Thread: [Pokémon] The golden ages - Pokemon story
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Old January 29th, 2013, 01:36 PM
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Hey, Crimson!

Cool story! I enjoyed the plot and how it takes place in the future. Apart from simple grammatical and spelling errors, it really was a great story which flowed smoothly.

Maybe you could add more detail to spice it up a bit and make it more interesting? Maybe around the battle scene? If not, that's fine. It's still good!

Also, how are you planning on continuing the story?

Great job!
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