Volcanic Fury

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    okay, i made a nature poem and i tried to put better vocabulary.

    She stands above all earthly things
    Tenacious and strong in her foundation
    She surrenders to the heavenly clouds
    To soothe her raging temperament
    Crowned by a halo of clouds
    Her ambiguous physique
    Casts an illusion that fades her frame
    Into the vaporous mist above her
    She murmurs a deep rumble
    Then with a mighty gesture
    She quakes the earth below
    Announcing her majestic reign
    Her vibrant and fiery disposition
    Ignites her full command
    Engulfed in her intensity
    The earth trembles in humble abode
    As she releases her mighty wrath
    Lending no solace to the weak
    Her smoldering fury is unbiased
    To what dwells beneath her
    Finally when her wrath is subdued
    She epitomizes peace and beauty​
     
    Wow I could tell you tried to put better vocabulary. You did a good job too. ^_^
     
    NIce selection of words. Very nice. I commend you. The only thing I notice was that you used "clouds" rather close together. Nothing major, it just distracted me for a moment. It was a magnificent poem, and I hope you *coughcouchbecausemycatchphraseisalwaysaroundnow* Keep it up!
     
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