"You just..."

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    this song's tune is taken from "sunday morning" by maroon 5, the song is on that site. hope you like it. with the music in mind, it sounds better.

    "You just..."
    Like a lily or an orchid
    That is swaying in the moon,
    I could lie right here forever
    From midnight till the noon
    Because the spell you cast on me
    Keeps me focused on you
    I try and try, I search mind
    But all I see is you?

    What is it you do to me?
    I?m trying to figure out?
    I had all these locked up feelings
    But your love let them out.
    I?ve become dependent,
    I can?t see myself without?
    So love me, show me, teach me
    What this love thing is about?
     
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    As always you've written a very lovely poem, Matt. It's very sweet and soft. I like it just as much as any other poem of yours. I'm not sure what else to say. I mean it's so simple to state that your poem is great. They always seem to be. Anyways, that's beautiful poem, Matt!
     
    =O! Of course, your writing pwns, Matt-kun. xD;; Awesome job, but it's so short. ;_; ~origin
     
    ~\Ethereal_Knight/~ said:
    this song's tune is taken from "sunday morning" by maroon 5, the song is on that site. hope you like it. with the music in mind, it sounds better.

    "You just..."
    Like a lily or an orchid
    That is swaying in the moon,
    I could lie right here forever
    From midnight till the noon
    Because the spell you cast on me
    Keeps me focused on you
    I try and try, I search mind
    But all I see is you?

    What is it you do to me?
    I?m trying to figure out?
    I had all these locked up feelings
    But your love let them out.
    I?ve become dependent,
    I can?t see myself without?
    So love me, show me, teach me
    What this love thing is about?
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    I like this one even better than the other one. <3~~~ I have something I want to point out before I go any further...in the second to last line in the first stanza, did you possibly mean to put "I search my mind"? o.<

    Anyways, seeing as you said the lines without a comma or whatever at the end represent pauses, I'll keep my mouth shut about those. =X

    Okie dokie, this song really makes you feel good when you read it. <3 You get a good sense of sweet infatuation. ^^ How you look at someone you hold dear and want to tell them so much, but you can't seem to get any words out. Or at least none that make sense. XD

    I lurved this song as always, Mattie. ^^ Awsome job! ^o^ *stamps "Kelsey Seal of Approval" on Matt's song* ^^

    ~Kelsey
     
    w00t! another seal XD sowwy about commas, i just don't see the point if it's a song...i kniw where they go...just...so...lazy...
     
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