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Yesterday
March 12th, 2007, 08:36 PM
yay yay new poem!!! ^w^

daisy petals

Daisy petals are quite...

Prim and silent...
White? Innocent!

Not quite vicarious,
But still virtuous,
Lacking in vigor
And in virulence!
Nevertheless, vague...

Chaste and pure, yet melancholy,
Simple little things that look pretty,
Charming but lack true beauty

Is this what everyone thinks
When plucking daisy petals?

Lily
March 23rd, 2007, 03:35 PM
Whimsical, fresh, and as always cute, with a lovely dash of alliteration~ A very sweet and peaceful perspective of daisy petals. I'm beginning to like your style..♥

DeM0nFiRe
March 23rd, 2007, 03:54 PM
Hey this really has a great flow to it. I like the staccato element in that first couplet.