Pokémon Divine Peril

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    Pokémon Devine Peril​


    Get ready to Explore the region of Enjou!

    Story:

    18 years ago, a baby, was in the hand of it's mother, and the Unusual Pokémon appeared. The Pokémon caused a storm to brake out, and everyone evacuated the region because of it's intensity, and the Father and Mother were trapped and were never seen again.
    18 years later, the child is living in a Orphanage, growing up with other children. Then they decided to leave and start to explore the world while deciding to search for it's parents. It had a feeling in their heart that they will find them. And they decided to go to gyms too. And the Child was sure that the Unusual Pokémon would appear once again. Meanwhile a whole organisation is watching that one child. The Morning the child wakes up, he finds some havoc in Starry City but will team up with the city's professor
    to stop it.

    And That's Where Your Story Begins!

    You And Your Rival!

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    [PokeCommunity.com] Pokémon Divine Peril



    Features: A Pokémon World Arena, Where you Can Battle the DexHolders: Red,Blue,Green,Yellow,Gold,Silver,Crystal,Ruby,Sapphire,Emerald,Diamond,Pearl,Platinum. (Black and White too, when i get the overworlds and the new Pokémon.)


    A Pokéglove: A Glove that can call people and you can add new features to the Pokéglove as you continue through the story.


    And the Pokébike: A Motorbike with special stuff..




    Pokémon: There will be all 493 Pokémon + another 100 Fanmon.



    ScreenShots:
    Spoiler:




    Credits to:

    The Dewitty: Tiles
     
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    No offense, but the mapping there looks completely uninspired. Everything's flat, there's no change in elevation or tiles, and you've mixed 4th gen overworld sprites with 3rd gen.
     
    Ummm....

    What is this even about?
     
    Going off what Java's Missingno. said, there are a few other issues. Mainly, you posted nothing about a story, features, Pokemon, or any plans you have. It looks like you just spent 15 minutes in Pokemon Essentials, decided you wanted to make a game, then posted a few screen shots. No offense, but you'll have to provide more if you want to be taken seriously and for people to help you.
     
    Thanks.

    Raikt said:
    Going off what Java's Missingno. said, there are a few other issues. Mainly, you posted nothing about a story, features, Pokemon, or any plans you have. It looks like you just spent 15 minutes in Pokemon Essentials, decided you wanted to make a game, then posted a few screen shots. No offense, but you'll have to provide more if you want to be taken seriously and for people to help you.
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    Very true. I will try to figure out a plot and features. Hopefully, this is not a game i will just give up on.
     
    Well...your plots ok...I don't know how you would know your parents are still alive...The plot seems kind of tacked on and doesn't explain why your character battles gyms and or anything like that. Of course, I'm assuming there are gyms, and if there aren't, power to you, cause that takes guts and I like that.

    Another note: one of your screenshots reads: "You:Yea, sure Mum!" Now, isn't your mom missing? It just gives the feeling you tacked on this plot with no thought.

    PS. Unless this storm was caused by a god, the name "Divine Peril" makes no sense.
     
    Bards Sword said:
    Well...your plots ok...I don't know how you would know your parents are still alive...The plot seems kind of tacked on and doesn't explain why your character battles gyms and or anything like that. Of course, I'm assuming there are gyms, and if there aren't, power to you, cause that takes guts and I like that.

    Another note: one of your screenshots reads: "You:Yea, sure Mum!" Now, isn't your mom missing? It just gives the feeling you tacked on this plot with no thought.

    PS. Unless this storm was caused by a god, the name "Divine Peril" makes no sense.
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    Actually i might make the storm cause by the Legendary storm Pokemon.

    And i will remove the mum.
     
    Your story seems to thin...you have to work on a real premise and plot before you go any further.
     
    It's a bit better, plot wise now, but it's still on shaky ground. He just suddenly decided, for no reason, that he wanted to search for his parents after 18 years? No back story to this at all? Is he going with friends, or did they split up? How did he get to Starry City if he was in an orphanage? Is the orphanage in Starry City? Why is the evil team watching him? Do they know about the connection to the "unusual" Pokemon? That's a bit of a stretch as well. How would the team, regardless of ability to acquire information, find out that this one child was the one who was met by a Pokemon that nearly destroyed a, what, continent? Also, why are they only moving after 18 years and trying to capture the child? Did it take them that long to find out, or is their some form of prophecy we don't know about? There are still a few holes to fill, honestly. I also don't like the whole:

    And the Child was sure that the Unusual Pokémon would appear once again.

    I mean, he was a newborn child at the time. He had no idea there was an unusual Pokemon. Even if he did, how does he know it caused the storm? I don't like it when main characters seem to know far more than they should, given the circumstances. If this seems a bit harsh, it's because I want you to succeed.

    On a side not, I like the character sprites. They are interesting and pretty unique.
     
    :D

    Raikt said:
    It's a bit better, plot wise now, but it's still on shaky ground. He just suddenly decided, for no reason, that he wanted to search for his parents after 18 years? No back story to this at all? Is he going with friends, or did they split up? How did he get to Starry City if he was in an orphanage? Is the orphanage in Starry City? Why is the evil team watching him? Do they know about the connection to the "unusual" Pokemon? That's a bit of a stretch as well. How would the team, regardless of ability to acquire information, find out that this one child was the one who was met by a Pokemon that nearly destroyed a, what, continent? Also, why are they only moving after 18 years and trying to capture the child? Did it take them that long to find out, or is their some form of prophecy we don't know about? There are still a few holes to fill, honestly. I also don't like the whole:

    And the Child was sure that the Unusual Pokémon would appear once again.

    I mean, he was a newborn child at the time. He had no idea there was an unusual Pokemon. Even if he did, how does he know it caused the storm? I don't like it when main characters seem to know far more than they should, given the circumstances. If this seems a bit harsh, it's because I want you to succeed.

    On a side not, I like the character sprites. They are interesting and pretty unique.
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    I clearly need help with the plot.

    And thanks!
     
    I'm doing as much as i can to make this game good enough.
     
    Hmm...

    I'm still continuing this game.


    There'll be a massive update.
     
    barring the minimal plot which was already stated by Bards Sword.



    Pokémon Devine Peril​


    Get ready to Explore the region of Enjou!

    Story:

    18 years ago, a baby, was in the hand of it's mother, and the Unusual Pokémon appeared. The Pokémon caused a storm to brake out, and everyone evacuated the region because of it's intensity, and the Father and Mother were trapped and were never seen again.
    18 years later, the child is living in a Orphanage, growing up with other children. Then they decided to leave and start to explore the world while deciding to search for it's parents. It had a feeling in their heart that they will find them. And they decided to go to gyms too. And the Child was sure that the Unusual Pokémon would appear once again. Meanwhile a whole organisation is watching that one child. The Morning the child wakes up, he finds some havoc in Starry City but will team up with the city's professor
    to stop it.

    And That's Where Your Story Begins!

    You And Your Rival!

    [PokeCommunity.com] Pokémon Divine Peril
    [PokeCommunity.com] Pokémon Divine Peril

    [PokeCommunity.com] Pokémon Divine Peril
    [PokeCommunity.com] Pokémon Divine Peril

    Um...Is the main character a guy or a girl? (No pun intended, I'm dead serious). I've never sean either gender with hair like that, you might want to shorten it, the rival's sprite is okay I guess.

    THE CSS-HOLY CRAP, How do you expect anyone to read this without highlighting the text and getting annoyed, its a complete eye-sore.

    Well, I've shared my 2 cents, best of luck.
     
    AceDragonite said:
    barring the minimal plot which was already stated by Bards Sword.



    Pokémon Devine Peril​


    Get ready to Explore the region of Enjou!

    Story:

    18 years ago, a baby, was in the hand of it's mother, and the Unusual Pokémon appeared. The Pokémon caused a storm to brake out, and everyone evacuated the region because of it's intensity, and the Father and Mother were trapped and were never seen again.
    18 years later, the child is living in a Orphanage, growing up with other children. Then they decided to leave and start to explore the world while deciding to search for it's parents. It had a feeling in their heart that they will find them. And they decided to go to gyms too. And the Child was sure that the Unusual Pokémon would appear once again. Meanwhile a whole organisation is watching that one child. The Morning the child wakes up, he finds some havoc in Starry City but will team up with the city's professor
    to stop it.

    And That's Where Your Story Begins!

    You And Your Rival!

    [PokeCommunity.com] Pokémon Divine Peril
    [PokeCommunity.com] Pokémon Divine Peril

    [PokeCommunity.com] Pokémon Divine Peril
    [PokeCommunity.com] Pokémon Divine Peril

    Um...Is the main character a guy or a girl? (No pun intended, I'm dead serious). I've never sean either gender with hair like that, you might want to shorten it, the rival's sprite is okay I guess.

    THE CSS-HOLY CRAP, How do you expect anyone to read this without highlighting the text and getting annoyed, its a complete eye-sore.

    Well, I've shared my 2 cents, best of luck.
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    There are people with hair in that length XD. I'm a boy and have my hair at that length almost. :P
     
    Rai Rai said:
    There are people with hair in that length XD. I'm a boy and have my hair at that length almost. :P
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    Not the girl rival XD
    The other one and no one (or at least no one in Pokemon) has hair that goes out that far lol
     
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