Thread: [Pokémon] Time, Space... and Minccino
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Old July 6th, 2012, 12:38 PM
docowocool
Beginning Trainer
 
Join Date: Jun 2012
Location: somewhere
Gender: Male
Nature: Lonely
Well done again. The chapters change pov so often I lose my bearings... try either lengthening the scenes or doing less. Or combineing the two. No grammer mistakes I saw.

Otherwise cleverly done... keep up the good work
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