Strive

[Pogiforce-14]

I really don't know where this came from... I was suddenly hit with inspiration from out of the blue, and sat down and wrote this, letting the words hit the paper and only looked at it when it was done. I'm not sure what to think of it, but I feel this poem maybe incidentally be deeper than I know. Some feedback would be appreciated most sincerely.

Strive
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When in doubt, find the best way out.
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Don?t be a fool or be a cheat,
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and do wrong to everyone you meet.
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For what goes around comes around
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and bury you underneath the ground;
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no marker, gravestone, or dirt mound
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for which your body can be found
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No family and friends can mourn your fate
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for being sensible a little too late,
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inspiring nothing but loath and hate
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for doing nothing considered top rate.
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If you do nothing but abuse
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what you?ve got, then you?re gonna loose
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everything, even your right to choose,
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?tween right and wrong and soon the news
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will write you off as a drinker of booze
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for thinking through life you?d cruise
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off your friends backs and Man?s refuse.
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Don?t play it slow or take the easy way out.
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Thinking you?ll take the shorter route
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will only teach you all about
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how life ain?t easy without a doubt.
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The short will turn long and leave you behind
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amongst the garbage in the daily grind
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digging through trash, hoping you?ll find
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something to get you back to the top you used to know
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before society turned you down, treated you like a show
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laughed at your thinking you?d get somewhere far
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through inside men and cheating, buying your boss a new car.
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The world don?t fly like that anymore.
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Wheeling and dealing don?t get you a score.
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Needless risks, bad choices, bleeding the poor
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don?t work now, never worked before.
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You gotta do your best, and give what you can
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and prove that you are the better man
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who didn?t walk to work, but ran
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and will strive even when things hit the fan.
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Success comes from giving your all
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and getting up after every fall
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so when you walk down that corporate hall,
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it?s your name on the door, observed by all.
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And those cheats will be pushing carts by the mall
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for they did not heed the call
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And will not be where you will be
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for they were unable to see
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wrong from right and right from wrong.
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Where they heard noise you heard the song
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and where they coasted you gave it all you got
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which brought you to the highest spot
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so you can be what they are not.
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[Kyosuke]

Wow, this really is some positive poetry. It started off in a dark way, sort of mad at the world, then turned into positivity of what will happen not taking the easy way out of situations all the time, and how it will pay off later in life.

Once again this was nicely written, and sometimes it can get hard to write good poetry thats from inside, without much to any inspiration.

 

[Pogiforce-14]

Thanks! I'm glad you appreciate it! :)