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Old August 12th, 2007, 08:39 AM
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Careful With That Axe, Pichu!
 
Join Date: Jun 2004
Location: Santa Isabel, Mexico
Age: 87
Gender: Male
Nature: Careful
There's no excuse, you could have asked me to change the title. Please don't do that again.

I'm asumming then the previous topic isn't needed anymore...

Without ppinting out some details I must say I like the way you narrate and the choice of words throught these two chapters. Don't rush the plot too much as you've apparently got what it takes to deepen the character's personalities and the narrative.
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