sunrise

[soulslayer]

SUNRISE


when i awake up,i never stop thinking
above you,each time you go away,make me think
in you.every time you leave make me dead inside,
every thing is sunrises without you.
makes think above you,becase everything is above
you,if the sunrise was not like you,i wiil not think
above you,but no,becase the sunrise is you,End



soulslayer




its alitle short>_<but is says everything i think,other thing is kind of song.

 

[EvIL_CAjUN_CHIkIN]

It's pretty good, the format could be better for the reader to better understand the poem, but other than that... it's pretty swell! XD

 

[soulslayer]

thanks xd,i was thinlking lenthen it more but then it be not with the rhyme,