Well, welcome Manaphyman (insert cookie cutter greeting here).
If you plan on staying, checkout out our Fanfiction lounge. You'll find it a little less hostile than Serebii IMO
Now for the story. It certainly looks interesting, I like the class room scene, but the teacher seems rude. I never had a teacher that was quite that rude. I did have one tear up my report once, but never had one tell me to "zip it," but the guy was probably asking for it.
Anyway, it's too short for me to give a great review, so one I-O-U for a review for later.
Where are the Sevii Islands?