The Unova Journey [PG]
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July 19th, 2012 (06:15 AM).
Join Date: Jul 2012
I like this piece, but even though this is just an opening, I think you could have added more juice to Zach. Say, you may detail some of his gestures, or what he does when he was waiting for Juniper. These could reveal something interesting about his personality.
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