Time, Space... and Minccino
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July 6th, 2012, 12:38 PM
Join Date: Jun 2012
Well done again. The chapters change pov so often I lose my bearings... try either lengthening the scenes or doing less. Or combineing the two. No grammer mistakes I saw.
Otherwise cleverly done... keep up the good work
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