View Full Version : After Ten Years...(PG 10+)

January 3rd, 2008, 3:04 AM
TotoMud here again :D
mY Second Fan-fic now...

a little bit about this fic..
first of all my grammar's bad so if you find that how come all of a sudden TotoMud write such a good grammar then i'd credit
Hanako Tabris(for her tutorial,sorry if i dissappint you this time).. My friends and a bit of books...and of course my pop.
Originally a rip-off of O.Henry's Lesson.

Here's it.

Voila Fan Fics Present you another fan-fic

AFTER TEN YEARS...... (PG 10+)

Chapter 1 - The Footpath..

A peaceful serene in mauville city,no one was to be seen.

The pokepolicemen on the beat moved up the avenue impressively.

The impressiveness was habitual and not for show,for there were neither lot of spectators and nor pedestrians.

The time was barely tweleve o clock at night,but chilly gusts of wind with a taste of rain in them had well nigh depeopled the streets of mauville city.

Trying doors as he went,twirling his stick with many intricate and artful movements,it had a certain kind of style,turning now and then to cast his watchful eye adown the peaceful thoroughfare,the officer with his upbeat persona and swagger,made a fine picture of him as a guardian of the peace.

The vicinity was one that kept early hours.
Now and then you might see the lights of cigar store or of an all-night luch counter or either a casino which was very popular in mauville city,but the majority of the doors belonged to residense places and daycare buildings that had long since be closed.

When about midway of a certain block the pokepoliceman suddenly slowed down his walk.
In the doorway of a darkened mart store a pokemon leaned,with an unlighted cigar in his mouth,the place was very foggy it was impossible to see anything clearly.

As the Pokepoliceman walked up to him saying
"what are you doing in such a lonely place at this time,"??

The pokemon who stood so quite and calm suddenly seeing the pokepolice spoke up quickly.
"It's alright officer,"he said,reassuringly.
"I'm just waiting for a friend.However I'm getting bored right now the tea store is open please come for a cup of tea.
to be continued

Well this fic didn't have much of a dialouge though but this fic is open for reviewing.

Double 7
January 3rd, 2008, 6:52 PM
good work

and just a reminder, try making the chapters longer because i made my capters short and well it got closed....