Recent content by EricDaRed

You are banned for questioning something that regards ninjas.

I enjoyed the read, even if I read it QUITE late. Maybe this 'bump' in the thread list will help. Take care.

[Note: Yes, I realize that I am bumping a thread that is a year and a half old. I apologize, but I have been through a move, college, family deaths, family surgeries, etc. I have been working on the story bit by bit but I just never got around to posting the next chapter.] [I doubt any...

Well, I agree that your story needs work but I'm not gonna bash you over the head about it. The other reviewers covered what needs improving, so there is no need for me to rehash it. I will complement you on one thing, it was good for you to throw in a bit of character development when you...

Chapter 7 "This is unacceptable!" With a web of pulsating veins nearly springing from his forehead, Thadeus Worthington stormed into the basement level of the Poke'farms main research facility. He was wearing a crisp navy blue suit and carried an nondescript, yet fancy leather briefcase...

Thanks Harry Blue 5, Matt11, and Woofer for the reviews. Sorry for the mistakes. It is amazing how I still miss errors after 5 re-reads... *sigh*. I'm glad that my story is still interesting/enjoyable, despite the oversights. Also, in addition to spelling/grammer mistakes, feel free to let me...

Chapter 6 Luke felt as if he had found paradise as he stared into the dusty cardboard box that his father set on the table. Inside it were many wonders, relics of an earlier time when pokemon training was in its golden age. There were some poke’balls, not the grey-topped, white-bottomed...

Don't forget Abra. All he knows is teleport! They may be pains to train, but they are both SO worth the effort. In the old RED version I always just stuck my magikarp/abra/dratini with the daycare guy (one at a time, of course) until they were high enough level for me to train manually.

Chapter 5 As time went on, Luke and Caterpie had grown closer and closer. With a steady supply of fresh fruit from his understanding mother, Luke always had something sweet to offer his little green friend. Each day, the two played in the morning before school and played in the...

As always, thanks for the complement. I grappled with the chapter being so short myself, but I finally decided that these events needed to be punctuated. I also thought it was a nice switch to have only a few sentences about Luke while the majority of the chapter focused on Alexia. Chapter 5 is...

Very nice chapter. I found myself surprised and disgusted by Watson's actions against the 5-year-old, but that is not a criticism. The emotional reaction the passage caused was quite potent considering that I'm was reading a mere fictional story! One of the passages confused me as I was reading...

Chapter 4 10:53 pm. The blocky red digits on Luke’s alarm clock burned in sharp contrast to the darkened room. The young man was lying on his side in bed and staring blankly at the clock, watching as each minute passed by. He couldn’t sleep. Luke was grappling within himself over...

I thank you for the complement. I was beginning to think that nobody but Acrutheo liked my story! :) Although I'm up to 237 page hits, so I guess there are some people reading it! As to Alexia + Charmander, a lot is going to happen. No spoilers from me though!

I fixed the errors you pointed out. As always, thank you very much for your reviews. I agree. I was pleased with Chapter 3; I think I managed to get in some good emotional imagery this time.

Chapter 3 Alexia shuddered visibly as icy waves of horror swirled throughout her being. In her quaking hands was a single unimposing file folder. Her assignment was to deliver this file to the Poke’farms medical department, along with the caged, muzzled, and whimpering charmander...