• There is an important update regarding account security and 2FA. Please click here for more information.
  • Welcome to PokéCommunity! Register now and join one of the best fan communities on the 'net to talk Pokémon and more! We are not affiliated with The Pokémon Company or Nintendo.
    Register
  • Imgur has blocked certain regions from viewing any images uploaded to their site. If you use Imgur, please consider replacing any image links/embeds you may have on PokéCommunity so everyone can see your images. Click here to learn more.

"Unacceptable" - Poetry from the Soul

mizu-dragon

Head of the Strategist League
    • 615
    Posts
    20
    Years
    "Unacceptable" is my first poetry series, I wrote it in a kind of book, and I'd like to know what you think. Some are old and some are spontaneous; I'll say which are which. My poems in this book deal with the emotions of love and hate, of passion and pain. I hope you like them.

    Here is the first one that gives the book its name:

    Unacceptable
    I feel so lost
    I want to know why I'm
    Unacceptable,
    And I am tossed
    By the heartless people
    Playing with my mind;
    This is my life,
    These lonely days and nights,
    Unacceptable.

    Not a soul to understand me,
    Not a loving heart to care,
    I look for friends around me,
    But no one's ever there.
    They say that we are pals, and yet,
    These truthless words they'll soon regret;
    I find myself rejected,
    Unacceptable.

    I'm far away
    From my only true friend;
    Unacceptable.
    And he would say
    I am his life, his dream,
    Meaning every word.
    What good is love,
    If he is gone and you're
    Unacceptable?

    Not a soul to understand me,
    Not a loving heart to care,
    I look for friends around me,
    But no one's ever there.
    They say that we are pals, and yet,
    These truthless words they'll soon regret;
    I find myself rejected,
    Unacceptable.

    I lock myself
    In my room; I know I'm
    Unacceptable.
    Hopes on a shelf,
    I cry and wish someone
    Would understand me
    For with true love,
    only the pain would be
    Unacceptable.

    Not a soul to understand me,
    Not a loving heart to care,
    I look for friends around me,
    But no one's ever there.
    They say that we are pals, and yet,
    These truthless words they'll soon regret;
    I find myself rejected,
    Unacceptable.


    What do you think? I'll post another tomorrow, it will be a mix of love and pain, and the third is pure love. I know it's a little depressing, but please leave comments!
     
    This is written soo well, I love the fact that you really made it long but descriptive at the same time to ensure that your poem comes out nicely.

    Depression is something we all go through at some point, sometimes we can recover from it, sometimes we can't at all.... it happens, and I think that this poem really gave all the details on what its like and how we feel so rejected by society, so we just keep to ourselves.

    Excellent poem, it had depth and orginality as far as poems related to sadness and depression ^^.
     
    ^_^ thank you, LiquidThunder! Depression unfortunately is a thing I went through for quite a few years, so the poem is only so accurate because I actually know what I'm talking about. It's nice to know someone appreciates the feelings of others.

    I'm posting another, this about the transition stage between pain and love.

    Inside
    Looks can be deceiving;
    You might learn this from me.
    I bear a bright but painted smile;
    Don't question why, you'll see,
    It's easier to play it cool
    Then share every emotion;
    Never show them what they don't know...

    Don't be fooled by fake happiness,
    Inside, I'm wracked with pain;
    I share your moments with a smile,
    Inside, I am the same.
    It's hard to tell the world my strife,
    But with your touch and love and life,
    I know that you can heal me;
    Just take me by the hand...

    My pain has been lessened,
    You've pulled me partway through.
    I try, for you, a truthful smile,
    It's the least I can do.
    I love the time I spend with you,
    Making my hurt go away,
    Take me now while I am less afraid...

    Don't be fooled by fake happiness,
    Inside, I'm wracked with pain;
    I share your moments with a smile,
    Inside, I am the same.
    It's hard to tell the world my strife,
    But with your touch and love and life,
    I know that you can heal me;
    Just take me by the hand.


    Always open to comments! Thanks for reading!
     
    No one is reading... here is the third, of discovering love

    You Can't Dance Alone
    I see you a few times a week
    When you are going down the street
    Still on the bus, you look at me
    But I cannot tell who you see
    You never let on how you feel
    But in my heart, I know it's real
    I like you just the way you are
    In my eyes, you're a shining star

    My strong yet silent hero
    You don't know what to say
    But I'm sure I can get to you
    In my own special way
    You think that you can dance alone
    But I know I can prove you wrong
    You're not afraid to try
    You're just afraid to cry

    I'm at your house once in a while
    And your face always makes mesmile
    You look at me, but you don't show
    Just how you feel; I want to know
    You talk about vid-games with my
    There is, though, something more I see
    An unconfessed love, I am sure,
    And both of us, we crave for more

    My strong yet silent hero
    You don't know what to say
    But I'm sure I can get to you
    In my own special way
    You think that you can dance alone
    But I know I can prove you wrong
    You're not afraid to try
    You're just afraid to cry

    You're with me at this moment, now
    And although you are not sure how
    You tense and then you talk to me
    You tell me who it is you see
    You fin'ly let on how you feel
    In this moment, at last, it's real
    I never want this dream to end
    And then we kiss, more than good friends

    My lover, oh, my hero
    You finl'y found your voice
    I didn't need to get to you
    You gave love by your choice
    You know that you can't dance alone
    You've chosen me to be your own
    You're not afraid to try
    I swear, you'll never have to cry...

    I love reviews! Please post!
     
    Awwwwwwwwwwwwws, baby azurill, all of these poems are sooooooo wonderful. <3~~~ As Lance said above, I love how your poems are long yet very descriptive. ^^ Your poems seem a bit different from some of the other poems I've seen around here in that they are very heartfelt, but not too emotional.

    But, by having your poems not so cram-packed with strong emotions, it's much much easier to read and enjoy. ^_____^ I really liked the latest one, "You Can't Dance Alone." ^^ It's such a sweet poem of passionate infatuation between two people, it's so kawaii. =3

    Great work on all of your poems baby azurill. ^____^ *stamps the "Kelsey Seal of Approval" on baby azurill's poems* ^.~

    ~Kelsey
     
    Thanks, Mori Seirei! I like to focus on a single emotion or a transitory period between two emotions so the reader doesn't get confused or lost. Oo, a seal of approval! ^_^

    This next is a little more negative than even Unacceptable. It is a short free verse.

    Hate
    Locked
    in a cage with
    No light
    No love
    No life
    I am bereft of all joys
    and my only plaything
    is Despair

    Kept
    alone without
    A friend
    A smile
    A kiss
    I am banned from all delights
    and my only plaything
    is my Pain.

    Thanks to those who have viewed and reviewed. Please tell me what you think if you haven't!
     
    And now, another short free verse contemplating life.

    Sometimes
    Sometimes,
    you will find
    it's a little crazy
    to think
    that sometimes
    we hurt so bad
    we'd give anything
    to die
    and sometimes
    we love so much
    we'd give anything
    to live forever.

    Again, I love reviews! Next is another on discovering luv!
     
    I like the last one, it deals with the hipocracy of life. No one lives forever, but we still have to live till we die. Good job.

    I fonly someone would read my poems
     
    The Second Look
    When I got my very first glance
    At you
    I didn't know what to do
    To me you seemed so strange
    Thought you were out of my range
    Nowhere near what I wanted for me

    But then I took a second look
    At you
    And I knew that you were the one
    For me
    I saw your face and smiled
    All over the place
    Yeah, we were meant to be
    You and me

    One day my style, skill, and heart caught
    Your eye
    You were both funny and shy
    You took me by the hand
    And I was able to stand
    And I looked in your beautiful eyes

    I'm glad I took a second look
    At you
    And I knew that you were the one
    For me
    I saw your face and smiled
    All over the place
    'Cause we were meant to be
    You and me

    Emotions are such funny things
    At times
    You make me wish I could fly
    I sing, I draw, I dream
    You trigger these things in me
    Make me feel how I've never before

    But then I took a second look
    At you
    And I knew that you were the one
    For me
    I saw your face and smiled
    All over the place
    Yeah, we were meant to be
    You and me.

    ^_^ happiness! This poem was originally written at a time when I didn't really know what love was like. After meeting my pair, however, I found it in an old box, revised it a lot, and put it in my book. What do you think?
     
    I love your poetry, there is just something about it that makes it stand out and you are always changing what to write about, which is good because it shows true orginality and the kind of skill you have, great job on all of them especially on the one about "love" ^^.
     
    You know you're good when people actually come back. yay!

    Silver Love
    Such a wonderful friend I've never known,
    And I never will know again;
    All the mem'ries of all the times we've flown
    Will forever be in my heart.

    For a reason I know, you can't be here,
    And I miss you like ne'er before;
    But it's not really missing, you are here
    For we could never be apart.

    When you speak to me, it's not words at all,
    But a sound deep within my mind;
    Standing next to you, I look very small,
    But my wings, they shall work as yours.

    When I look up and see the sky each day,
    I embrace you within my soul;
    Soon I will spread my wings and fly away,
    And you will fly beside my heart.

    For the love that is ours has ne'er been known,
    And will never be known again;
    And this love we will share with all the world
    When we spread silver wings and soar...

    (Note: The fact that I use silver instead of gold does not mean it is a secondary relationship. I actually like silver better than gold, i'm a cool ^_^)
     
    Wow, was Pok?Community off for a while or what? Anyhoo, here's another. It's more of a song than a poem, really.

    I Never Got to Say...

    Oh, what it means to end
    To give it all away
    Never to feel the love again
    How it hurts to try
    The pain inside won't let me go on
    alone...

    See, all my tears run free
    It's hard to think or breathe
    Why can't you come comfort me?
    Don't you know how much it hurts to be
    alone?

    Why must it now be over?
    We've barely just begun
    Why do you have to go away
    Forever?
    I never got to tell you
    Everything got in the way
    No, I never got to tell you
    That I love you...

    Why do you look so shocked?
    It's not like this is new
    Except for you, my heart is locked.
    What, couldn't you see
    That we you leave I will be truly
    alone?

    I thought you felt the same
    But I see I've been wrong
    Inside, I feel the worst of shame
    Please, just go your way
    Just leave me here with all my sorrow,
    alone...

    Why must it now be over?
    We've barely just begun
    Why do you have to go away
    Forever?
    I never got to tell you
    Everything got in the way
    No, I never got to tell you
    That I love you...

    Don't you see?
    I thought you were the one for me
    But now you've gone
    And proved me wrong
    Just leave me with my pain
    'Cause I never got to tell you...

    ...that I love you...


    ^_^ I adore reviews, you know.
     
    Is no one reading? Ugh...
    This about a certain 'lil friend of ours! ^_^

    Curiousity
    When the sun rises,
    Warm and welcome,
    Blue eyes open
    As bright flowers,
    To greet the surprises
    Of the new day.

    A pink creature stirs,
    Small and graceful,
    Returns the sun's
    Dawning greeting,
    And she hurridly inters
    Her sleepiness.

    Large azure eyes scan
    Her quiet home;
    She sees breakfast
    In a strange fruit.
    Through her fur, a breeze fans
    She finds delight.

    She is absorbed in
    The juicy cool
    Of the orange
    As she tastes it
    And listens to soft din
    As things awake.

    Attention captured,
    She ponders on
    Nothing else 'till
    Her meal is done,
    And she is enraptured
    By a flower.

    Those eyes of sky follow
    Tiny dew-drops
    Slowly down, down
    The silk petals,
    And then watch where they go:
    Onto her hand.

    She studies the drops,
    Satisfied with
    What she sees of
    the cool clear dew.
    Finished, she floats, flips, flops,
    And flies away.

    When we find delight
    In all we see,
    Like this ancient,
    Mystic being,
    We, as well, can take flight
    Hearts light and free.

    ^_^ reviews are friendly things! Please leave them!

    This is the end of the Unacceptable series. Thank you for reading.
     
    Last edited:
    You must log in or register to reply here.
    Back
    Top