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Old June 15th, 2013 (6:57 PM).
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This is a simple story, but it's so true. Any writer who wants to publish anything goes through this, with the copyreader making sure the **** doesn't go through.

Poor Connor, having to rewrite his project and being unable to have parties. Such is the life of a writer!

Some of your wording kind of hurt the story. Describing Connor and Charles by either what they were wearing or where they were sitting I found to be a little confusing. Especially when Connor's name wasn't given until nearly halfway through the story.

It's just a small thing that I noticed, but it wasn't enough to make this difficult to read. You should write more.

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