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Evyrus September 1946 Chapter Four: Photoshop and Other Devious Tricks The first thing I noticed was that I couldn’t move my tail. I tried in vain to push myself up with it as I slowly became conscious again but couldn’t. That shock was enough to jolt me upright. And I had legs. I had them...

Hi. So there's not a lot I can say here, since there isn't much here, but I can comment on that. While a preview-prologue might seem nice in theory-you get readers without having to do much writing at all!-it makes it hard for readers to fork an impression, meaning they might not be likely to...

Chapter Three: Part 2 Prayer can be hard. Praying while being judged by everyone else in the room is very hard. As such I found my thoughts running away from the business at hand during puja the next day. For those of you not familiar with Hindu traditions: puja is a ceremony performed in the...

Hey, sorry it took me so long to get around to reviewing this. Anyway, this is a very promising start to a story so I hope it hasn't already been abandoned. Some things are just subtly funny in it (balloons don't eat, the main character of a PMD story becoming a snail, Paul's shellder, Paul)...

Chapter Three: The Trees Have Eyes (And Want Your Food) Pt. 1 A note in advance: Under normal circumstances I could stop by the Centre to get some materials to catch a pokémon, but I technically already had one, as Jane had unfortunately found out. Technically. It had been years since I had...

In the nature of fairness, I'll link this. I run a fan fiction review blog on Bulbagarden. You got featured this week in a less-than-glowing review. Keep in mind that is directed at audiences who might want to read fan fiction more than the writer themselves. So the advice below is more...

Finding time now. I have so many ideas, but so many other things to do...

Chapter Two: Seeing Red And White “What do you mean we still can’t leave?” Jane whined. “I mean that I need more time to work things out,” I replied. “My initial plan failed so now I need to think of another one. That’s all.” “We’ve been here over a week. Have you even talked to your boss...

Hi. I like Sinnoh, so I thought I would check this out. Anyway, comedy is really hard to do right. It very well might be the hardest genera, which is why I'm shocked that so many newcomers choose to start there. Not saying you're new, but just providing this as a preface to the rest of the...

Hi. I know almost nothing about The Last Airbender/Legend of Korra. I'm here to review anyway. Your prologue could really afford to lose the weird monikers. "Light skin" used to refer to a person was particularly odd. Normally skin color isn't used to refer to people unless you're talking...

I research a lot. Maybe more than anyone else here. Last summer while planning Vaira I read books on classical mythology, the globalization of English, Maori culture, space-time, Wiemar Germany, Hinduism, communism, raising bats and other animals, guest labor systems, and Guyana. I research...

Way, way late but you reviewed Vaira so I feel like I should return that. I liked this as a one-shot, if only because psychics have always been one of the most interesting aspects of the game universe from my perspective. It's also very seldom examined how near-unbeatable trainers and rivals...

Hi. I run a fan fiction review blog on Bulbagarden. It got me Best Reviewer last awards cycle. I covered Fire today. You can check it out here.

I'm back. I won't talk too much about grammar or any single post because I read ~four of them at once. Anyway, plot's advancing, which was always a worry with this thing. I think you're doing a good job of keeping things advancing regardless of whatever the particular prompts are. And...

Aracai Rangan Chapter One: Psychedelic Death Threats --//|= Celestic Town, September 2046 I want to start this story with a simple truth: Not everyone wants to be evil, but they don’t understand how to be good. They need someone to show them that. For example: occupants of the Awa Hotel...