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*~BlUe PhOeNiX~*
November 18th, 2005, 07:34 PM
well, since i have a long way to go on posting id better start now =)(warning, most of these poems arent from this year XD)
Empty WaterBottle (age ten)

youre done with your work,
Youre dying of thirst,
And you Waterbottle is empty.

Youre glued to your seat,
101 Is the heat,
And you feel like youve been beat.

Youre sweating, im betting.
Frying, not denying,
and your water bottle is-- "wait! thats not your water bottle!Yours is on the floor!" your friend says as you lay dead by the door.

Teacher vs Student! (10 yrs age)
student teacher
Do your homework!

lets go bazerk!

Thats one warning!

Man, you're boring.

put your name on the board!

ill just lay on the floor.

thats your play time!
is this supposed to rhime?

(untitled)
im a dragon
my name is charcoal
i like to play farkle
and people say i sparkle.
but what they dont know
is that im their foe,
for i listen in
on things i shouldnt know.
my best friend the pheonix,
cant do his phonics,
my other friend the unicorn,
wears a false horn.
making fun is not nice.
myself? i have lice.
(not really)this is one i also did at age ten.

rate if you want!

thats not all, i just gotta think of somemore from the past!

Ciera
November 19th, 2005, 06:48 AM
Umm... Wow. That's not necessarily a bad 'wow'. Your student/teacher poem made me giggle. Empty Waterbottle is... alright. I like that one. But Untitled... that one doesn't flow. Well, sorry, but I don't think any of them flow. They don't have to rhyme, they just need to have a beat to them, I suppose. I usually have some sort of rythem beat to my poetry, I'm not saying yours is bad because it doesn't have it... Doi >_>

*~BlUe PhOeNiX~*
November 19th, 2005, 09:54 AM
yeah i know
0.o
im way better now then i was when i was ten ^^
ive never done a non rhyminmg poem
i like rhyming ^^ i just cant remember any of the poems ive done recently.

Ciera
November 19th, 2005, 05:42 PM
And, um, just watch your spelling ^_^"

*~BlUe PhOeNiX~*
November 23rd, 2005, 08:17 AM
I never was good at speling XD

Ciera
November 23rd, 2005, 01:46 PM
Lol. Just work on it, and you'll get it.

Gaaradon Of The Dessert
November 23rd, 2005, 02:11 PM
better than i could do...

Memory
December 3rd, 2005, 10:33 AM
it is nice, its better than i could ever do either. i am a poet, but when i was ten i was not XD keep it up and you will get better.