The F.O.D.

[Casual Billy]

WARNING: IF YOU DO NOT HAVE AN OPEN-MIND WHEN IT COMES TO THE POWERS AND ABILITIES OF LEGENDARY POKEMON SUCH AS CELEBI, suck it up and read anyway? j/k. DON'T SAY ANYTHING ABOUT IT BECAUSE THIS FIC IS IN NO WAY RELATED TO AND IN NO WAY BOUND BY THE CIRCUMSTANCES OR BOUNDARIES PRESENTED IN THE ANIME/GAMES.

CHAPTER 1

?Hey, wake up.? The two strange travelers lay in a grassy spot on the ground. Jay had awoken first of the two and he now turned his head to his left so that he might face his fellow wanderer. Celia?s dim and unconscious countenance lay so beautifully intertwined with the blades all about her, that Jay almost decided against waking her. But as the day drew nigh, uncertainties about this place into which they had fled also drew close. The sun slowly rose to Jay?s left side and light stretched out across the expansive land that separated the daybreak?s origin from their place of rest. Jay poked Celia?s delicate shoulder this time, trying to call her from her slumber. She had a right to exhaustion, though. Their journey here had not been an easy or pleasant one. It had taken from them most of the strength that they had to overcome the forces that had tried to contain them.

Twinkling droplets of first light?s refreshment lay scattered sporadically about the length of Celia?s unconscious body and as she shifted in her sleep. One dew drop slowly trickled from the side of her face down towards her eye. It opened slowly, revealing large and thick black rims about two brilliantly oceanic eyes.

?You?re awake!? Jay exclaimed. ?I wondered when you?d finally come to. We made it, Celia.? With this, the emerald-tinted forest nymph quickly sat up as the two small, wiry antennae lay flat on her head with the weight of the morning?s dew. She stared into her fellow traveler?s jade-colored eyes surrounded by cold, grey steel skin. Jay?s pleasant visage was a comfort to her and he now smiled happily as teal-shaded wish tags hung carelessly from his golden star-shaped head.

?How far did we go, Jay??

?I don?t know.? As Celia struggled to lift herself completely off of the ground, she folded after having used her right arm to support her.

?How?s the arm??

?Obviously not so well.?

?We?ll need to check that out. You were badly injured earlier?or should I say later?? Jay grabbed Celia under her other arm and lifted her off of the ground. The pair now studied their surroundings more carefully. The place they now occupied was perplexingly and indiscernibly different from the place from which they had come. The grass here was just as green and the trees just as lively. Something was amiss, though. Celia and Jay walked forward. The sunrise had fully transformed into full-blown daylight and as the two strange travelers walked about the grassy area on which they had arrived, even the sun?s caress felt different here than it had where they came from. An essence was missing, an aura. They would find out soon what this was.

The two travelers floated upwards to overlook the city that lay just beneath the grassy hill that they had arrived on. ?Out of all of those people, we must choose one,? Jay said with a contemplative tone. ?One person who can save us through the power that they hold inside.?

?We?ll find someone, Jay. Don?t worry about it.? Celia and Jay calmly floated high above the city, looking down at the numerous passing cars and busy people. The lofty buildings could scarcely be seen beneath a filthy layer of pollution that hung over the city like an emissary of death. It sickened Celia and she could hardly hold back her tears as the nature?s well being was of highest importance to her, being as connected as she was to it. A couple of drops fell gently from her great and bright eyes. Whisking through the air, these drops of hydrogenous fluid began to cure it as they descended. The layer of smog even began to dissipate slightly as the blessed tears from a legend?s eyes graced the canopy of this pavement forest.

?I?m sure the people will be thankful for that,? Jay said realizing what Celia had just done.

?They?ll just mess it up again,? she said. This small victory paled in comparison with the greater evil that would follow. Even more important than the quality of air in the city now, though, was the fate of the world as a whole. Pollution was but a trifling nuisance in the face of an entire planet?s total destruction. Refocusing on the mission at hand, Celia and Jay descended to a level of sky just above the city?s highest skyscraper.

(Six hours later, noon.)

?Alright now, be careful.?

?I will mom!? the small child exclaimed in annoyance as a response to a mother?s concern. The little four-year-old boy rushed off to the jungle gym and his mother strode quietly to a park bench nearby. Sitting beneath a brilliantly shimmering emerald tree, Jason's mother enjoyed the sunlight of the day as it pierced through to her face in scintillating rays of light, the wind moving the leaves back and forth in the balmy weather of mid-day. Susan opened up a book and pulled out her chestnut-hue reading glasses and soon was completely absorbed in the latest adventure of her favorite author who wrote under the pen-name of Billy5772.

Like a wonderful oasis in the midst of a starving desert, this city park was made especially beautiful when contrasted with its concrete and unnatural surroundings. It was separated from the pavement by a large iron gate but was open to all.

?Jason, I gotta go.? A few minutes had passed but already, being the friendly child that he was, Jason had made a friend. Consisting only of a few races on the monkey bars, the life of their friendship was now over and a sad little child sat at the bottom of a glistening metal slide all alone.

?Hey kid.? Seemingly from thin air, a man appeared and startled the little boy. ?Don?t be afraid, I?m Jimmy?s father.?

It didn?t make sense that Jimmy had just had to go home and yet his father was standing right here but grown-ups are always right so Jason thought nothing of it. Still a bit uncomfortable with the man?s presence, Jason fidgeted uneasily as he started looking around for his mother.

?Hey, don?t worry kid. I?m cool. So, what do you and my son play on the jungle gym?? Partly because he was shy, and partly because something about the situation felt abnormal, Jason only replied weakly and softly.

?We were racing.?

?Racing! That sounds like fun!? His enthusiasm concerning an activity which would usually strike adults as mundane and unexciting surprised Jason. In a good way.

?Yeah, on those monkey bars right there.? Slowly becoming less agitated by the stranger?s presence, Jason got up quickly off of the slide and rushed towards the monkey bars. ?Here, I?ll show you.? He climbed up the short ladder and reached for the first bar. He couldn?t reach it, though. ?Hold on.? Jason jumped for the first bar. He missed. But he didn?t fall to the ground. Instead he fell into the arms of a stranger.

?Alright kid, you?re coming with me.?

?What?! No! Where are we going?!? The helpless child wriggled rigorously, trying desperately to escape. A small cloth soaked in a chemical liquid soon quieted the boy and the stranger ran out of the park and into a car parked nearby.

She looked at her watch. ?Oh my, it?s getting late and I have other things to do.? Susan stood up from the park bench and closed her book, keeping her finger in between the pages to mark her position. ?Alright Jason, it?s time to go!? she called out. An eerie silence followed. The park was always mostly empty but her child?s voice was usually enough to make up for a park full of children his age. The silence that met her call was eerily ominous of an evil deed done. She now rushed towards the jungle gym which lay amidst a floor of wood chips that now scratched her exposed toes as her sandals kicked up the padding. ?Oh my God! My baby!? the mother cried frantically. She looked all about her once more to be sure that she had not imagined this most devastating tragedy. It was all real.

?Look there!? Celia and Jay had been atop a skyscraper roof for hours now, simply staring down at the bustling streets full of possible heroes.

?What is it?? Celia did not answer but instead, flew off of the roof top and towards the scene which she had called his attention to. Like a streak of glistening justice, Celia whisked across the sky and down to the frantic mother in the park.

I can help you

?What? Who?s there??

It is I, Celebi, guardian of life and nature.

?What the heck?! Where are you?! Do you have my son?!? the woman screamed now in a voice in which was mixed confusion and desperation. She lifted her tear-stained face to look straight above her head at a glowing green and leafy creature the likes of which she had never seen. Falling over backwards in awe, confusion, and a number of other emotions caused by such a shocking sight, Susan?s eyes widened as she sat dazed in the wood chips.

Don?t be afraid

She covered her ears with her slender hands and squinted, eyes closed. Celia was perplexed at this reaction. She was a rare sight but had never been received with such an unwelcoming response to her presence. Deciding that the easiest way to help the woman would be to read her mind, Celia did so:

Where are you, Jason?! It?s time to go?

Oh my God! My baby!

Can we go to the park mom?

Pictures of the small child flooded into Celia?s mind in the form of various assorted memories of days past.

?Jay, a kidnapping has taken place. We have to help her.? The two legends once again turned their heads to the distressed mother.

?Please do so,? she said, as she peered her eyes out of a space between her fingers. ?I will gladly repay you whatever you wish.? This sparked an idea that rushed through Celia?s mind like the answer to so many questions.

?Stay here.? The two legends whisked away even more swiftly than they had come in a blinding trail of green and golden light.

?Anything yet?? Jay asked.

?Yes, I can sense that the boy is this way.? They quickly changed directions and whisked down street after street until Celia stopped.

?What is it??

?That car right there!? In the back of a black Oldsmobile, was a young, unconscious child. Celia moved forward swiftly and then descended so that she was just in front of the car?s windshield.

Stop this car!

?What the hell?!? The driver shouted in surprise. He swerved in and out of lanes as the tenacious legend continued to exhort his compliance.

Release the child.

Jay followed behind the car.

The kidnapper pulled out a gun from his glove compartment and began to shoot wildly at the green fairy that confronted him. Celia quickly accelerated upwards to get out of the line of fire. ?Now you?ve done it!? A luminous green such as had never been seen before by humans of this city radiated out from her body and Celia?s aura lit the entire block. People who had once been absorbed in work, business, or even housework now focused their attention to the spectacle outside of their windows. Celia?s radiance decreased just as quickly as it had exploded and the psychic Pokemon now used its power to grab the bullets from the air and stop them in their tracks. The bullets and the car were far ahead of her now. She lowered into the center of the street and drew the bullets back so that they lay right in front of her face. ?Go!? The metallic instruments of death sped forward as if they were searching for a target. Celia could hear them crack the windshield and the car subsequently loss control and crashed into a telephone pole, denoting the driver?s injury.

Shocked and amazed, a dozen bystanders simply stood still and stared on in awe.

?Is the kid okay?? Jay asked approaching his companion who had already flown towards the wreckage.

?Yes.? The two Pokemon lifted the unconscious child with their minds and sped off towards the park where an anxious mother waited.

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Next time: What will the mother do for the legends since they retrieved her child? What was the calamity that caused them to flee anyway? Why was she so frightened to see Celia (Celebii)? What is different about this world? Find out next time on F.O.D.!

Seriously, how was it? I?m tryin?, I really am. Any feedback is welcome.

 

[Casual Billy]

New Chapter! The whole fic is kinda mysterious but a little light is cast on the F.O.D. in this chapter and exactly what it is. But then, there's a new mystery introduced. Keep reading...please.

CHAPTER 2

?There?s no way that we can defeat it!?

?At least not now.?

?What do you mean??

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The mother was now standing at the edge of the iron fence that separated the city?s park from the rest of the city. Grasping the bars in anticipation, she could begin to discern the forms of the two strange, magical creatures who had confronted her before. This time, however, they carried her child with them.

With a quivering gratitude, Susan held out her arms to accept the still unconscious body of her son, Jason. ?Th-th-thank you very much.? The four-year-old child still lay unconscious.

?He?ll be fine miss,? Jay assured the worried mother, smiling widely. As Susan turned to quickly run away, Celia called out to her.

?Excuse me but didn?t you say that you?d do something for us?? The woman turned around, frightened by what two of the strangest creatures she had ever seen might ask of her.

?Y-y-yes I did. What do you want me to do?? Celia and Jay looked at each other and then at the child who lay in her arms.

?We need your son?s power.?

?What do you mean? He doesn?t have any ?power?. What are you talking about?? Susan, in an exasperated tone, desperately was now trying to dissuade the legends from whatever course of action required her to give up her son.

?Calm down, we won?t hurt him and you will still be able to raise him?for the most part,? Jay added.

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?I?m a little uncertain about this plan. Where can we find enough power to conquer such a great evil??

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?We simply wish to cultivate in your son the most powerful force on the planet and use him to save the world,? Celia said simply as if her proposition was of the most mundane order.

?What are you talking about?! I don?t want any part in this!? Susan turned around and began to run wildly towards the park entrance.

?Come back!? Celia shouted. Jay closed his eyes and grabbed her with a psychic field that stopped her in her tracks. Celia flew around to her and now hovered in the air facing a worried mother. The green forest nymph smiled pleasantly trying to quell Susan?s fear but the very sight of this fairy served no purpose other than to frighten the woman further.

?I just want to go home,? she said between bursts of tears. ?Please let me go!? Celia looked at the mother who now was on her knees covering her face with her slender hands and sobbing into them.

?Just let her go,? Celia said. Jay looked at her for a second with a certain stare that denoted his disapproval. In his jade eyes, Celia could see ?but how are we going to save the world without the child?? In response she gave him a reassuring wink. They let her go.

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?Yes, I saw the whole thing. There was a shining green?fairy thing. It was in front of that car and caused it to go off the road.?

?Are you sure that that?s what happened,? a skeptical investigator asked. Officials had arrived at the scene to investigate the car accident. Officer Josine closed her notepad and tucked it away in her pocket. ?You can go.?

?Josine. Come here.? Josine walked near the wrecked vehicle briskly where her partner already stood. He peered intently inside the totaled car as if searching for something.

?What?d you find?? she asked.

?You can tell the ambulance to leave. There?s no body in this car.? Josine walked around to the driver?s side of the vehicle. In the seat was nothing but a small pile of pitch-hued dust.

?That?s interesting??

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The two travelers lurked outside of Jason?s bedroom window, peering inside at the scene that now unfolded. The window to the room lay open. This would be their method of entry?as soon as the coast was clear.

?Everything?s okay now, sweetie.? Susan sat at the side of her son?s bed and ran her hand smoothly through his hair. Jason slept soundly, the whole ordeal had been quite tiring.

?Do we have to do this, Jay??

?Do you have any other ideas? We can?t destroy Jack, there?s no way to tell what kind of chaos could ensue if he were destroyed.? Celia gave up her opposition and now refocused on the scene inside. The thinly framed mother now stood up just outside her child?s door. Slowly, light from the hallway faded as she closed the door and shut it tightly.

?Alright. We?re goin? in.? Jay reached his steel fingers into the window screen. The tiny legend began to struggle and wrest with the screen as it gradually began to tear open. ?Making progress,? he said as the screen widened even more. Just as the hole in the screen reached a sufficient wideness, the room?s door opened.

?Jay!? Celia whispered in an urgent tone as she herself ducked out of view. Jay followed and now both of them lay floating right under the window seal.

?Forgot to close the window, is all.? Susan walked calmly to the open window, shut it, and locked it. ?Hmm,? she said, noticing a gaping hole in the screen, ?I need to get that fixed. A housewife?s work is never done,? she snickered joyfully and left the room.

?Darn!?

?Don?t worry, hold on.? Celia focused her mind and then shot an intensified beam of solar energy towards the window. The glass melted and the two legends flew through. They hovered over Jason?s bed for a second, staring at his innocent face.

?You ready??

?Are you sure about this?? Celia was still a bit uneasy about sacrificing most of her power.

?You?ve already agreed to do this, Celia. There?s no turning back now.? Celia took time to reflect on her promise.

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?I have engineered the ultimate attack within my body. It is the essence of Pokemon divinity and thus derives its power from the strength of a human?s heart. Our connection to the humans is a wondrous bond, one that can be utilized as an extremely powerful force.?

?What humans? They?ve all been destroyed.?

?Maybe now they have, but that mustn?t stop us. We must travel back in time to find a human who can carry this attack in their bodies until it has had time to mature and grow to its full destructive potential.?

?How long will that take??

?It may take years. It depends on how fast this person?s heart develops the characteristics needed.? Turning to Celebi, Jay looked into her eyes. ?Will you help me??

Celia hesitated but only for a second. To save the world, it was her duty to do anything in her power. ?I will.?

?It will require almost all of both of our power to activate and implant the F.O.D. into its human host. Is that a sacrifice that you are willing to make?? Celia nodded quietly. Her cerulean eyes then began to show with a determination not present before.

?Yes! I would sacrifice my whole self for this world!? The two legends, huddled together in a dark cave, remained silent for a moment afterwards. ?Is there really no other way though? What if we went back and killed the source of all of this chaos??

Jay looked over at her with a solemn face. ?I thought of that and this is what happened.? The legend grasped Celia?s grassy hands in his own and closed his eyes and focused his mind. Celia closed her eyes as well. A scene opened with Jirachi destroying Jack in a blinding eruption of psychic-steel fury. The next instant, the entire vision collapsed and the transmission ended.

?What does that mean??

?It means that the worlds have become too intertwined now. They cannot be torn asunder. Killing the cause of their merger would result in total destruction.?

?Ah.? Just then, the ground began to rumble and the cave began to become unstable. ?Jay, we need to go!? Stones from the cavern?s ceiling began to crash down all about them.

?Hurry!? Jay grabbed Celia?s arm and both of them whisked forward towards the cave?s entrance. The light at the end of the tunnel was soon snuffed out though as boulders fell and obstructed the entrance.

A voice from outside could be heard. ?This is where it all ends.? The cave now began to collapse in on itself and the legends had less and less room to occupy. They would be crushed if they didn?t think fast. They grasped each other?s hands and focused all of their energy together. The stone confinement burst open from around them and the legends flew off and into the past?

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?I understand.? Reinvigorated with nostalgic determination, Celia lowered down towards Jason?s bedside and so did Jay. They looked at each other across the bed and then at the child. He had no idea how much his life was about to change.

?Here it is.? Jay produced in front of him a floating, amorphous entity. ?This is the F.O.D. We need now to focus all of our energy into it and ?start it up?.?

?Hope we don?t wake the neighbors,? Jay chuckled. With this, Celia and Jay grasped each other?s hands and formed a circle around the floating entity. ?Focus.? Celia once again shone with the brightest and most verdant hue imaginable. Jay also began to glow with a golden hue of rivaling brightness. All of the energy that each legend held within was then focused into the F.O.D. which lay floating above Jason?s body. Their bioluminescence exhausted, along with their power, each legend dropped from the air and onto the bed besides the child. The F.O.D. floated innocently above all three of them.

?I feel very weak, Jay.?

?Me too.? The F.O.D. lowered quickly and Jason?s body absorbed it into his chest readily. The deed was done.

 

[pokegirl909]

Hey, Go you! I really like it. This is a great story. Lots of suspence. My type of story. :D I'll be waiting for Chapter 3. *Sits down and stares at computer screen*

 

[Casual Billy]

Yes! A review. Thank you for posting. I'm glad that you enjoy it. I will post chapter 3 whenever I have it done (which should be in like 2 days) so Stay tuned! Thanks again.

 

[Casual Billy]

CHAPTER 3

Celia and Jay slept soundly that night, positioned comfortably under Jason?s bed. They gave a new meaning to the common childhood fear of monsters under the bed. But, in sharp contrast to this most placid of settings, lay unrest just outside.

?Yes, there he is.? Three shadowy figures floated outside of the young child?s bedroom window. They were of the human form but with only one dimension.

?We should kill him now.? The three figures effortlessly glided through the walls of Jason?s room. They now surrounded his bedside. Celia woke up in a cold sweat.

?Jay,? she whispered urgently, poking her slumbering friend. ?Wake up! Something?s not right!? She could feel the presence of evil and it chilled her to the core. Opening his eyes slowly and drearily, Jay looked to his side at the concerned look on Celia?s face. He could discern no cause for alarm until he focused on what was behind her. The shadowy form of two human feet could be seen from under the bed.

?What is going on?!? he asked exasperatedly.

?I don?t know but I think we need to do something. We need to do something quickly!? Celia looked at Jay expecting a response.

?Celia, I can sense the evil about these beings. They are agents of our future foe. He must have sent them back with us so that they might thwart our plans to save the world. Don?t worry, though, Jason?ll be fine.? With this, Jay turned back on his side and went to sleep.

?Jay!? she cried. The shadowy figures now merged together into one large, dark dome that covered Jason?s bed. ?Jay! They?re gonna kill him!? she now screamed. He turned back over, rather annoyed.

?Trust me, they won?t.? With this, the legend once again shifted to his side and went off to sleep. Celia couldn?t take this inaction anymore. She rolled from underneath the bed and stood up.

?Get outta here, you fiends!? she shouted. The evil figures did not separate into their individual forms but instead began to close in on the young boy as the dark dome that they had formed collapsed. ?No!? Celia punched with her fists wildly so as to deter the attack on Jason?s life. It was of no use, though. Just as the dome was about to crush the boy and suffocate him in darkness, his heart began to glow with a brilliant and blinding light. First his heart, then his entire body began to give off the same luminescence.

?Aaaaaaaaaah!? The shadowy dome above his bed dispersed and the figures scurried off into the night. Celia, confused but relieved, sighed heavily and Jason?s body ceased to glow. She stood there for a moment, catching her breath and wiping the sweat from her forehead. Jay peeked out from under the bed and settled his head on his hands with a comfortable ?I told ya so? kind of expression on his face.

?What just happened?? Jirachi now climbed fully from under the bed and stood up in front of Celia.

?I had to ensure that the bearer of the F.O.D. would not come to any harm. He?s no good dead, right?? Jay chuckled. ?So, I engineered the attack to do whatever is necessary to sustain the vitality of its host.? Angrily, Celia stormed back under the bed to her resting place, bumping Jay?s shoulder as she went.

?You so coulda told me that,? she seethed.

?It turned out funnier this way, though.? Jay also retired to his resting place under Jason?s bed and, shortly, both legends drifted off to sleep.

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?We must attack him in another way now??

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Rays of sunlight crept into Jason?s window and forced his eyelids open. Unaware of the proceedings that had taken place that night, the young boy slowly climbed out of his bed. His feet touched the floor and awakened the two legends that lay underneath his place of rest.

?Jay, wake up,? Celia shook her steel-skinned companion briskly.

?Huh? What?s going on? Oh.? Jay turned to face Celia and immediately begin to smile. ?Ha-ha-ha-ha-ha!? he burst out in laughter, ?Get outta here you fiends!? he mocked. Celia met this mockery with a very unfriendly stare. ?Okay, so it wasn?t that funny,? he finally resolved.

Jason could hear their voices under his bed and he was beginning to become afraid. He jumped back up into his bed and covered his whole self in his comforter. ?Go away, monsters!? he shouted.

?Oh my. Jay, we should reveal ourselves now. Once he sees that it is a Celebi and a Jirachi, all fears will be squelched. With this, the two legends rolled from under either side of the bed; Jay on the right and Celia on the left, near the window. They quickly stood up and made their presence known.

?Jason, look over here.? The boy, now frightened even more peeked one of his out of a small opening in his comforter fortress and, upon seeing a strange green fairy, quickly threw the covers up into the air and jumped out of his bed on the opposite side. His mad dash only caused him to come face-to-face with another strange creature, one with a golden star-shaped head and silver skin.

?Aaaaaaaaaaaahh!? Jason hopped over the smiling wish maker and dashed out of his room with what, on a Pokemon, would?ve qualified as Extreme Speed. Papers that had been scattered about the kid?s room fluttered in the air and the door slammed shut behind him due to his high velocity. Jay stood amongst the fluttering papers that now slowly drifted to the ground around him. One of his teal-shaded wish tags hung in front of his face and, with a small puff of wind from his tiny mouth, he blew it away irritably.

?Jay, what was that?? Celia had made her way around the foot of the bed and over to Jay?s side of the room, right in front of the door.

?It?s not based only on whether he actually is in danger, but, also if he feels endangered.? Celia let out a sigh. ?But don?t worry,? Jay said, becoming very positive ?I have a plan?? As he finished saying this, the room?s door fell off of its hinges and hit the wooden floor behind him with a loud crashing noise.

It was still quite early and Susan lay in bed. She had slept through the threat of the evil attack on her son and her son?s burst of super-human speed. Dawn came about an hour before her alarm clock would have to wake her up and she continued to sleep peacefully unaware. Jason did not return to his room, but, drowsy, sneaked into his mother?s room and lay at the foot of her bed.

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The end of chapter 3! Hopefully, you all liked it. There is some good stuff about to happen. I don?t think anyone can guess what?s about to happen.

Things to look forward to:

New concept concerning the relation between good and evil,
The specific virtues that Jason must develop to bring the F.O.D. to its full potential
The excursions from the main plot caused by Jason?s body?s reaction to the F.O.D.
Other various things that will be SHOCKING.
My guarantee of AFAFCAP (as far away from convention as possible)

 

[jirachiman876]

*fumes* You posted chapter three here and not on serebii!!! O well I'm hoping that you just didn't have time to do that. Anyway, very interesting. I liked how the kid reacted to Celebi and Jirachi, pure hilarity. Well I'll prolly give you a beter review on serebii. ONe thing though, one time when the pokemon were speaking, you forgot to end the quote.
jirachiman out

 

[Casual Billy]

Thanks for the point-out, Jirachiman. I didn't post this chapter on serebii yet because I'm still editing it. It's gonna be a little different by time it gets there. Thanks for reviewing!

 

[jirachiman876]

o really??? sweet. I can't to make a different reveiw there. I wasn wondering why you didn't post F.O.D on pokelite2000.
Also reveiwed worlds away there too or as it's called there ... I can;t remember.

 

[Act]

Hello.

Hn, well... the title is a tad off-setting. When I see the word FOD, I think of either fish or sod, which I'm sure wasn't the intended association.

The first paragraph is very forced. It seems as if you took random words and ran them through Word's thesaurous. Don't do that. More often than not, though words are synonymous, they cannot simply be substituted for one another. Frankly, it seemed rather... corny.

This reminds me too much of LilyPichu's writing. You have the same problem as she.

You /seem/ to know how to write dialogue at this point, but remeber: Always try to specify who is speaking. It is more grammatically proper, and makes it easier on the reader.

You know, I always find it highly unlikely that pokemon, particularly ancient, immortal pokemon, would have human names.

Hydrogenous fluid? How old are you-- 11, 12? Do you even know what that truly /means/? It's terribly out of place. No one will kill you for saying 'water'. I'm also inclined to think that there are other liquid compounds composed partly of hydrogen. There are words you shouldn't overuse, but in my experience water isn't one of them.

Somehow I doubt her tears were big enough to make a significant impact of the layer of pollution. Not to mention that if the smog was so thick, so polluted, I doubt the place would be populated.

Marking passing of time is extremely juvenile. Does it matter that it's noon? Just have a line break and continue the fic.

Well, that was weird self-promotion. Plus, have you ever seen a published author use numbers as a pen name? Pointless words.

You're making this city sound like an awful place to live. Have you ever played Sim City? People tend to leave when polution is up and room is down.

I'm not sure what prompted the two to o after this kid. Many children go missing every day. If they attempted to help every parent in need, they'd be working forever. Notwithstanding that celebi could easily go back in time and follow the abductor to see where he has taken the child. But, I'm assuming, then there would be no story.

This first chapater was decent. Your prose was so forcably flowerly that is became a little cheesy, and nothing happened. By the end of the first chapter, your readers should be hooked on the beginning of a plot. Nothing really happened.

Chapter two...

Why didn't the mother follow? Would you trust voices on your head to find your son?

Why does the woman understand the pokemon speech now? Last chapter they could only communicate telepathically.

What's so special about this kid? Or could they just choose anyone and he happened to be there? The unlikelyness of this burns... but I digress.

For ancient pokemon, the act surprisingly human. Pokemon aren't just people who look different.

It's not 'thru' it is 'through'. This isn't a sign for a McDonald's drive through.

I still don't see why they chose a 4-year-old, as opposed to an adult or teen who had a say as well as could grasp the seriousness.

This chapter was better as far as plot goes, but in cutting down on the over-flowered language, you cut out all description. You've also done something that annoys me to know end:You've turned pokemon into minihumans.

Three...

You cannot have one dimension. You would have no sunstance. You must have at least two, lengh and height. The third dimension adds width. The fourth is time, I'm pretty sure.

Lyke, ong. He SO coulda told her that. So we're tweens now?

Pokemon attacks shouldn't be capatalized.


Well, this was okay. It is an overdone concept and was pretty boring. Your two main characters make me sigh. You seem to not take a lot of things into account, and always know wha a word means before you use it. Better safe than sorry. This needs some work, but it isn't bad.

 

[Casual Billy]

Hn, well... the title is a tad off-setting. When I see the word FOD, I think of either fish or sod, which I'm sure wasn't the intended association.

That?s nice, albeit unnecessary. It wasn?t a word either. It was an acronym.

The first paragraph is very forced. It seems as if you took random words and ran them through Word's thesaurous. Don't do that. More often than not, though words are synonymous, they cannot simply be substituted for one another. Frankly, it seemed rather... corny.

Examples of misused words?

You know, I always find it highly unlikely that pokemon, particularly ancient, immortal pokemon, would have human names.

I see your point, but, in my story, they do.

Hydrogenous fluid? How old are you-- 11, 12? Do you even know what that truly /means/? It's terribly out of place. No one will kill you for saying 'water'. I'm also inclined to think that there are other liquid compounds composed partly of hydrogen. There are words you shouldn't overuse, but in my experience water isn't one of them.

And what other liquid compounds would fall from someone?s eyes? Maybe the description was a bit convoluted, but I actually do know what ?hydrogenous? means. It simply means ?of or containing hydrogen?. It?s quite a simple meaning.

Somehow I doubt her tears were big enough to make a significant impact of the layer of pollution.

She?s a legendary Pokemon of nature. They did not have to be big enough. It seems like you?re making things up to gripe about.

Not to mention that if the smog was so thick, so polluted, I doubt the place would be populated.

And now, heavily polluted cities aren?t usually populated? Who polluted them? I assure you that there are cities, with people in them, which are very heavily polluted.

Marking passing of time is extremely juvenile. Does it matter that it's noon? Just have a line break and continue the fic.

It actually does matter but I see that there was probably a better way to do it.

Well, that was weird self-promotion. Plus, have you ever seen a published author use numbers as a pen name? Pointless words.

The numbers did make it look a little weird, but to discredit it because you haven?t seen an author do it is not so valid.

You're making this city sound like an awful place to live. Have you ever played Sim City? People tend to leave when polution is up and room is down.

So now you?re basing your logic on a computer game? Once again, I assure you that there are heavily populated cities with a pollution problem in the real world.

I'm not sure what prompted the two to o after this kid. Many children go missing every day. If they attempted to help every parent in need, they'd be working forever.

So now you?re upset that the motives of Celia and Jay are not immediately apparent? Every plot aspect does not have to be revealed all at once. I even said that there were some things that would be revealed later. Also, this just happened to be the first crime they witnessed in this new place. Should they not have tried to help this woman who caught their attention?

Notwithstanding that celebi could easily go back in time and follow the abductor to see where he has taken the child. But, I'm assuming, then there would be no story.

Interesting. I really did not think of that. There still would have been a story, it just would be different.

This first chapater was decent. Your prose was so forcably flowerly that is became a little cheesy, and nothing happened. By the end of the first chapter, your readers should be hooked on the beginning of a plot. Nothing really happened.

*cough forcibly flowery cough*

Yeah, but I agree that this was kind of forced um,?language here. A lot definitely did happen, though:

Two mysterious travelers landed in a strange land.
Mother loses child, travelers agree to help
Inhabitants of this place see Celia use her powers
They rescue the child

Why didn't the mother follow? Would you trust voices on your head to find your son?

She actually did see the two legendaries, and they did fly off. How could she follow them? She probably could?ve called the police, though. Isn?t there some rule, though, that you have to wait some amount of time before filing a missing person?s report? I don?t know, there?s definitely validity to you being concerned about the mother?s inaction. Hmmm?.

Why does the woman understand the pokemon speech now? Last chapter they could only communicate telepathically.

They spoke in English.

What's so special about this kid? Or could they just choose anyone and he happened to be there? The unlikelyness of this burns... but I digress.

That?s one of the things that are not immediately apparent. And what is so unlikely about a kid in a park?

For ancient pokemon, the act surprisingly human. Pokemon aren't just people who look different.

I agree that the games would portray them that way, but in this fic, I wanted to give them a more human-like relationship. Just to make the two main characters more relatable to the reader.

It's not 'thru' it is 'through'. This isn't a sign for a McDonald's drive through.

I will change that.

I still don't see why they chose a 4-year-old, as opposed to an adult or teen who had a say as well as could grasp the seriousness.

This pretty much explains why:

?Maybe now they have, but that mustn?t stop us. We must travel back in time to find a human who can carry this attack in their bodies until it has had time to mature and grow to its full destructive potential.?

?How long will that take??

?It may take years. It depends on how fast this person?s heart develops the characteristics needed.? Turning to Celebi, Jay looked into her eyes. ?Will you help me??

They needed a fresh-start heart. A grown person?s heart may have already become too corrupt to bear the F.O.D. and it may have had nothing to feed off of. They had to choose a heart that would give them time to let it grow, time to mold it into what they wanted it to be.

You've also done something that annoys me to know end:You've turned pokemon into minihumans.

I?m sorry that this annoys you, but we must have different fanfiction rule books. Mine says that it?s a story not limited by the scenarios or conditions expressed in the anime or games. I don?t know. I did it on purpose. It makes the characters into ones with whom you can better relate. These are the main characters. I mean, if they talked in Pokemon speech and acted all divine, it?d alienate anyone who read it. It?d be like having the Wookies as the main characters in the Star Wars movies. No one understands them.

You cannot have one dimension. You would have no sunstance. You must have at least two, length and height. The third dimension adds width. The fourth is time, I'm pretty sure.

Ah! I see. Definitely wouldn?t want characters without sunstance. I hear they?re at a higher risk for skin cancer. Get it? Can?t stand the sun, sunstance. Okay, I know what you meant. I?ll edit that to two.

Pokemon attacks shouldn't be capatalized.

Oh, okay.

Well, this was okay. It is an overdone concept and was pretty boring.

Overdone? Who else has done this? Or are you saying that I?ve taken the concept too far?

Overall, thanks for the review. Most of it was personal gripes that really didn?t hold any absolute value, but I do appreciate you taking the time to look at it. I?m also glad you chose to give it a permanent score of three after the first three chapters in which the plot has not even been fully developed. Thank you.

 

[Act]

I'm glad you took this well. *looks at disclaimer* Concritting... why do we try?

That?s nice, albeit unnecessary. It wasn?t a word either. It was an acronym.

So are MADD and NASA, but no one looks and them and thinks, oh, look at that, it's the en- ay- ess- ay. No, it's NASA.

She?s a legendary Pokemon of nature. They did not have to be big enough. It seems like you?re making things up to gripe about.

It's called 'giving opinion', not 'making up'. You asked for my opinions, and I give. Live with it. On that note, ledgendary pokemon are not beyond realms of common sense and reason. A tear is a tear, not a lake.

And now, heavily polluted cities aren?t usually populated? Who polluted them? I assure you that there are cities, with people in them, which are very heavily polluted.

When there is a heavy cloud of polution covering a city, send me a picture so I can count the people living there. Carcinogens... *shivers*

So now you?re basing your logic on a computer game? Once again, I assure you that there are heavily populated cities with a pollution problem in the real world.

Metaphor much? You're basing your writing on a video game (well... sort of...). I was simply trying to clarify my point.

So now you?re upset that the motives of Celia and Jay are not immediately apparent? Every plot aspect does not have to be revealed all at once. I even said that there were some things that would be revealed later. Also, this just happened to be the first crime they witnessed in this new place. Should they not have tried to help this woman who caught their attention?

It's easier on the reader to give reason for action. Just because something fully makes sense to you doesn't mean it does to everyone else, which should have become apparent but apparently failed to. As you said, these are ledgendary pokemon who, as far as my 'griping' understanding goes, don't throw themselves in front of every candidate unless its Ash Ketchum.

Yeah, but I agree that this was kind of forced um,?language here. A lot definitely did happen, though:

Two mysterious travelers landed in a strange land.
Mother loses child, travelers agree to help
Inhabitants of this place see Celia use her powers
They rescue the child

But... you don't make it seem significant, and I know that sounds odd. There was no real hook, nothing that caught my eye and made me say, "Wow, I've never seen /that/ before." And honestly, that's what you need.

This pretty much explains why:

?Maybe now they have, but that mustn?t stop us. We must travel back in time to find a human who can carry this attack in their bodies until it has had time to mature and grow to its full destructive potential.?

?How long will that take??

?It may take years. It depends on how fast this person?s heart develops the characteristics needed.? Turning to Celebi, Jay looked into her eyes. ?Will you help me??

They needed a fresh-start heart. A grown person?s heart may have already become too corrupt to bear the F.O.D. and it may have had nothing to feed off of. They had to choose a heart that would give them time to let it grow, time to mold it into what they wanted it to be.

I did notice that, but it still seemed sort of random to me that they'd just basically go into town one morning and choose this kid. Surely there was a hospital with a truckload of newborns waiting to be inspected, particularly if this city is a spopulated as you say it is.

I?m sorry that this annoys you, but we must have different fanfiction rule books. Mine says that it?s a story not limited by the scenarios or conditions expressed in the anime or games.

This had nothing to do with canon. If you say a chimp walking around acting human, you'd be generally freaked (I use chimps because they are our closest relatives, I think). Animals/pokemon and people are just different. It's fairly given. And there does happen to be an acceptance of the rule that says 'don't throw canon aside'.

I don?t know. I did it on purpose. It makes the characters into ones with whom you can better relate. These are the main characters. I mean, if they talked in Pokemon speech and acted all divine, it?d alienate anyone who read it. It?d be like having the Wookies as the main characters in the Star Wars movies. No one understands them.

No, it wouldn't offset people. It would show that you had carefully thought out your characters and portrayed them to be what they truly are: divine (and speaking in their own language). This isn't a movie. Writing and visulals, reading and hearing: they are different. I'm not telling you to write "Cel, celebi cel cel." Writing their speech normally is fine, but having some random lady understand it isn't. What most authors do is mark pokemon speech differently. If I started speaking to you in Russian, would you understand it? Probably not. Is it still a language? Are Russians a unique people? Yes.

Ah! I see. Definitely wouldn?t want characters without sunstance.

Leave my typos alone. They plague me.

Overdone? Who else has done this? Or are you saying that I?ve taken the concept too far?

The chosen one thing is everywhere. Recently it has taken a backseat to "OT with angsty past goes on journey" but I assure you there are hundreds of fics with this plot. That's not necessarily a bad thing, you just haven't added any spark to it.

Overall, thanks for the review. Most of it was personal gripes that really didn?t hold any absolute value, but I do appreciate you taking the time to look at it. I?m also glad you chose to give it a permanent score of three after the first three chapters in which the plot has not even been fully developed. Thank you.

*pokes backbone* You asked for my opinion and I gave it. If your ego took a knock, live with it. I'd be thrilled if someone wrote up a concrit for me like this... I adore criticism. If you have no desire to better yourself, that's not my preogative. As for the plot not being developed at chapter three... thanks for pointing that one out for me.

 

[Casual Billy]

It's called 'giving opinion', not 'making up'. You asked for my opinions, and I give. Live with it. On that note, ledgendary pokemon are not beyond realms of common sense and reason. A tear is a tear, not a lake

There is no common sense or reason behind Pokemon, much less legendaries. The magical aura around her tear, and not the tear itself was what cured the air.

When there is a heavy cloud of polution covering a city, send me a picture so I can count the people living there. Carcinogens... *shivers*

https://www.starproductions.co.nz/sp-images/smog-chch.jpg Here?s Christchurch, New Zealand. 344,100
https://static.howstuffworks.com/gif/ozone-pollution-smog.jpg

Metaphor much? You're basing your writing on a video game (well... sort of...). I was simply trying to clarify my point.

More hypocritical than metaphor? It didn?t make sense either way, that was the point.

This had nothing to do with canon. If you say a chimp walking around acting human, you'd be generally freaked (I use chimps because they are our closest relatives, I think). Animals/pokemon and people are just different. It's fairly given. And there does happen to be an acceptance of the rule that says 'don't throw canon aside'.

I always thought that Pokemon were a little above animals, especially the legends. They?re not really characterized that often, either. So what?s to go off of? (I don?t watch the show and have never seen the movies).

No, it wouldn't offset people. It would show that you had carefully thought out your characters and portrayed them to be what they truly are: divine (and speaking in their own language). This isn't a movie. Writing and visulals, reading and hearing: they are different. I'm not telling you to write "Cel, celebi cel cel." Writing their speech normally is fine, but having some random lady understand it isn't. What most authors do is mark pokemon speech differently. If I started speaking to you in Russian, would you understand it? Probably not. Is it still a language? Are Russians a unique people? Yes.

So not even the legends can speak English?

*pokes backbone* You asked for my opinion and I gave it. If your ego took a knock, live with it. I'd be thrilled if someone wrote up a concrit for me like this... I adore criticism. If you have no desire to better yourself, that's not my preogative. As for the plot not being developed at chapter three... thanks for pointing that one out for me.

Better myself? You gave almost no advice that made sense. Here are your original ?concrits?

Tears of a legend aren?t powerful enough to even partially cure a layer of smog
Cities that are polluted don?t have people in them
Legends can?t speak English
The plot was not all revealed
Don?t force language ? valid
Don?t use synonyms that don?t work ? still waiting for an example

And then, after 3 chapters, you gave it a permanent three for these reasons. Just a little upset about that. Opinions and concrit are great when they?re based off of something valid.

 

[Act]

There is no common sense or reason behind Pokemon, much less legendaries.

Alright. Wow. Just wow...

I've been aruged down on the polution point, though I still don't see exactly how it profits the fic.

More hypocritical than metaphor? It didn?t make sense either way, that was the point.

Hypocritical? I stood by that opinion the entire time. o.o;; Definition check?

always thought that Pokemon were a little above animals, especially the legends. They?re not really characterized that often, either. So what?s to go off of? (I don?t watch the show and have never seen the movies).

*screams* They are CHARACTERS! Just because some crapauthor with no fragments of an imgaination doesn't give them personalities doesn't mean you shouldn't! You aren't a bad writer, please, don't succumb to this symdrome! And if you 'don't watch the show and have never seen the movies', how can you argue this? You know nothing about it.

So not even the legends can speak English?

No. That's all there is to it. *pokes canon*

Better myself? You gave almost no advice that made sense.

You've knocked down my advice rather than considered it. I don't mind you arguing for your points, but you're in tis mindset that everything I say is awfully biased and nonsensical. Read your fic as if you were me. I got the ideas from somewhere. I don't make things up o.o;;

Tears of a legend aren?t powerful enough to even partially cure a layer of smog
Cities that are polluted don?t have people in them
Legends can?t speak English
The plot was not all revealed
Don?t force language ? valid
Don?t use synonyms that don?t work ? still waiting for an example

1. No, I don't think they are. Having not seen the movies, I'm not sure where you can get any proof to back yourself up. Celebi succumbs to a dark pokeball and DIES in the fourth? movie. They're not beyond normality, which is... interesting. It's be an intriguing one-shot topic, now that I think about it.

2. I'll cave on that one. But I didn't say 'no polluted city is populated' I just find it highly unlikely that the place is so poluted that the smog has become opaque.

3. They can't.

4. It's not so much that the plot wasn't there as that it wasn't... original. Fics with this basic idea are everywhere, again, I find myself asking, "Yeah, but what makes this better than every other 'chosen one' fic?" Be careful not to fall into a mold.

5. :)

6. example off top of my head: blue and cobalt. Not sure if you used this, but I've seen it done. I don't know if I accused you of that or was just warning you about it. I should look, but... EDIT: Yeah, I don't think I saw anything in particular, I think I was just throwing the fact out there.

Opinions and concrit are great when they?re based off of something valid.

Whether it's valid or not is an opinion. Again, I love being argued with-- it shows you give a crap about your writing-- but I don't appreciate being told my interpretations are worthless just because you don't agree with them o.o;;

 

[Casual Billy]

Well, okay. I didn't mean for this to get anywhere close to ugly. I just didn't see where you were coming from at all. I love criticisms that make me go "ooh, I see" or "I never thought about it like that" or "Wow, I definitely need to change that". It just seemed like most of the stuff you said made me go "What?" or "where is she coming from?" Maybe it's because I don't watch the show and haven't seen the movies. I'm really just feeling around in the dark when it comes to how these characters should act because I don't really have anything to go off of. But, I was thinking "maybe that's a good thing" because, that way, it's got a great chance of being more original and less influenced by already established ideas. Is it wrong for me to take a character from the Pokemon universe and implant them into my own? What's wrong with bending the rules of "canon" in a fiction that is not tied to the anime or games at all? These are the rules and thought processes that fostered the creation of this fic, and that's why your criticism about what the legends can and cannot do kind of caught me off guard(?). Just wasn't expecting to be corrected on what my characters can and cannot do.

Hypocritical? I stood by that opinion the entire time. o.o;; Definition check?

Comprehension check? I was saying that, if anything, it was hypocritical for me to base the story on a video game and then to reprimand you for using some video game logic. Maybe I misunderstood, though. What were you saying was a metaphor?

Oh, I was aware that there were other "chosen one" fics out there, but this one is gonna be so different. The basic plot has been layed out, but there is so much more. This is the main reason why I was a little irked at the 3. You've got no idea where this is going, what kind of plot twists are in store, what influences will affect the main characters, or what the ending will be like. And then you rated the entire fic (chapters 1 - 12(?)) based on your opinion of the first three? You must agree that you'd be a little frustrated as well.

Finally, I don't want there to be any bad blood/hard feelings/whatever because of this. I apologize for being so quick to become argumentative. I do "give a crap" about the writing but that's no excuse for saying what I said in posts above.

 

[Act]

Hn, it's difficult to write a fanfic with only limited knowledge of the fandom, ne? That could easily be why we aren;t seeing eye-to-eye. That said, no one has suffered a personal attack, so I don't think this is too ugly. Everyone's inclined to protect something they've created.

Game canon is in fact primary canon, but you don't get any feel for a character in an RPG like that. I'd reccommend watching a few episodes of the show for rference. Pokemon 4Ever, I think, is the best movie. I'd rent that one.

As far as acceptance of canon goes, canon is your rules. You can't do x, y, and z. Would it be nice to have everyone understanding each other? Heck yeah. Doe sit work that way? Unfortunaterly not. It does, however, provide a creative opportunity for an author. Why does it work this way? Is there a history? Can pokemon be tauht English without sacrificing their 'learnings' (as it is put in the show) and learn more attacks as well? Who knows.

The average pokemon, in my opinion, doesn't act human because it isn't. It's a cat, mouse, bird, dragon, etc. I think Ledgendaries, personally, should act more 'human'. That word is in parentheses because it's not really the right word. They should be more cultured and wise, smart and strategic, but not in the same way people are, because they don't live as we do.

As for trans-universal fics, I'd make note if you intend to totally disregard canon, because more experienced authors (haha... NOT like me) may be on you for things taht bend canon I've never even heard of. One of the worst things a concritter hates to see is canon-rape, or the total disregard for the rules set by the show/game/manga. I'd have given you more of an explanation if I knew coming into this that you were writing entirely by the game. I'd put in some kind of disclaimer as far as those things are concerned.

I'm still totally confused as to the hypocritical statement, so let's drop my metaphor.

Oh, I was aware that there were other "chosen one" fics out there, but this one is gonna be so different. The basic plot has been layed out, but there is so much more. This is the main reason why I was a little irked at the 3. You've got no idea where this is going, what kind of plot twists are in store, what influences will affect the main characters, or what the ending will be like. And then you rated the entire fic (chapters 1 - 12(?)) based on your opinion of the first three? You must agree that you'd be a little frustrated as well.

The first chapter are the most important. It's not fun to read 3-5 (or even more or less) chapters that could be pulled from any of 5,000 fics. Your job in the first three /paragraphs/ is to give the reader reason to continue in their endeavor. This wasn't bad, there was just no mirror originality in it. That being said, this hasn't intriguied me to the point that I'd keep reading to watch it ge better. I rated because chances are, unless you request a concrit 5 chapters from now, that I won't be reading any more. I'm more of an OT person myself. Also, I wasn't aware that you couldn't alter ratings. I apologie on taht account. And for all my typos -_-;;

I'm not upset. I hope you're not o.o;; You have no idea how many enemies I've made telling people to write dialogue properly. If I were you, I'd make my way to ff.net every once and a while. There are soem great fics there that could probably explain better some of the things I've said. One id Farla's Unoriginality series, the other is Negrek's 'Here We Go Again' fic. Irony-chan also wrote a very amusing 'Mary-Sue ABCs' that I recommend simply because of how funny it is.

Good luck with this. It's really a neglected concept as far as good fanfiction goes.

 

[Casual Billy]

Well, thanks for the help. I'm gonna go read some episode guides for some pokemon or something now. *sigh*

 

[FloatingFlames]

Hmm... about the humans understanding legendaries, if I recall correctly, in the third movie Lugia spoke in English to Ash telepathically, and Ash understood him perfectly. I haven't seen that movie in a long time, though, so I might be wrong. I believe that legends are highly capable of speaking to humans if they need to. After all, they are legendaries, which I view as a status far above not only Pokemon, but humans as well.

Of course, I didn't read the entire conversation between you two, so if you disproved this somewhere, than I apologize.

>_>
*runs off to go make a sig, profile and post his fic*

 

[Act]

I said that, I think... that telepathy was fine.

 

[Casual Billy]

CHAPTER 4

?Time for you to go to school, Mr.? Susan passed her hand through her son?s head lovingly as he sat at the kitchen table pushing Cheerios around in a pool of milk.

?I?m not done with my cereal yet!?

?That?s too bad. If you hadn?t been playing with the food instead of eating it, maybe you?d be done by now.? Susan walked to the door, opened it, and motioned for Jason to go to the car. Jason got up from his seat at the kitchen table and sluggishly moved towards the car and got in. Jason sat comfortably in the back seat of the car moving around just to hear the leather seats make a ?farting? sound.

?Alright Celia, Operation Win Jason?s Trust Quickly So That We Can Begin To Mold His Character Into One That Will Be Conducive Of The F.O.D.?s Maximum Power or Operation W.J.T.Q.S.T.W.C.B.T.M.H.C.I.O.T.W.B.C.O.T.F.O.D.M.P., for short, has begun!? The two legends jumped out of a pair of green bushes that were planted just outside of Jason?s house. They rushed towards the luxury car and grabbed onto the back bumper. The family?s silver car backed out of the driveway and sped off in the direction of Jason?s daycare.

?Mom, why do I have to go to daycare??

?It?s because mommy needs to look for a job, sweety. I can?t watch you everyday anymore.?

?Oh.?

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?Alright son, I?ll be back at four o?clock.? Susan kissed her son on the forehead and got back into her car. Jason turned to face the brightly colored building, which was surrounded by play equipment and a luscious green lawn. A caring old woman stood at the front door with her arms open and a wide and loving smile across her face. Her snowy-white hair reminded him of his milk from breakfast, and he decided to trust her.

?Now don?t worry,? Susan said out of her car window. ?I?ve already checked this place out, and it is fine. Run along.? Jason hesitantly walked down a paved path that lay in the middle of the daycare?s front lawn and towards the old daycare lady.

?Now!? Celia and Jay jumped from the bumper of Susan?s car and onto the grass in front of the daycare building.

?Jay, people will see us!?

?I?ve got it all under control.? The wish maker grabbed from his star-shaped head a teal-shaded wish tag. Focusing his mind and grasping the wish tag in his hand, he soon disappeared.

?Jay? That?s pretty cool, but what about me??

?Grab onto the other end of the wish tag.? Celia grabbed it, and she too turned invisible. Later that day, on the playground, Jay and Celia would approach Jason and set their plan into action.

Walking inside, Jason was quite shocked at what he saw. He had expected there to be a place full of actively playing children, but instead there were only a few kids, silently watching a soap opera. The head of the daycare slumped down on a recliner nearby the door and kicked off her shoes, revealing some of the ugliest feet that Jason had ever seen.

?Um, where are the toys??

?Toys?!? she asked harshly. ?You wanna play with toys, you bring your own.?

?Oh. Why doesn?t anyone here have toys out to play with?? Jason asked, studying the soap opera audience carefully. They hadn?t even noticed that there was a new child in their midst. They had been completely absorbed in the Turning Wheels universe, and not much could break their focus on the show.

?They used to bring their own toys, but then they got too loud, so I told them not to anymore. Now you all?s play time is just watchin? Turning Wheels with me.? Jason, quite disillusioned, sat down slowly on the carpeted floor next to the rest of the children.

?Hi, my name is Jay. What?s yours?? one brown-haired young boy asked quietly.

?My name is Jason. You like this show??

?Eh. I?ve kinda just grown accustomed to it. It?s mildly entertaining sometimes, though. We just found out that Charles? ex-wife is not really the mother of one of his daughters. We?re not sure which daughter it is, though. There have been hints throughout that it?s Julie, but nobody knows at this point because they all look like their mother a little bit. Cheryl, the ex-wife?s best friend, has already told Jerald that it was Jonathon who was the real father, but then, when she said that, Jerald looked all nervous and stuff. It leads me to believe that he?s probably the father, which is pretty crazy since he?s also Charles? best friend of seven years. Yeah.?

?Okay. That?s confusing, but why?? The head of the daycare interrupted their conversation by turning the volume up really high and clearing her throat obnoxiously. Jason and Jay stopped talking. Celia sat just behind them on the floor, and she winked at Jay who glanced back at her. The two legends had used Jirachi?s wish tag to disguise themselves as human children so that they could get closer to Jason without him being afraid.

They, from this day forward, employed themselves as Jason?s friends, guiding him through the years on what is right and what is wrong, and developing in him a heart of the most just and noble order. They met with him daily at the daycare, and soon visited his house to play.

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?Having understood the specifics of their plan, it makes the most sense to copy their method.? The three dark and shadowy figures now hovered outside of another young child?s bedroom, waiting to enter.

?Yes, indeed. We shall destroy this Jason before he has a chance to destroy our master.? Inside, laid a young girl of about four years old. Her long black hair lay sprawled out against her white pillow, and she rested peacefully unaware. The three dark figures seeped through her walls as they had done the night before at another?s house, and stood all around her bed.

?We will use her to attack the F.O.D. from within, destroying it in the same manner that a poison destroys the body.? They produced in front of them a dark sphere of energy, comprised of a most pure evil. At first, her body rejected it, but the evil beings forced the sphere to be absorbed into her heart.

?Are you sure that this will work?? questioned one of the evil figures.

?Yes, much like the F.O.D., this has been engineered to fulfill the needs of its maker. This is not only the essence of our evil desires, but it will also make her the perfect tool to destroy Jason with. You shall see.? The little girl stirred, and the shadowy figures quickly dispersed and fled. Little Clarissa would be the ultimate tool of evil, specifically fashioned to destroy Jason.

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As both sides worked on the hearts of their respective children, the years went by quickly. Soon, the strength of the F.O.D. would begin to make itself apparent to Jason in a more tangible way as, up until now, there had been not one sign of its presence. A series of events was about to unfold, though, that would lead to Jason?s development into the hero that he was called to be. Now twelve years old, Celia and Jay decided that it was time to reveal their true identities and explain to him the importance of the F.O.D.

?Jason, can I talk to you for a second?? Jay walked beside his best friend as they both headed towards the bus stop. They didn?t attend the same school, but that had not been cause for their separation. Jay visited Jason often; he had become a mentor of sorts, which was odd as he was under the guise of being the same age as Jason.

?Sure, buddy. What?s up?? Jason had grown considerably since they had met that day when he was four. His hair had turned a much darker shade of brown than before and his eyebrows, black and bushy, sat atop two clear brown eyes.

?Well, never mind. I?ll wait until you get home. Me and Celia are comin? over later, is that okay??

?Yeah, sure. Oh! I just got that new video game I was telling you about. It?s pure awesome, man!? Jay chuckled a little bit, and then waved good bye as Jason boarded the yellow school bus.

Later that afternoon, Celia and Jay arrived as scheduled. They stood knocking on the front door. Susan looked out the peep hole.

?Okay, remember what we planned?? Jay asked his companion.

?Yeah, I got it.? Both Celia and Jay had caused their human appearance to age just as Jason?s did. Jay stood a full 5 feet, 7 inches tall, and Celia was just two inches shorter.

?Oh hi,? Susan said, smiling as she opened the door, ?Jason told me you two were coming. Come on in.? The pair walked into Susan?s large house just as they had many an afternoon before. As if on a mission, they continued their path directly through the living room, and into the kitchen where they sat with serious expressions on their faces.

?He?s upstairs, if you want to see Jason.? Susan had followed them into the kitchen and now stood at its entrance with a confused look on her face.

?We need to talk to both of you,? they sad, retaining their stern expressions. The light that hung above the kitchen table made them stand out as the sun could be seen slowly setting through the window behind them. Soon, Jason had descended the stairs and was walking towards the kitchen. ?Sit down.? When Jason and his mother sat down, the kitchen table was surrounded by an encasement with the consistency of a dark cloud. Jay?s eyes began to glow with a brilliant white light, and Celia?s did too.

?Oh,?? Susan fainted.

?What is this?!? Jason got up and tried to escape the encasement, but to no avail. Celia used her mental powers to calm his mind and ease his nerves.

?Ah, maybe this will help.? The dark cloud turned into one of a snowy-white hue. ?Didn?t mean to make it seem so evil. Anyway, we?ve got some important news for you. I?m not human.?

?Neither am I.? Celia chimed in, proud of the fact.

?We?ve been your friends for quite a while now, but we could not reveal our true identities again because the first time, it frightened you.? After having said this, they both reverted to their natural forms; a star-headed, steel-skinned wish maker, and an emerald green forest nymph. The brilliance of the cloud increased and the table was seemingly engulfed in the brilliance of its light. All Jason could see was the form of the two legends directly in front of him.

?We?ve implanted in your body the power to save the world,? Jay started off.

?From what??

?From the greatest evil ever known to man.? Jason pinched himself in the arm as hard as he could.

?This is not a dream,? Celia chuckled.

?It is as close to reality as you have ever been.? Somewhat confused, somewhat upset, and a whole lot afraid, Jason began to speak in a quivering voice.

?Wh-why? Why is it me that you?what evil??

?We will show you.? The legends? eyes began to glow again and the thick white cloud that encased them turned into the atmosphere of the future, one tainted by the evil of their foe. ?This is what is to happen 13 years from now?? Jirachi?s voice trailed off as a psychic vision ensued. Susan woke up, dazed and confused, and just in time to study the happenings of the future?

 

[pokegirl909]

Hm.. Oh! Your back to the story again! I thought you had stopped or something. I still like, I really do... Its just... What color hair do Jay and Ceclia (sp?) have?