moody_cow_
Stenchgirl
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- Age 35
- In a fantasy world!
- Seen Nov 23, 2008
I decided to post two poems at once, and maybe even keep this thread to post more of my poems, we'll see! I'd just like to say that I never write rhyming poems, my mind just doesn't work like that! Or maybe I purposely try not to in order to deviate from the norm... Anyways, I wrote these two poems recently. The first is directed at pretty much everyone close to me and second is at myself. I was not doing so hot when I wrote these two, but now I have managed to pull myself out of my rut and my good old happy self again! =) Anyways, I would like some constructive criticism on these two because I want to edit them but everytime I do I never like the results and I keep it how it is, so if anyone has any ideas to help me because I still think they're missing a little something, I would be glad to hear your ideas! But please don't be too harsh on me, I am an emotional woman after all, don't want to end up in tears! Lol! Ok, sorry for all the babbling, will post poems now! =D
Without A Sense Of Me
Can't you see it?
I'm boxing myself in again.
These illusionary walls are my defense,
Designed to keep you away,
And protect me from the world.
Please leave me be in my boxed reality.
Can't you feel it?
I'm being torn apart by searing pain.
I cannot stop it, nor bear it much longer
But I can still shield you from it,
I'll push you away and hide.
I'll heal these wounds on my own.
Can't you hear it?
I'm screaming from head to toe.
I need help but you can't give it,
You're too far away to know my plight,
My cries won't ever reach your ears,
They'll only taunt me with their worthlessness.
Can't you taste it?
I'm crying into the wind.
Hoping it'll blow the misery away,
But all it does is chill me,
Freezing the salty droplets to my face
Where I'll drink them forever more.
Can't you smell it?
I'm rotting inside this shell.
My heart's got maggots eating at it,
My soul's decayed beyond repair,
A deathly aroma follows me everywhere,
I'll never be able to escape it.
Do your senses work at all?
Will nothing I do reach you?
How much longer will I suffer
Until you'll finally realize
What's going on around you?
I'm dying without you.
* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *
What Is On The Inside...?
Why do you smile O deceiving one?
Is it because you know this mirror
Only shows your flawless side?
Those unblemished physical attributes,
Which are only rivaled
In the sculpted masterpieces
Created in the minds of past geniuses.
Beauty that inspires envy
In the hearts of those homely wretches
You so casually toss aside
With derisive glances.
Shall we turn this image inward
And show you what is there?
Or is that scene too ghastly
For your delicate comprehension?
Would the rancid innards
Turn your stomach even more,
Make you heave at the sight,
Choking on your own vileness?
Try, just try to vomit it out my pretty,
Flush yourself of all your inner bile,
Rid yourself of that decaying soul
And make believe you have cleansed yourself
Of all ungodliness.
Yeah, you sure do smile sweetly my dear,
But don't hold that pose for too long,
I could swear I'm starting to bugs
In the cracks of your yellowing teeth.
Without A Sense Of Me
Can't you see it?
I'm boxing myself in again.
These illusionary walls are my defense,
Designed to keep you away,
And protect me from the world.
Please leave me be in my boxed reality.
Can't you feel it?
I'm being torn apart by searing pain.
I cannot stop it, nor bear it much longer
But I can still shield you from it,
I'll push you away and hide.
I'll heal these wounds on my own.
Can't you hear it?
I'm screaming from head to toe.
I need help but you can't give it,
You're too far away to know my plight,
My cries won't ever reach your ears,
They'll only taunt me with their worthlessness.
Can't you taste it?
I'm crying into the wind.
Hoping it'll blow the misery away,
But all it does is chill me,
Freezing the salty droplets to my face
Where I'll drink them forever more.
Can't you smell it?
I'm rotting inside this shell.
My heart's got maggots eating at it,
My soul's decayed beyond repair,
A deathly aroma follows me everywhere,
I'll never be able to escape it.
Do your senses work at all?
Will nothing I do reach you?
How much longer will I suffer
Until you'll finally realize
What's going on around you?
I'm dying without you.
* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *
What Is On The Inside...?
Why do you smile O deceiving one?
Is it because you know this mirror
Only shows your flawless side?
Those unblemished physical attributes,
Which are only rivaled
In the sculpted masterpieces
Created in the minds of past geniuses.
Beauty that inspires envy
In the hearts of those homely wretches
You so casually toss aside
With derisive glances.
Shall we turn this image inward
And show you what is there?
Or is that scene too ghastly
For your delicate comprehension?
Would the rancid innards
Turn your stomach even more,
Make you heave at the sight,
Choking on your own vileness?
Try, just try to vomit it out my pretty,
Flush yourself of all your inner bile,
Rid yourself of that decaying soul
And make believe you have cleansed yourself
Of all ungodliness.
Yeah, you sure do smile sweetly my dear,
But don't hold that pose for too long,
I could swear I'm starting to bugs
In the cracks of your yellowing teeth.