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Digimon Genesis

TurtleKing

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    GENESIS


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    Synopsis
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    Information
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    Digidestined
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    "Genesis"

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    This was an interesting start. Probably because I'm not used to older characters with Digimon. Are they known as Chosen or DigiDestined or Tamer in your fic? I'm looking forward to more of their back story, like how they were chosen, and why those particular humans. Though maybe I'm still stuck in how the anime does things.

    Digivolution is interesting in this. Gone is the need to have a burst of shared energy and putting yourself in danger. I'm looking forward to seeing how these new D-Touches work, and if there's any limits put on them, since it seems like evolution is kind of easy to make happen.

    I will say that your writing has really improved between your old Pokemon fics and this. Right now, I will say that the only things I noticed are grammar-related (but I wasn't really looking that deeply). It's mostly how you punctuate dialogue. Like

    Xander nodded his head towards the closet, "We kind of already hung them up for you."
    The comma after "closet" should actually be a full stop.

    It's just things like this that I noticed. Maybe just a read-through before you post will catch those, since at other lines you know how to punctuate.

    Really, that's all I'll say for now until I see more, since this is just getting started.

    Also, those Digimon images are adorable and thank you for leading me to another Digimon site.
     

    TurtleKing

    Turtles > You
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    Thanks for the review Astinus! I'll admit, I'm a bit... off when it comes to realizing where and how to punctuate quoted dialogue, but I will continue to keep your critique in mind when developing my future chapters!

    Yes! Traditionally, Digimon is centered around younger characters, but I think it would make for a much more interesting and emotional story if the characters were at least of legal age. This would leave room for more plots to do since the characters are capable of doing things that younger kids couldn't do (clubbing, drinking, relationships, etc.). I'm interested myself to see how things turn out as I write. (:

    As far digivolving, yes it appears a bit easy given the circumstances, but I plan to elaborate a bit more on that topic and much more down the road.

    I'm glad you enjoyed the first episode!

    To my anonymous readers as well, thank you! Episode 2 will (hopefully) be up pretty soon! I am currently in the process of mapping out each episode, figuring out what exactly I want to happen for each of the characters in the story. I promise to not disappoint you!

    ~TK
     
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