~*!*~Tatsujin Gosuto~*!*~
March 11th, 2006, 05:02 PM
this is a poem expressing how much I love literacy and my FEELINGS. So If you want to critizes about this too bad. Notice it says me in the poem so that means me. This is a joke
Literacy sucks
Puts me to sleep all the time
Not useful in life
:t003:Dark Venusaur
Lily
March 11th, 2006, 05:19 PM
'Literacy sucks
Puts me to sleep all the time
It's a waste of time'
Last line gets repetitive, after using the word 'time' twice. You still imply the meaning of literacy's negative tone in the second line, so the duration of the theme is unnecessary by the third line. Perhaps if you used different words to convey the same message, it'll turn out alright.
This is too ironic. If bashing a particular subject, even if it is by Haiku, please keep it reasonable. ^_^;