• Ever thought it'd be cool to have your art, writing, or challenge runs featured on PokéCommunity? Click here for info - we'd love to spotlight your work!
  • PokéCommunity's Easter Egg Hunt is now on! If you're interested in looking for some eggs and earning badges, click here!
  • Our weekly protagonist poll is now up! Vote for your favorite Legends: Z-A protagonist in the poll by clicking here.
  • Welcome to PokéCommunity! Register now and join one of the best fan communities on the 'net to talk Pokémon and more! We are not affiliated with The Pokémon Company or Nintendo.
    Register

Untouchable

Cybex Mewtwo

Someone's angry. :/
    • 5,154
    Posts
    19
    Years
    Immortal i must feel
    for when the times get tough
    things bog you down
    and people are getting rough

    Ideas flood your mind
    things laced with the dead
    you sometimes wish you were with em
    but this thought you deeply dread

    For you continue your existance
    even when things seem bleek
    And after looking into the past
    it makes you wanna shriek

    So immortal I must feel
    for when the times have shown
    to ignore the enemies around
    and stick with friends you've grown

    If life treats you wrong
    Friends make it right
    and immortal is how i feel.
    --------------------
    emotional...but doesn't make a lot of sense.....
    Someone drop me an idea...
     
    You're right, it doesn't make sense. And, I'm sorry to say that it's not your best work. In all honesty, the poem doesn't flow at all, and it sounds rather forced. Rhyme schemes can be hindering. I think this poem would be much better if you would have skipped the rhyming and let the ideas flow from your conciousness onto paper. Take those same feelings and try it. If you like this outcome better, yay for me giving good advice! If not, well then, ignore me :P
     
    You're right, it doesn't make sense. And, I'm sorry to say that it's not your best work. In all honesty, the poem doesn't flow at all, and it sounds rather forced. Rhyme schemes can be hindering. I think this poem would be much better if you would have skipped the rhyming and let the ideas flow from your conciousness onto paper. Take those same feelings and try it. If you like this outcome better, yay for me giving good advice! If not, well then, ignore me
    Click to expand...
    Glad someone else agrees with me! :laugh:
    The only reason why it sounds bad is because I actually TRIED to do a poem...if you want...check out my older stuff. There was another poem that was a bombshell because I actually THOUGHT of it...
     
    Emotions unlock the best in any work.
     
    *laughs* I think it's because we're emotional people. Kinda have to be to stick with things like Pokemon at the age of 16 and be involved in an online relationship... or is that just me? :P
     
    *laughs* I think it's because we're emotional people. Kinda have to be to stick with things like Pokemon at the age of 16 and be involved in an online relationship... or is that just me?
    Click to expand...

    18...still collect, play and own pokemon games. So you aren't the only one...but an online relationship?..........nope......
     
    *laughs* Me and TAD, and it is working out to a T. Not something that we should talk about here though. *nudge nudge*

    *nudges again* Three new poems in my thread! I scratch your back, you scratch mine, eh?
     
    *laughs* Me and TAD, and it is working out to a T. Not something that we should talk about here though. *nudge nudge*
    Click to expand...
    T_T.....somehow after reading this I think I may have done an idiot move and never saw it....and I'll check yer poems out. They were intense and I bet these will too.
     
    Idiot move? *is confused*

    We're spamming.. *is afraid a mod or mod-cronie will catch us*
     
    First, don't ask, and second...yeah this is kinda spammish....MOVING ON!
     
    You must log in or register to reply here.
    Back
    Top