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Another Day. Torture from above Fear and hate below It seems you?ve had enough But nothing?s just begun. Tainted souls and lies around, Pollution of the mind They never leave these grounds They?re always there to remind. Run away from sorrow, The only thing to do. Wake up to the sun...

Thankies... I don't think it is up to standerd with other works... It has been a while since I've written poetry.

This is me writeing random lines that ryhme. It has a vauge meaning... Yet I don't know what it means :P Deserted fantasies, discarded at the spotlight Wills no longer strong, not the iron hero I knew Is it mature, a realization that there?re things you can?t fight? What has become of this...

Pulse Pulse A sound pulses thru my mind Thoughts echo the passage of time Darkness all around me I can see, that cannot be It?s rain without a cloud I am insane without a brain I?m walking on a sound And it all makes sense I?m living a dream Things are not how they seem I?m lost...

Skies The sky is blue And the world is round I picked these roses for you I found them on the ground The ocean is green and warm The birds are singing And the beeves swarm to their hive And the Final Bell is ringing And so the day breaks My mind aches The smiles fake The shadows...

Evil Reviews Over all a good poem, with few cliches, and odd phrasing. I am not so sure if you are being sarcastic, and attacking the mindset of soilders, or if you are being supportave. If I were to write a poem like this it'd the former... 8/10

Advice For Reviewing Poetry I thought I might post this to help people who are not sure how to review poetry. If you have an idea of a good way to review poetry, than please post it. When reviewing poetry there are a few things you can comment on: - A good poem does not use cliches (there are...

This is a bit long for my normal verse by verse review 0_o Um... It is fairly well written but it has a few cliches and is a bit to... er... It kinda seems to be profound forcefully. Oh and it might help if you told us the chord progression and tempo of the song, because it already seems...

Over all, a good poem, but often times cliches creep up... 7/10

Hatred Sometimes I feel my mind is controlled by pure hatred Every action, every word every thing I do As if there is something I?m destined to destroy I don?t understand what is it I hate? Is it you? Is it I? Is it someone down the road? Is it something I must finish before I die...

Unfortuanatly I am always sarcastic. But you are teh cool... Anyways Yay!! I am in da club!!! What Now??

How perceptive of you... From the Start From the start you have no heart you believe in yourself But now You see the tears are falling God has no sympathy Filled with fear, you cannot speak and you?re stalling From the start you wanted to play a part, you believed yourself But now You?re too...

goody-goody. Shining Mew is my idle (on PC and SPPf)!!oneness!! Can I join?

Yes this poem is rather enigmatic. I'll give you a clue, the lines "We built this tower" and "And all of this bable," are a refrence to part of the bible...

I like the last one, it deals with the hipocracy of life. No one lives forever, but we still have to live till we die. Good job. I fonly someone would read my poems