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The Vulpix Girl

Miss Reyna

Happiness~
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    i awoke to the same things. the soft grass and the tall cold tombstone. the air smell like the sea but with the mix of scented candles. the sound of the prayers but i enjoy the sonund of the sea. then i hread a growl. i look around then there it was again. and then i saw it came from my stomach. i was hungry so i got up to get my favorite berries. RAZZ BERRIES!!!!!

    i got up from behide my bed-like tombstone. then i hread a cry. it came from a human girl. she was crying over a newly made grave. it read "HERE LIES CARA'S NINETAILS. SHE WAS CAUGTH HERE AND WAS LAY HERE" i hate people who have or caugth vulpixs. then i hread the girl say "i had a vulpix like you. but she was more pre e e tt errrrrrrrrr" so she cry more and then i ran.

    then i hread a vocie of a duskull. it said "dus dus kull" but i understunded it like always he was my friend Bones the not far behide his friend and my friend Spook the shuppet. these 2 guys like scaring some of the humans here. Bones said "hey Razz off to get some of those razz barries of yours. there are a lot of them today"

    Spook said "ya. but don't worry we didn't eat any." seeing that i got anger.

    i said "for a minuit i thougth you guys ate some"

    Bones said "na we know you love those things"

    Spook said with a yarn "man we just got done scaring a idoit trainer."

    Bones added with a yarn."he was a blazeken and use Skyuppercut" and laugh then countinued "that was no effect"

    Spook laugh and said " 1stie we grab his backpack and he scream and Bones was his hat to slap him"

    Bones said "then he saw it was us and attack us with Skyuppercut"

    Spook said with a yarn "maaaaannnnn we tired but watch out he look like he looking for a vulpix."

    i said angery "well he not geting me nor any when i here!!!"

    Bones said "well take care" and floated away

    i began to walk and look back and said "nigth" to them.

    i countined to walk and then i hit a blazekin and a trainer was not far behind.
    he saw me

    he said "blazekin there one lets get it!!!!!!!!!!"
     
    Needs capitalization.... but other than that, keep up the good work!
     
    I like the story so far! It's really good!
     
    Once heard those word I spread out on all four legs getting ready to attack. I gave out ?vul vul pix vul! pix vul vul!? to the blaziken saying that I not going to be capture by your trainer! And I deify not going to be beat by you!

    The blaziken gave out ?blaz blaz!? saying I will win for Jay (must be the trainer?s name) and you will be his!

    This got me mad and I was going to say something back but the very tall trainer (but all these trainers look tall to me) with a orange jacket said ?blaziken use your blaze kick?

    The fiery attack hit me on the mark. But I didn?t even try to dodge it. Instead of feeling pain, I felt a great power rise in me. A great fire burn in me grew. The trainer was not paying attention because he told his pokemon to issue another fire attack. This time it was a flamethrower. The blast of fire came flying to me and I just stay where I was and felt the heat as it grew in me. Now I knew it was time to attack. I got up and I said ?vul vul pix? saying now you going to get it.

    The blaziken trainer look at me and said ?we got her now one more flamethrower.? The blaziken look worry but it did.

    I saw this saw I attack with a quick attack. I move to fast for him to aim. I appear behind him and gave out a powerful flamethrower. The blaziken didn?t know what hit him. And with a boom. He fell.

    The orange coated trainer look outrage and it look like he was going to get out another red ball that use to capture us. I walk by him when he was going to say ?go..? but he stop and look down at me walking past him and he said ?where you going you little vulpix! Our battle not over!?

    I said ?vuuuuuull pix pix vull pix? translated to for me it is over and then I aim a flamethrower at his head. His head was burn and a piece of his hair was on fire. Then it look like he was going to throw the red ball at me but I was to fast and I use smokescreen to get away. The trainer was lost and I escape running to by razz berries. Man! Spook and Bones were right that trainer is stupid!
     
    As Mew13 said, this needs capitlization, and there are a few other minor errors, like some spelling errors and the way you said, the air smell like sea, it should have been smelt, but, this story is good. ^_^
     
    It's really cool and good fan fiction.
     
    First of, your spelling SUCKS. Major. Of Course, all of ours probably do. XD. Capatilizing, correct punctuation (sp?), new lines every time a person/pokemon speaks. That would help you ^^.
     
    You're chapters are getting quite short... and you're grammer is... not the best. "I could hardly understand what you were trying to get through to me. Try to work on that for the next segment.
     
    melikiesmelikiesmelikies!^^ but sry, reyna, you do need a little bit of work on grammar... that ok! i do too! sorta....


    but the storyline is great!!!^^
     
    I could smell hose razz berries now. The nice mild smell of the berries put a taste in my month, but wait I smell another thing to. It smells like a pokemon. Now I made sure that everybody knows that they should not eat my berries not unless the want to get hurt. I walk up to the bushes that hide and surround my berry bush. I look to see what I against. I saw a small little pokemon with a white body with a giant yellow hat on that looks kinda like a star and it had 3 tags on the 3 corners of the hat-looking thing. I walk up to him then he started to get up when he saw me. I said, ? Don?t run! I not going to hurt you. My name is Razz? his scare look disappears and was replaced with a happy look.
    He handed me a berry and said, ?My name is Jirachi. Man I hungry. I have been asleep for a thousand years. I ?? he stop when he saw my surprise look
    ?WHAT!?!?!? I said surprising, ?You been asleep for 1000 years. How is that possible!? Where do you sleep!?? he look confuse and just nod.
    ?Well I just do. After doing a few big things I just get tired and sleep in a cave or like one time in the ocean bottom. Now I woke up cold after that one!! BRRRR. I get chills just thinking about that one.? Said Jirachi.
    I look at he tree and said, ?I said I wish we had more berries to eat.? Sawing that the tree was almost empty. Then all of a sudden there was an orange glow and then a flash. I look at the tree and saw more berries on it. ?Hoow ??
    It was like Jirachi read my mind and said, ?It was I. Making wishes come true is what I do. But please don?t make me do that all the time or I will go asleep. Pleasssssseeee.?
    I said ?Wow that is cool. And yeah I won?t do that not unless I near death. (Thinking that that will never happen but I won?t do that) Want a berry?? I grab two berries and gave one to Jirachi.
    ?Sure he said? and he ate it.
     
    I think,it's very great story!
     
    jirachi and me spent all morning talking and eating razz berries. then i hread some thing. jirachi so this in me and ask "what wrong?"

    think should i tell him. i mean it could be some trainer wanting to catch me. "i thougt i hread something." then we hread two voices

    the first vocie was of a human man saying "houndoom do you smell anything?" the second voice was dark and deep pokemon voice saying "yes master. i smell him over there behind those bushes" the human said "so he over there. ok let go." what is this guy talking about? is he looking for a pokemon? in the bushes? these bushes? and a guy? then is he looking for jirachi? then jirachi is in troble. jirachi saw the worry look on my face.

    jirachi said "you think they are looking for me?" i think i should say but i saw jirachi knew my answer and said "then lets hide." then out of no where the bushes in front of us were burning and a guy and a houndoom were there standing
     
    sorry my last post was so short. this one i think is longer

    The houndoom was tall and the guy was dress in black pants and a red shirt but it was what was on the shirt. It had a giant black M on it. It looks kind like a mountain. The memories it brought me. The evil those people had done a year ago. How things were after they left. One in blue and the other in red. One took the famous red orb the other took the also famous blue orb. Hours later it started to rain hard in drops then the sun shine as intense rays and how it burned. The plants and berries died. Some at Mt. Pyre wanted to leave but after they heard it was the same everywhere else few decide to leave. It may have lasted for a few days but it felt like years. Many of us suffer. Many of us starve. Some had pains as if they wanted to die. Some even lost their love ones. then a green ligth from the sky came and every thing was back to normal. "Razz are you crying?" Jirachi said.

    "houndoom attack the jirachi. he will be ours. use your flamethrower!!!" the guy with the big M on shirt said. these guys want Jirachi then they need to go througt me!! the flamethrower cmae close to jirachi but i took the hit.

    "jirachi run. they want you!! let me take care of these guys." jirachi seem to hear this and flouted away into the forest.

    "so you protecting jirachi. well i just i going have to destory you if i want to make my wish." the houndoom seem to agree and just said "rigth Adams"

    "who said i was protecting jirachi. i just giving him time to hide and that what i doing now. see ya!!!" and i started to run into the forest as fast as i can."

    "go camerupt. chase after that vulpix." i could hear the camerupt going and breaking do trees as i ran and saying "chase chase chase chase CHASE CHASE CHASE CHASE" getting louder and louder and louder. so i ran faster. i dare not to look back and then BOOM, i was hit. his camerupt takle me. he trash me around and hit me. then i saw him the guy name Adams (which was the guy wearing the M on his shirt).

    "so you all whats left of jirachi defense. well here a pokeball for all your efforts." i saw the pokeball in his hand he was going to capture me. this is the end for me. after all that trying.

    "no razz it would not end like this" i hread spook.

    "we promise ypur mother that we will not leting no harm come to you and that what we going to do!!" said bones

    spook added "now run. let us take care of this guy!"

    "you guys are the best. thank you" after saying that i was what left of my stength and run.

    "so you guys are protecting jirachi to so use crunch on them houndoom" the pain of crunch i hread from them. i hread spook said "NOOOOOO" and bones cries. then in a flash of red ligth the were gone. i want to do something go back and help but i knew they will do something to save me.

    then the camerupt hit me again. i flew and hit a tree. "so you thougth they will stop me" said adams "well they weren't any good." then at the coner of my eye. i saw jirachi hiding behide a tree and watching. sorry kid but this is near death but i helping you.

    in a loud voice i scream in hoping jirachi can hear me i said "i wish that these guys will stop looking for me and that jirachi is able to escape these guys" and then jirachi came from behide the tree and glowed oragen. i hread the Adams said "there you are" but he was to slow. a flash of oragen ligth happen and then an explorson from jirachi and he flew fast into the sky. the adams and his pokemon ran i guess to find him.
     
    Transformation

    ok. this one is a bit pg-13 for breif nudity. but it is good. so enjoy :D


    I woke up with a massive headache. I also feel different too. Like I am bigger. I can?t hear as well as I use to and I feel cold. Then I saw a kid. It was the same kid with the blaziken I defeated earlier this mourning. I hope he won?t see me in the state I am in because I am what a trainer would call a perfect condition to catch. The kid look this way and came towards me and said ?hey are you ooo-ooo?ooo-ka-ka. Okaaaayy?? as he moves the bush that was in front of the tree I slam into. Then he just stood there and stare at me.

    ?Man this stupid human has found me and at a bad time. This is exactly what I need right now as a pokemon.? I said this while noticing that my voice sounds different.

    ?Excuse me but this ?stupid human? can hear you and I don?t know why you saying that because you are human too. Just take a look at your self. Even thought I think you knows this since you have been alive this long.? Said the kid who just stopped staring at me.

    I was going to say something back but I took a look at myself first and yelled ?O-O-OHHHHH MY GOOO-DDDNNEEESS. WHAT HAPPEN TO ME!?!?!?!?!?!?? I was cover in pale human skin from head to toe. I had long legs like the humans and they have feet on the end with those things call toes. Their was a smooth spot between my legs whish I had no idea what was that. I had a human chest on me then I had two things hanging from the top of the chest right next to each other doing nothing. I seen them on the female humans but what are they? My face also change too. I had a human month and that long nose thing and eyes too with those hair things they call lash. I feel an ear on the side of my head it felt soft but it feels ugly. I felt my hair and I look at it. It was long and red just like my fur I had before. I felt the hair near my eyes and I had three curls on there and hair like before and on the end of my hair had six big curls. ?Oh my! What happen to me? How did I become a human!?

    The trainer looks at me and said, ?Are you ok. What do you mean ?became a human?? You must have notice that you a human since you were born.? And then he touches the things hanging from me chest. It was soft but it felt uncomfortable so I slap his hand. Then he said ?Sorry I never touch there or even seen a naked girl before?

    ?Don?t touch me! It doesn?t feel right.? Then he look puzzled so I said ?So I am human for sure and you can see me as a human.? He nodded I added ?Does a pokemon see me as human?? he grab a red and white ball and took out his blaziken and ask does he see me as a human and his pokemon nodded. ?So I am a really human. But how??

    The human look a bit puzzle still and ask ?What do you mean ?human?. What are you?? the guy was confussed and didn?t look like he understand what was happening.

    I saw his confussion so I ask him ?Do you want too listen to what has been happening to me. But you need to listen and not say a thing.? The guy look to his blazikin and nodded. I told him about how I am a vulpix and how I meant jirachi and the fun time we had. Then the guy with the giant M on his shrit name Adams. How he chase us. Then the wish I made to save Jirachi and me. While I was telling this story his blazikin was sniffing me. The guy was in amazement. By the things I was telling him. Then at last got to the part of me being a human and he finding me here. ?So do you believe me??

    ?I not sure? said the kid. ?it pretty far-fetch? then look towards his blaziken ?What do you think?

    His Blaziken was still sniffing me and then said ?blaz blaz iken? when he said that i understood everything he said. I still can understand pokespeech. He said ?Yes it smeels like a vulpix. The same vulpix who beat us up a time ago?

    ?he said he believe me? i told the kid. ?i still understand pokespeech?

    the kid look around then said ?I know what he said. I his trainer. And by the way my name is Jay?

    I was impress that he told me his name so i told him mines ?Well my name is Razz?
     
    hmm.... intresting... i`ll have to keep reading this one. good job, reyna.^^
     
    okay, i'll wait. *waits* and, your welcome for teaching you how to put images.^.~
     
    Fiting in

    Here another chapter. i think i misspell Clothes. if i did would some one tell me and then spell it rigth for me. Please :cross-eye

    There we were. I was on the ground. He and Blaze were just standing there and stared until he broke the silence. ?So what now? You naked and I am not in the mood in catching a vulpix now that I hanging out with one.? Then saw that I was still naked.

    ?Well, don?t you? have any um.. human colthes.? I said not believe what I just said.

    Then Jay said nervously. ?Well. I do have clothes but they are a bit big for you.? Then he took out a pair of what seems to be long and loosely blue things that look like they go around the human legs.

    ?What I want to know is why I turn human?? I asked

    then Jay took out a "i don't know what" and said ?Maybe it was the wording of the wish. Jirachi must meant you asked something else. What was the wish again??

    I try to remember what the wish was then i said ?I think it was 'I wish that Jirachi was able to escape Adams and that he would not look for me'. That what i think it was.?

    Then Jay pull out a shirt then said ?That were he misunderstood. The 'he would not look for me' part. He must have been in a hurry and thought the way he would not look for you if you were not a Vulpix. That what i think what happen.? Then he laid the clothing on the ground.

    Then their was a rustle from a tree. And Blaze said ?It?s a human. Female?

    Then a girl with short brown hair, black tight 'jeans' I think they call them, a red 'top' they called. Then the female said after looking at me then at Jay ?Well. Jay I never thought that you were that kind of person. I mean taking her out here and then?well you know take it to the next level.? Then she laugth and said ?I never knew you had a girlfriend.?

    ?a ?girlfriend?? What is that?? I asked.

    The the girl gave me a look and said ?Well you seem like a person with knowledge.? then look around and continued ?Well do you love running around nude or it just me that I see no girl clothes around.?

    I was about to say something but Jay beat me too it and he said ?She lost her clothes and she is not my girlfriend. She my ...um ... friend. What do you want, Jessica. (i believe that is the girl name. Jessica. That a strange name.) You came out here for a reason.?

    The girl raise an 'eyebrow' and said ?Well, i hread you were looking for a Vulpix. So I thought it was because I beat you for the 5th time. And I do hate waiting so i thought I bring the battle to you now.? Then she look at the clothing on the ground and said ?You dressing her in those? Hahaha. Those are to big for her and you have no and I mean no taste in fashion."

    Then she drag me and i was force to walk. Walking on two legs is hard. i had no balence. I try but then i just say "No. I ok with the clothes. I like them."

    But it did no good. She just drag me on to some bushes ans said, "No i not going to believe that. I have some extras i can let you have and they should fit you alrigth." Then once there I fell to the ground and she snap at me "Get up!!"

    I tried but it was a bit hard. In the end i was up and use a tree branch to hold balance. Then she took her bag and lay some clothes down. What it seem like an hour we finally were done. (It took ten mintues to learn how to put clothes on and another ten for i can learn how to walk.)

    Jay then said, "You look nice. Better then before"

    What i was wearing was a red top. A black skirt and red tigths. What i did not like was the shoes. They were to diffucult to learn who to wear and put on. There was other things she told me about and i didn't question her. She also gave me a small black bag full of other clothes and said it was for other things.

    "Well, thank you, but i want to leave now" i said to her wanting to find a way to become a Vulpix again. Then Jay was following me.

    Then Jessica raise an eyebrow and said "You not going anywhere with that boy. Because he is going to battle me!"
     
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