Giratina ♀
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Bah, genders.
My in-fic Giratina is female.
My in-fic Giratina is female.
The Lost Tower is a gloomy and miserable place on the inside.
i don't know. I pulled it out of nowhere. The point is, don't just hand us the facts up straight like that; when possible, like for describing a certain mood of a building, try to add some action in and let the character come to a conclusion about whether it was gloomy and miserable or not. Heck, the character could be a super-pessimist who's convinced the world is going to end on his eighteenth birthday and views the place as a shrine to the future or something!Zero walked into the Lost Tower, shivering.
Nearly tripping over a fallen tombstone as he entered, Zero [did and observed stuff that shows exactly how gloomy and miserable the TOWER is].
"This place is... miserable," he muttered.
Sumizome seized his horrid growling and politely nodded in reply to his trainer's question.
Sumizome seized his horrid growling and politely nodded in reply to his trainer's question.
Your challenge is to write crossover fanfiction combining Murphy Brown and 4chan. The story should use good characters becoming evil as a plot device
The boy named Shrike slowly walked up the steps leading to the ancient structure. Only the slightest of breezes blew past him, but even that was enough to send the various bells and chimes that hung from the tower's eaves into motion. Nervously, the boy stopped before the large doors that led into the tower, looking back over his shoulder at the setting sun. It would be dark soon, but he had made a commitment to take the journey to the top of the tower.
Calming himself, Shrike placed his hands on the tower's doors. A chill suddenly ran down his spine as, in just one single moment, he felt his mind reach out and touch the spirits of the countless deceased Pokemon who were honored within the tower's halls. Brushing the feeling away, he slowly pushed open the doors and stepped past them into the building's shadowed interior. As Shrike walked down a dimly-lit hallway, stopping every now and then to examine barely-legible plaques that lined the walls, he progressively felt a feeling of dread and discomfort settle over him. Adding to the gloom mood within the tower, it was lit not by electrical power but by flickering candles. To the mind of the boy, the shadows of the flames seemed to hold a hundred ghosts in silent waiting, ready to submit the intruder to their schemes at any moment.
Well, it's hard to tell since it's only one sentence, but here's what I think. The only problem with it that I can tell was that it took me a few minutes to decipher what you were trying to say in the first part. Maybe you should re-word it? Other than that, it's a fine sentence, but as said, there's not much to go on.Sumizome seized his horrid growling and politely nodded in reply to his trainer's question.
And goddamit, Valentine, when did you start writing that? I swear, I am posting this now before I can be ninja'D again!
Sorry, Jax, I was exaggerating when I said half a page.
I mean, has anybody here read Christopher Paolini.
Awesome. Maybe that'll be enough to drag me out of my slump and get me to write! Or maybe I could stop replying to this thread and just get to working on TRINITY like I had meant to when I first sat down at the computer and started playing Ghost in the Shell music. God this music is good, and pretty much the best thing I can listen to when trying to write a story inspired by GitS.Valentine said:This is the next 7Day7K prompt.
Your challenge, if you choose to accept it, is to not be a troll in my section. Go bother another staff member.Your challenge is to write crossover fanfiction combining Murphy Brown and 4chan. The story should use good characters becoming evil as a plot device
Jax, curtains?
Would this fit in the Reviewing and You thread?
:(For Arceus' sake, Astinus. [/shuts up]