[Pokémon] Ash's Birthday

As Ash arrives in Snowbelle city the gang sees Ash's mom Delia who is happy to see Ash. " Hi Sweetheart! " say's Delia. " MOM! What are you doing here? " " Do you know what day it is!? " " Uhhh? " " YOUR BIRTHDAY!!! " Ash thought she was joking. " HAHAHAHA! Thats real funny!? " " Geez you haven't had a birthday in forever have you? " " No I guess not. " " Okay then let me take you out somewhere. Ohh I also brought a friend! " Then a jeep pulled up and Professor Oak got out with another person. Ash realized the other person was Tracey! " Hey Tracey what's up? " Then Serena came forward " Who's this? " " This is Tracey, we travelled the Orange Islands together! " Ash replied happily. " Hi Tracey nice to meet you I'm Bonnie, and this is Dedenne! " says bonnie walking up happily. " I'm Clemont! " And I'm Serena? " " Cool nice to meet you all I'm Tacey. So Ash you've grown a lot! " " Huh yeah I guess " then Ash's stomach growls. " And I'm hungry too! " Delia steps in " Then lets all eat I've heard of a good cafe near here! " " Is it the one I thinking of " says Serena! " You mean the Gailant! " Says Delia as she and Serena were fan girling. " Hey professor Oak why are you and Tracey here? " " Hey Ash do you know about the pokemon village? " " The pokemon Village
" No " replied Ash " Professor Sycamore found strange signals coming from their " " Huh strange "
" Yeah I know that's why we're going to investigate it. " " Cool can I go with you " " Say Ash don't you have a gym badge to win? " Professer Oak replied " Oh yeah right, sorry. " " Don't worry ash I'll tell you everything once we get back. " " Are you two done fan girling I'm hungry? " " Yes " Delia and Serena said t the same time. As Clemont, Bonnie, Serena, Tracy, Professer Oak, and Delia were singing happy birthday Ash was thinking about his Snowbelle city gym battle. " That cake was awesome! " Ash says to his mom. " It's only the best. Now honey you better get rested up for your gym battle tomorrow! " " Okay " " One more thing were coming to watch your gym battle! " said Delia excitedly. " Yay " said Sah trying to sound like that was good news. " Well see you tomorrow " " Bye see you tomorrow! " says Ash as he was thinking of a strategy. Until then the journey continues!

Hey girly, I have a HUGE tip for ya. Space everything out; doing this makes things easier to read. I mean pressing enter and giving things their own line.

Example:

Ash and his friends were walking through town; fallowing Serena, she wanted to see some of the different toques in town.

Suddenly a sweet smell tickled Ash's nose, causing him to stop and sniff the air. "What is that?" He said then grinned.

"That is were I am taking you!" Serena cheered, she then quickly went around the corner.

^ See what I mean though? That is a little easier to read, instead of it all being in one paragraph. I know it makes it longer, but like I said. More people would be more likely to read the whole thing, if it was in this format.

WTF for Ash's B-Day he gets a gift that makes him forever stay 10.

LOL