View Full Version : My first comic... is it good?

July 10th, 2005, 11:43 AM
Well this is my first time in this stuff of sprite comics... i hope that you like this

Chapter one: Final battle?

1. Battle starts! (http://i4.photobucket.com/albums/y109/PKMN_TRN_Red/Comic/Battle.png)
2. Arguing... (http://i4.photobucket.com/albums/y109/PKMN_TRN_Red/Comic/Battle2.png) (very long -_-")

I'll post more when i can ^^;

July 10th, 2005, 12:33 PM
Work on the dialog. It's very stale and not a lot of fun to read. Try to write your dialog based on the way normal people talk, and work on your spelling.

July 10th, 2005, 2:09 PM
The pictures are not bad at all, but as Allstories says, Spelling, Grammer etc needs to be worked on, get somone older to help you if you're having trouble with spellings etc.

Team Emerald
July 10th, 2005, 3:35 PM
so so
it needs better dialog and better pics and not sprites for the pokemon

July 10th, 2005, 3:43 PM
Overworld comix are OK I presume. The overworlds usually have enough poses.

July 10th, 2005, 5:46 PM
well is true... i need to work a bit on the dialog... my english is not so good...

July 11th, 2005, 6:50 PM
I liked it! Like they said you need to work on Grammar a bit. And I noticed on the Boy Champions head that the outline for the hair is still purple. When recoloring anyone be sure to make the outline a bit darker than the hair color. Or use a dark color close to the one you're recoloring whatever to. If you want, you can make a comic, send it to me, I'll proofread it and fix stuff and send it back? I'll help you out with it if you want.