In the time I was meant to be listening.

[Counterfeit]

I wrote it during a poetry reading we went to at school, along various doodles. Px
What do you think?


Only, if only, she'd only say yes,
this feeling thats on me, it might seem more fresh.
As stale and cold is her every reply,
with each attempt and continual try.

Denial, a concept not foreign to me,
and not one I've grown on, or welcome gladly.
But, this the last time, that I'll surrender,
as speechless on me, you no longer render.



Excuse the depressive tone, I guess it shows how much I enjoyed the recital though. xD

[Nubi505]

Sometimes I wonder about recitals. Wouldn't it be more expressive and creative if the student read something THEY wrote?

Anywho, you're a lot better at rhyming than I am. I'm actually kind of fond of the way you wrote it. IMO, it is clear and the concept easily understandable. Although I'm not sure if I should be like "Yeah, don't let it get you down anymore!" or "Did they just suicide?" Second to last line could be interpreted a couple different ways. ^.^

I likeh.

[Jinglepot]

That was very interesting.