The Good, the Bad, and the Admin
The Good
@Killer-Swift: I'm actually quite impressed. You're overusing the "..." and you're forgetting capitals in a lot of places, though.
@Mikuru-chan: You're good because you're you. XD
@Clow: Didn't expect any less.
@Lex Rextron: I don't believe I've seen you RP before. Looking good, though.
@Shaydeh: Good, good.
@Iruka: HORRIBLE. I DON'T CARE IF YOU USED TO MOD THIS FORUM WITH ME, YOU SUCK. >o Kidding. XD
The Bad
@OmniReaper: You really need to be introduced to what I like to call a paragraph. A paragraph involves expanding upon an idea using details, thoughts, and feelings. What you're doing is called writing one liners with no details in a format thats reminiscent of a script. You have little to no detail in your posts, set up in an inappropriate style with little diversity in words used. (i.e. Axle did this, Axle said that. You need to change how you refer to him or else it just looks stupidly repetitive.) And I don't know WHY, but you break up your sentences into fragments, which makes it look dumbly choppy. For example, "Axle listened to Aisha's tale. But then understood. This was more exciting then he thought. At least he was here to help everyone reach that goal." could easily be changed to "Axle listened to Aisha's tale, slowly beginning to understand. This was going to be more exciting than he originally thought, and at least he was there to help everyone reach that goal." Seriously dude, there is so much you could do, but fail to do so.
@JBCBlank: I can't express this enough: DO NOT NAG THE GAME MASTER. Constantly nagging her about what YOU want in HER RP is not going to get you it. Instead, it will probably end up ticking her off. Also, don't go off doing things you know she may say no to without her permission >>. Now, in respect to your RPing skills, what the heck are you doing using present tense? All that does is make your posts look awkward and difficult to read. You also seem to have some problems with caps and ellipsis points. It's "..." not "....." or "......." The maximum number of dots you use is four, and thats only at the end of a sentence.