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fallen_angel
March 25th, 2006, 08:25 AM
This is dedicated to my friend who's leaving. ^_^ Hope you like it.

Don't leave

Don't leave, don't go,
and leave me all alone.
Not yet, so soon,
eating me up inside.

I don't know how I can survive,
without you by my side.
I'm not sure just when,
I've become so attached.

It must have been the years,
of you by my side.
But now you are leaving,
me behind, greiving.

Persona
March 25th, 2006, 08:46 AM
that one is very good, i liked the 2nd part of your poem. i hope to see more of your work....its sad that your friend's leaving.

fallen_angel
March 25th, 2006, 06:56 PM
Yeah I almost cried but didn't want to make my friend sad. Thanks. ^_^

phantom_zangetsu
March 26th, 2006, 01:29 AM
aww....i just love making sad poems. just as reading one froma friend...it kinda reminded me of two friends who left me last month *thinks and weeps* sigh.....anyways, good job! keep it up!

Kalylia
March 26th, 2006, 06:36 AM
Interesting poem. I'm not usually fond of free verse... (I'm a sucker for rhythem and structure) but this one has gotten to me. I don't see anything that needs to be done, save for a very miniscule gramatical error that really should be left alone. It just makes a future English major twinge a little. :P

Good poem, though! Keep it up!

pink-tiger
April 12th, 2006, 05:02 PM
Its good..its about...***?
I know it is..
I sorta miss seeing him in the hall 0o
Especially knowing K...( J.s bff)
Is lonely..they were the best of friends..and still are!!!^^
Good fallen angel...^^

Midori Chi
April 12th, 2006, 06:15 PM
*claps*

Yay! Another wonderful piece of literature. ^^
I love all of your poems. This one is especially good.

Keep up da good work! =D

fallen_angel
April 13th, 2006, 01:34 PM
Thanks everybody!! And yeah it is about ***.

Midori Chi
April 13th, 2006, 02:09 PM
Yeah..I know who it's about. XD

*nudge nudge*

fallen_angel
April 13th, 2006, 06:19 PM
Hehe yep you should. Haha.