Rawr!

[Agent9]

Yes sorry about the title. I couldn't think of anything. This is my first poem/song/whatever. My friend wrote something like this so I changed it to my version. Please be nice...you can critisize me after 5 or 6 poems. In this poem, I am talking to an invisible girl.

Me and her
We were always together,
and we'd use to say,
we'd love each other forever,
You made me laugh,
I made you smile,
everytime I was with you, it was worthwhile.

Remember our memory of us holding hands,
talking 'bout the future and making plans,
knowing in our hearts it was the beggining of "Our everafter"
We realized there could never be,
anyone, but you and me.

Then one day, we had the news,
You and your family had to leave.
There wasn't anything we could do.

Then I turned and watched you drive away,
all my sunshine turned to rain.
I don't wanna feel like that again.

 

[Horsegirl11]

wow,that was awsome!Good job! :D

 

[shadoweyes11]

WOW!!!! I luv it Awesome!!Good work maybe you can make somemore nice and wonderful^^

 

[Agent9]

Wow. It was only my first one too!

 

[Envy]

That really is a great poem! Good job!!^^

 

[Agent9]

Yay! My poem is actually getting good comments. I'm gonna make another one soon

 

[Random Plushie]

Wow! That was awesome! Great job, Cloud, Destroyer of Worlds! XD

 

[Cybex Mewtwo]

For a first timer you did a half decent job. But, as time marches on so will your skills, so keep at it!

 

[Sumomo & Kotoko]

OMG, and thats your first one? I like it, alot. :D

*would give rep but they got rid of it*

 

[phantom_zangetsu]

wow! how inspiring! nice i love it! you have someone in mind dont you? thats how you made the poem right?

 

[Agent9]

You bet death bringer! she's very dear to my heart!