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[Finglonger]

yeah just wrote this liek 5 minutes ago, did like a stream of conciousness sort of thing where I just wrote down what was on my mind. Its not very good, but I'm thinking of changing it around a bit for later uses. So any criticisms would be greatly appreciated.


we move.
red dancing with the dark.
she keeps her kings in the back.

I move.
My figure is her climax.
the kings are in the back.

She moves.
or does she?
kings held in the back.

Can she,
why?
however does she?
is her back really,
kept to my advances?

She keeps her kings in the back,
eluding my turn,
does she hope to do,
what she is doing?
Kings in the back I,
do not understand.

Ah I see,
she holds her force,
away from my delusions,
kings in the back, I cannot make a move,
I see her reservations.

would you please ask her?
If she remembers?
remembers that her kings are still in the back?

 

[Sumomo & Kotoko]

What was that???????????????????????

 

[Finglonger]

What was that???????????????????????

lol, yeah that was the desired result. The metaphor was supposed to be somewhat confusing, and yeah thats all I really set out to do.