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Persona
April 16th, 2006, 11:25 AM
okay, i made a nature poem and i tried to put better vocabulary.

She stands above all earthly things
Tenacious and strong in her foundation
She surrenders to the heavenly clouds
To soothe her raging temperament
Crowned by a halo of clouds
Her ambiguous physique
Casts an illusion that fades her frame
Into the vaporous mist above her
She murmurs a deep rumble
Then with a mighty gesture
She quakes the earth below
Announcing her majestic reign
Her vibrant and fiery disposition
Ignites her full command
Engulfed in her intensity
The earth trembles in humble abode
As she releases her mighty wrath
Lending no solace to the weak
Her smoldering fury is unbiased
To what dwells beneath her
Finally when her wrath is subdued
She epitomizes peace and beauty

fallen_angel
April 16th, 2006, 02:06 PM
Wow I could tell you tried to put better vocabulary. You did a good job too. ^_^

Kalylia
April 18th, 2006, 02:24 PM
NIce selection of words. Very nice. I commend you. The only thing I notice was that you used "clouds" rather close together. Nothing major, it just distracted me for a moment. It was a magnificent poem, and I hope you *coughcouchbecausemycatchphraseisalwaysaroundnow* Keep it up!