous. As Tyler and Spark stood their the intercom of the ferry crackled over a small speaker.

    "All guest we are just 10 minutes away from the beautiful region of Sinnoh. I hope you have all enjoyed this trip from Johto," The captain said over the intercom.

    "Hear that Spark just a few minutes and we can see my mom in Futaba Town," Tyler said.

    "Korin," Korinku cried, as he climbs off Tyler's right shoulder and hops to his left.

    It was a few minutes before the ferry stopped and both Tyler and Korinku were in Futaba Town in the region of Sinnoh. As Tyler walked off the ferry he was greeted by a familiar voice.

    "Welcome home son," A woman said, as she greeted Tyler.

    "Mom,!" Tyler exclaimed, as he hugged the woman.

    "So son has was grandma and grandpa's place in Johto," Tyler's mom asked.

    "It was fun and grandpa gave me this Korinku. Say hello Spark," Tyler said.

    "Korin," Korinku said, with a smile.

    "Hello cutie," Tyler's mom said with a smile.

    "Come on Tyler let's go home," Tyler's mom said with a warm smile on her face. Tyler picked up his backpack and followed his mom. As the two walked home Tyler's mom picked Pecha berries off a trees that they walked by and put them into a small basket.

    The two arrive home.
    "Wow mom this place is awesome,!" Tyler exclaimed.

    "I know and it was cheap too," Tyler's mom said.

    "Hey mom I have some great news tomorrow morning I'm going to start my very own pokemon journey," Tyler said happily.

    "Really well tomorrow you will receive a small gift from me before you leave," Tyler's mom said as she drank a cup of tea. Tyler and his mother talked for a few hours until it was 9:30 P.m.

    "Well mom I'm going to take a quick shower and go to sleep," Tyler said, as he yawned.

    "Okay, tomorrow morning I will have all your items packed and ready along with your special gift," Tyler's mom said. Tyler walked up stairs and got into the shower knowing tomorrow morning he was going to be a pokemon trainer.

    To Be Continued......
     
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    Chapter 2-Starting A Journey!​

    The sun shined into Tyler's new room waking him up immediatly. Spark was sleeping next to Tyler's pillow. As Tyler woke up along with Spark he put on his normal clothes. A pair of light blue baggy pants, a black shirt with a white hoop on the bottom, and a pair of black & white gloves showing his knuckles and up.

    "Well Spark we both know what today is," Tyler said looking at his starter pokemon.

    "Korin," Korinku cried with a smile. Tyler walked down his brown stair case to see his mother wraping a small gift.

    "Happy late Birthday son,!" Tyler's mom said, holding Tyler's gift.

    "Thanks mom," Tyler said, as he grabbed the gift. Tyler opened the wraping paper and opened to box to reveal a Poketech.

    "Mom how did you know I wanted one of these," Tyler said, as he ut on his Poketech. Poketech was a watch like device, the band a sky blue. The screen in the center was a light green, which lit up to display the time, but Poketech has 20 upgrades.

    "Tyler when you get to Kotobuki City and face the gym leader call me," Tyler's mom said, as her son walked off into a nearby forest with 5 pokeballs on his belt and a pokedex in his backpocket given to him by Professer.Elm. Tyler walked into the forest to pass a sign saying "Route 202".

    As Tyler walked into the forest he heard the echoe of a girl yell "Shadow Ball" and a boy yell "Flamethrower". Spark hopped of Tyler's shoulder and ran twoards the sound of people and Tyler followed after. As Tyler and Spark ran toward the sound of people they noticed a girl handing over a pokeball to the boy.

    "Hey give that girl back her pokemon,!" Tyler exclaimed.

    "Why she betted her poor Eevee and lost to my Houndour," The boy said.

    "Alright I'll make you a deal if you win can keep her pokemon and my Spark as well, but if I win you give that girl back her Eevee.

    "Fine Houndour go," the boy said snapping his fingers. A houndour walked from behind him and growled at Tyler.

    "Spark go," Tyler said. Spark walked onto the battle field.

    "Houndour use Take-down,!" The boy commanded.

    "Spark dodge and use Thunderbolt,!" Tyler commanded. Houndour threw himself at Spark only to miss. Spark charged his body with electricity and shocked Houndour doing some damage.

    "Now use Thunderbolt again!," Tyler commanded. Spark shot a blast of electricity at Houndour paralyzing him.

    "Now finish this this with Irontail,!" Tyler commanded. Spark's tail turned a bright white and hardend as he bashedthe top Houndour's head causing him to faint.

    "All right Spark return,!" Tyler commanded. Spark jumped back onto Tyler's shoulder.

    "Now give me back Eevee Jason,!" The girl commanded.

    "Fine,!" Jason exclaimed as he handed the pokeball to the girl.

    "Now leave,!" Tyler commanded. Jason ran away with Houndour right behind him.

    "Thank you so much," The girl said with a smile on her face.

    "No problem," Tyler said.

    "Korin," Korinku cried. The little girl walked to Futaba Town while Tyler headed North near twoards Masago Town a reststop for tyler on his way to Kotobuki City.

    To Be Contiued...
     
    Chapter 3- Hikozaru The Prankster Pokemon!​
    As Tyler and his starter Spark slept under a tree a Hikozaru stood into a tree above them plotting with an arm full of Pecha and Oran berries. Hikozaru dropped all the berries onto the two waking them up.

    "Hey who did that," Tyler exclaimed as he woke up.

    "Hiko," Hikozaru cried laughing. Tyler and Spark looked up to see Hikozaru laughing.

    "I wonder what Dexter has to say about this, pokemon?" Tyler said as he took out his pokedex.

    "Hikozaru The Young Monkey Pokemon. It climbs up cliff walls agilely and lives on top of rock mountains. Its flame goes out when it is asleep. Hikozaru was about the size of Korinku. Hikozaru was a light red color and had a fang sticking out the right side corner of his mouth. Hikozaru had a small flame on his tail resembling a Charmander.

    "Alright Spark were going to catch him," Tyler said, as he put away his pokedex. "Spark use Thunderbolt,!" Tyler commanded. Spark changed his body with electricity and shot a bolt of electricity, only to miss and be hit by a blast of fire. Hikozaru jumped through the trees laughing.

    "Spark, let's go!" Tyler commanded. Spark stood up and hopped onto his shoulder as he ran after Hikozaru. Hikozaru swung from tree to tree with Tyler right behind him. As Tyler ran with Spark on his shoulder, Tyler bumped into a girl sending Korinku flying off his shoulder.

    "Hey, watch where you're going!" The girl yelled.

    "Sorry," Tyler yelled as he ran towards Spark. "You okay buddy,"

    "Korin," Spark cried, as he hopped onto Tyler's shoulder. Tyler continued to chase after Hikozaru.

    (Meanwhile)​
    "Isn't dat great wes deals with one set of twerps and now wes have new one," A Meowth said.

    "Yes but that Korinku of his is very strong," A woman said.

    "Yes but Jessie won't we just get shocked by his Korinku's Thunder attacks." A man said looking worried.

    "On the contraire James we have our electric proof net and cage," Jessie said.

    "Oh then in that case let's steal it," James said.

    "Idiots," Meowth said under his breath only to be hit twice on each side of the head.

    (Tyler)​
    Tyler continued to chase after Hikozaru until it was cornered.

    "Alright, Spark use Thunderbolt!" Tyler commanded. Spark jumped off his shoulder and shot a bolt of electricity at Hikozaru doing some damage. Hikozaru sped at Spark using Quickattack and blew fireballs from his mouth doing damage to Spark.

    "Spark, use Irontail!" Tyler commanded. Spark's tail turned white as he bashed Hikozaru under his legs causing him to hit lift into the air.

    "Now, finish this with Tackle!" Tyler commanded. As Hikozaru was still in the air Spark jumped and threw himself at Hikozaru.

    "Now, Pokeball go!" Tyler commanded. Tyler pulled a pokeball from his belt and threw it at the fainted Hikozaru. Once...Twice...PING!

    "Alright, buddy we caught a Hikozaru!" Tyler yelled, as he picked up his pokeball and added to his belt slot.

    "Well, Spark look's like we have a new partner on are team." Tyler said looking at his pokeball. "I think I'll name him Lil'Blaze, because he's little and I bet his fire packs a punch."

    "Korin," Spark cried. Tyler, Spark, and their new teamate Lil'Blaze walk down a road waiting for what adventures are waiting ahead.
    To Be Contiued.....
     
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    ...0.0 You REALLY like typing "Tyler", don't you??

    The beginning was just bleh with all those choppy sentences...you're giving away too much too fast. Add in all the grammar and spelling mistakes...and you have a LOT of work to do to fix it.

    And try using "he" more often instead of "Tyler".

    C-
     
    ...0.0 You REALLY like typing "Tyler", don't you??

    The beginning was just bleh with all those choppy sentences...you're giving away too much too fast. Add in all the grammar and spelling mistakes...and you have a LOT of work to do to fix it.

    And try using "he" more often instead of "Tyler".

    C-
    For some reason I had a feeling you would reply in my fic.... but anyways sorry about the D/P starter thing and i will try to replace "Tyler" with "He"
     
    Chapter 4- Mukkuru of The Flock!​
    As Tyler and Spark walk down the path of Route 203 they both notice a flock of small Mukkuru flying over head.

    "Wow, Spark look at that!" Tyler said, as he looked up at the small gray starling pokemon.

    "Korin," Korinku cried. As the two watched the pokemon fly overhead they both noticed a falling object.

    "What's that?" Tyler asked. As they watched the falling object he noticed what it was.

    "It's a Mukkuru!" Tyler yelled." Go, Lil'Blaze and catch that pokemon!" Tyler commanded. Lil'Blaze materialized from his pokeball and jumped off a nearby tree a caught the bird pokemon, only to land with a thud. Tyler and Spark ran towards the two pokemon.

    "Alright, Lil'Blaze good work" Tyler said. Lil'Blaze hopped on his other shoulder. He picked up the injured pokemon, to notice it's wing's bone was out of place.

    "Dang, he's been hurt pretty badly." Tyler said, as he held the small pokemon. Mukkuru was a small bird pokemon no bigger than a Pidgey. Mukkuru had a a mixture of brown and white feathers. It had a small head and a long beak with a mixture of orange and brown. He set the pokemon on the ground along with his backpack. he dug through his backpack until he found some wound wrapping for the bird pokemon. Tyler wrapped the bandage around the Mukkuru's injured wing.

    "Well guys, we might as well take a break and have us some food." Tyler suggested. Tyler poured a small amount of pokemon food into 3 dishes. Spark and Lil'Blaze ate their food.

    "Hey, Mukkuru aren't you hungry?" Tyler asked, as he took a bite from his sandwich. Mukkuru walked towards his bowl and ate a little of the pokemon food .

    "See,now isn't that allot better then starving?" Tyler asked, with a smile on his face.

    "Mukku," Mukkuru cried in happiness. Mukkuru, Tyler, Spark, and Lil'Blaze contiued to their food and play, when Mukkuru broke the bandage on his wing and flew into the air.

    "Alright, Mukkuru, you're flying!" Tyler yelled

    "Mukku," Mukkuru cried in happiness. Mukkuru flew at Hikozaru knocking him to the ground.

    "Oh I get it you want to battle me. Well I never walk away from a challenge" Tyler said. "Lil'Blaze, time for your first battle." Tyler said. Lil'Blaze hopped onto his feet ready to fight.

    "Alright, Lil'Blaze use Ember!" Tyler commanded. Lil'Blaze shot small fireballs from his mouth at Mukkuru, only to miss. Mukkuru flew into Hikozaru knocking to the floor again.

    "Dang! That must have been a Wingattack," Tyler said to himself

    "Alright, Lil'Blaze, use Ember again!" Tyler commanded. Lil'Blaze shot another array of fireballs at Mukkuru only hitting four times causing him to fall from the sky a little.

    "Now, finish this with Tackle!" Tyler commanded. Hikozaru threw his body at Mukkuru causing him to fly into a tree.

    "Alrigh, Pokeball GO!" Tyler commanded. He threw the pokeball at the fallen pokemon. Once.....Twice.....PING!

    "Alright, we caught Mukkuru!" Tyler announced, as he held the pokeball in the air. "I guess we can name him Cruz, because well.... I don't have a reason yet, but I will find one soon," Tyler said, as he sweatdropped.

    "Well, Lil'Blaze return!" Tyler commanded. He took a pokeball from his belt slot as a red thin beam shot from the middle as Lil'Blaze dematerialized into the small pokeball.

    "Well, Spark, the map says were only a few hours from Masago Town where my Battle Tournament is and 2 days from Kotobuki City where my Gym Battle with Hyouta is." Tyler said, as he folded the small map and put it in his pocket. The two walked down the road waiting for what adventures ly ahead.
    To be Contiued.....
     
    Tyler had only one pokemon and it was his trusty Korinku

    I thought Korinku were native to Sinnou and not Johto. And since he's traveling from Johto to Sinnou, I'm a little curious how he got a Korinku, was it given to him as a present, explain to us.

    "So son how was grandma and grandpa's place in Johto," Tyler's mom asked.

    back pocket given to him by Professor. Elm.

    Just some of the grammar issues you seem to have, might I recommend a beta reader.

    When you put Team Rocket in this fic, it would be boring for them to act like the same idiots like they did in the anime, so change them around a bit, make them a bit more powerful, introduce them somewhat into a possible plot.

    I'm also just seeing that there isn't anything really different from the standard game/anime plot so give him something else to worry about, put twists and turns in his path. Make him somewhat interseting.
     
    I'm also just seeing that there isn't anything really different from the standard game/anime plot so give him something else to worry about, put twists and turns in his path. Make him somewhat interseting.

    I couldn't have put it better myself! You have grammar issues, length of chapter issues, and I can only put up with those because you're new to the scene... but bad or boring plots are inexcusable. Somebody famous once said of young writers, "Unless you think you can do better then Tolstoy, we don't need you." While I don't agree one hundred percent with that, I do happen to hold the belief that all writing should be taken seriously, and writing "just for fun" is great, but it shouldn't be viewed as an excuse to write badly. Writing badly should be the eighth deadly sin. Anyway, improve or risk incurring the wrath of a very bad-tempered ACC!

    The rating on the ACC scale: Four out of a possible Ten. Improve your fic, the score goes up. You don't give a Rapidash's tail about the score? Well, I don't give one about you, in that case. As I have said, "The ultimate form of writer abuse is to ignore him or her..."
     
    I thought Korinku were native to Sinnou and not Johto. And since he's traveling from Johto to Sinnou, I'm a little curious how he got a Korinku, was it given to him as a present, explain to us.





    Just some of the grammar issues you seem to have, might I recommend a beta reader.

    When you put Team Rocket in this fic, it would be boring for them to act like the same idiots like they did in the anime, so change them around a bit, make them a bit more powerful, introduce them somewhat into a possible plot.

    I'm also just seeing that there isn't anything really different from the standard game/anime plot so give him something else to worry about, put twists and turns in his path. Make him somewhat interseting.
    Yeah the whole Korinku thing, well it's kinda like how May got her Munchlax. While she was Hoenn she caught Munchlax(Well Munchlax ate the pokeball) and Munchlax are native to Sinnou. Yeah I forgot why I put Team Rocket in my fic I think I had a bad case of writers block. Now when you say " Put twists and turns in his path what do you mean?Oh yeah ACC I'll try to work on my fic as best as possible I don't want to fell the wrath of anybody right about now.
     
    Tyler and his trusty pal Spark walk a brick road until they notice a boy chasing after a Pochama.

    "Bubbles get back here!" The boy yelled chasing after his Pokemon. The Pochama continued to run away laughing.

    "Spark, let's help out and use a Thunderbolt in front of the Pochama!" Tyler commanded. Spark jumped of his shoulder and shot a bolt of electricity in front of the pokemon scaring the Pochama causing him fall on his butt.

    "Hey, what did you do that for?" The boy asked in anger.

    "I was just trying to help," Tyler, answered.

    The boy was about as tall as Tyler and h had hair waved to the sides. He was wearing a dark red shirt, and blue jeans with black and white shoes on carrying a yellow and green backpack.

    "Alright, if you want to hurt my Bubbles, you're going to have to pay for that." The boy yelled. "And I say a three on three battle one Pokemon each!"


    "Fine by me!" Tyler yelled." But before we begin what's your name?"

    "My name is Deisser," Deisser answered. The two boys walked a few feet away from each other.


    "Alright, Go Sandy!" Deisser commanded. He threw his pokeball as a Hipopotas materialized from it. Hipopotas was a medium sized Pokemon. He was a dark and light brown camouflage mix. He had two large nostrils, large open eyes and fall ears. He had a short tail and small feet.

    "Darn! A ground type I only pokemon that a weak against those types," Tyler said to himself. "Alright, Go Cruz!" Tyler commanded. Tyler threw his pokeball into the air as Mukkuru materialized from it.

    "Alright, Sandy, use Takedown!" Deisser commanded.

    "Cruz, dodge and use Wingattack!" Tyler commanded. Sandy threw its body at Cruz only to miss and lose balance.

    "NOW!" Tyler commanded. Cruz flew into Sandy hard and smacked her with his wings.

    "Sandy, use Sandstorm!" Deisser commanded. Sandy rose to her feet and jumped causing a large wind of sand.

    "Cruz fly out of the sandstorm and use Peck!" Tyler commanded.
    Cruz flew out of the sandstrom and flew back in.

    "NOW!" Deisser commanded. Sandy shot up from the ground and threw her body at Cruz, causing him to faint.

    "Alright, that's one for me and zero for you." Deisser said.

    "Yeah, for now that is." Tyler said."Cruz, return!" Tyler commanded. A red light shot from the pokeball as Cruz dematerialized into it."Alright, go Lil'Blaze!" Tyler commanded. He threw the pokeball as a Hikozaru matialized from it.

    "Alright, LilBlaze let's start things off with a Headbutt!" Tyler commanded. Lil'Blaze threw his head at Sandy knocking her back a few feet.

    "Sandy, use Earthquake!" Deisser commanded.

    "Jump on her back and give her and Ember!" Tyler commmanded.
     
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    Put twists and turns in his path what do you mean

    I mean, differences in the plot, don't just do the whole beat the evil orgnazation, become a pokemon master plot, catch legendary pokemon. Use your imaganation, make the plot slightly different, put different events in certain parts of your story.

    This latest chapter my friend was boring, just a trainer encounter and a battle which probalay won't lead to anything important later. We need some of your imaganation, we need some orginality, we need you to read the fanfiction guide which is in one of the fanfiction subforums.
     
    This latest chapter my friend was boring, just a trainer encounter and a battle which probalay won't lead to anything important later. We need some of your imaganation, we need some orginality, we need you to read the fanfiction guide which is in one of the fanfiction subforums.

    Yeah, I know... I read that before beggining my first fanfic. Next time, I'll read harder. I can't figure out how a plot is going to unfold in that one... I wanted something truly original, and all the rocket plots were taken. I need a plot. Oh, well, I'll get 'em with my humour fic!
     
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