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Song! ★ Letting Go

Nakala Pri

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    "Letting Go"

    You're sort of my angel
    And my evil side
    You want me for good
    But you always end up making me take the hard ride (Oh-oh!)
    I'm not sure if you're worth the trouble
    When everything you touch
    Turns to rubble

    Oh-oh

    No, I've heard so many lies
    No-oh-oh, you can say your goodbyes (Hell yeah!)
    'Cause this girl is heading out on her own
    And you can lie in your emotions
    All alone (Damn right!)

    You shouldn't say I love you
    If you don't mean it
    You shouldn't say I'll stand by you
    If you'll just go and leave it
    You shouldn't hold me close
    If you'll let go
    Well this time I'm not gonna hold my breath
    I'm letting go

    Yeah I'm letting go
    Oh-oh-oh (GO! GO!)
    Letting go.... (Oh-oh-oh!)
    'Cause I'm not your toy
    You cause more pain then you're worth
    You think you're doin' me a favour
    But you're just making it worse

    You shouldn't say I love you
    If you don't mean it
    You shouldn't say I'll stand by you
    If you'll just go and leave it
    You shouldn't hold me close
    If you'll let go
    Well this time I'm not gonna hold my breath
    I'm letting go

    You thought I was sugar sweet (like your perfect girl)
    And chili spice (like i'd rock your world)
    Golden snowflakes and everything nice
    But the thing about snowflakes is
    Once they melt, there's nothing left (too right!)

    You shouldn't say I love you
    If you don't mean it
    You shouldn't say I'll stand by you
    If you'll just go and leave it
    You shouldn't hold me close
    If you'll let go
    Well this time I'm not gonna hold my breath
    I'm letting go

    Yeah... letting go
    Yeah, LET GO!    ​


    Here is a little something I wrote. :D It was kinda spontaneous, but I think it turned out well. :P Be sure to tell me your thoughts!
     
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    Kyoe

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    • It sounds good. Could be a pop song!

    My only major problem was the second verse, between the first and second repetitions of the chorus. The sudden inclusions of the 'Oh's and backing vocals seem out of place in this sense. It could be cleaned up with an intsumental lead up, and or a fade away of it, but as lyrics themself it feels unnatural, to me at least.

    My advice would be to include more backing vocals throughout the song, or remove the ones you have to help smooth it over some. But that's just a personal preference!
     

    Nakala Pri

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    Thankershun, young buck! 8D

    I just edited it, hopefully it's a little more balanced out. But I'm totally gonna keep writing more! :^D Totally gonna surpass P!nk or Rihanna musically. xD
     
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