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Old June 25th, 2005 (02:14 PM). Edited July 16th, 2005 by Roy Mustang.
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I was bored. :O







Paint Me a Picture







It was rare to see an artist around Pallet Town, or what was left of it.

Ash Ketchum knew this very well.

Perhaps that was what convinced him to visit the aged man of profession. Walking over the rubble of a collapsed building, the picture was seen quite distinctively.

Shades of green were splayed on to the canvas, tints of azure perfectly blending above it. Blooming marigolds swayed realistically below it, lightly contrasting with the similar golden rays of sunshine beaming down on the peaceful scenario. What entranced the viewer the most were the houses. The artist had chosen a watery, navy blue-gray paint to perfectly capture the many slates upon the roofs, each speckled with silver. It was exactly as Ash envisioned it.

Pallet Town.

Futilely, he complimented, Thats a good picture.

Of course it had sounded foolish. Good was a worthless adjective to describe such portrait of immeasurable talent. Nevertheless, the artist turned his head around, grinning ear to ear.

Thanks, kid.

It was evident he wanted to reply with something more. It showed plainly through the wistfulness of his eyes, and the way his head was tilted in a thoughtful, curious matter. Ash observed the elder gently set down his dripping paintbrush by his side before he finally spoke out loud.

Yknow, I can paint for you, he shrugged nonchalantly. I mean, for a twenty, I can paint whatever you want. Scenery, people...heck, even Pokemon.

Pokemon.

The single word set Ash off in a daze, gripping the ends of his shirt to suppress the tumbling rage of emotions. Calm down; remember; forget. He breathed heavily once, prying into his tattered jean pockets in order to retrieve the money, subconsciously doing so. The artist received it with both hands in gratitude, nodding in thanks.

Alright, so what do you want me to draw? He gingerly placed the current picture adjacent to his seat to dry, replacing it with a new canvas. He seemed eager to accept any requests.

C-Can you draw me a girl? Like, an older woman," Ash stammered, clenching his fists out of embarrassment, wondering how that got out. The artist merely smiled, as if acknowledging the youths crimson face.

Describe her to me.

So Ash did, as best as he could. He described the elegance of her auburn hair, how it was always tied to the back; he described her delicate posture; he described the serenity of her brown eyes; he described the cooking outfit she usually wore, the grace of her caring face...until he realized.

Can you also draw me? And Pikachu? he added.

...In your current state?

And so, Ash recalled his old jeans usually folded up near the ends, the childish sneakers he wore, the blue vest with white linings, his favorite cap

I think thats it, he licked his lips to moisten them, after having finished describing every feature of his ten year old self.

The artist waved his paintbrush around, as if trying to gain inspiration.

Where do you want the scenery to be?

Excuse me?

Oh, you know, he impatiently gestured, where you want to be. The setting, if youd like.

Instantaneously, Ash pointed to the picture he had originally seen, still drying, to one house in particular.

That one, with the slates and the porch. I want us to be sitting there.

Tears started welling up, blurring his vision slightly. He lowered his head.

I-I want all of us to be happy...

The artist nodded, and without further ado, began painting.

At first, it was like a dream. Under each stroke presented a magnificent shower of colors slowly forming into a figure. It was exactly how he had described it. In fact, it was even better than what he had described. Such vivacity provided a realistic appearance, every tincture of color plunging into a rich image of what was simply that: life. Ash was just...entranced. With tears dried away, he seated himself upon a spare chair, perhaps sitting there for a couple of hours, watching a blank piece of paper slowly come alive with simple strokes of marvelous dexterity.

Until it was done.

Just when the last shimmer of sunlight was about to fade away, the artist presented the stunned, awe-stricken being with the picture.

How is it? he inquired, tired from the effort, but happy at the obvious satisfaction.

Its perfect, Ash replied hoarsely, carefully holding the canvas where it would not get ruined by any other physical contact.

Indeed it was, with a motherly figure holding the fingers of her son, entwined with each other, his pet playfully scampering around them both.

Thank you.

Ah, dont mention it, the artist began packing up as soon as he realized the time, neatly organizing his paintbrushes in the wide slab of a case. I reckon Ill do drawings now and then, maybe into Viridian, who knows. Holding the bundle, he grinned again out of pure modesty. Take care, kid.

Ash numbly waved. He watched him step over the rubble, weave through another pile of them, and wobble towards the woods of Pallet Town. The artist became a silhouette, a faint smidge of black...then no more. It would be the last time he would ever see him again.

Standing there for a second, he smiled briefly through his tears, mouthing his thanks in finality. As day entered the brink of night, the slates of the roof glimmered brilliantly one last time. But he didnt really have to worry, did he? The sun would come again tomorrow, and the day after, and the day after. He had a picture.

And the slates would glitter again.





~...paint me a picture...~
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Old June 26th, 2005 (11:45 PM).
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Wow. This is one of the most beautiful things I've ever read. You've basically described everything perfectly. It was like I was watching the artist paint the picture myself.

I could find nothing wrong with this fic (but then again, I have trouble pointing weak points unless they're obvious).

"Paint Me a Picture..."
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Old June 30th, 2005 (12:01 PM).
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Did it? What was its job? To entertain? To sadden? To make a point? What point?

Besides that totally worthless series of questions inspired by my already gloomy mood, I have this yet to say: Wow.

It gives a hint of past pain, does it not? And an awful present, hmm?

With a hope, maybe, of something to come?

Anyways, my signature G/S hunting.

Two that I spotted.

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Ash observed the elder gently set down his dripping paintbrush by his side, before finally speaking his thought out loud.
What's the purpose of the comma?

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He watched him step over the rubbles, weave through another pile of them, and wobble towards the woods of Pallet Town.
*twitch* I'm pretty sure you can figure this out.

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Old June 30th, 2005 (12:21 PM).
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Quote originally posted by SilverBlaze09:
Did it? What was its job? To entertain? To sadden? To make a point? What point?
To "paint a picture". It's in the title. :\
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I thought it was beautiful. They way you described it was amazing. It was powerful yet still peaceful, great job. And very good descriptions. Sratch that, ash thought good was a bad adjetive for the beautiful of the picture, and I agree when it comes to this story. In short, I love it.
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Quote originally posted by SilverBlaze09:
Did it? What was its job? To entertain? To sadden? To make a point? What point?

Besides that totally worthless series of questions inspired by my already gloomy mood, I have this yet to say: Wow.

It gives a hint of past pain, does it not? And an awful present, hmm?

With a hope, maybe, of something to come?

Anyways, my signature G/S hunting.

Two that I spotted.



What's the purpose of the comma?


*twitch* I'm pretty sure you can figure this out.

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You're a bit consevative here. Fanfictions aren't just all about trainer fics or Pokemorphs or whatnots....

Anyways Lily-chan, nice job! =3
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To "paint a picture". It's in the title. :\
Hmm, I must remember my [rhetorical][/rhetorical] thingies.

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You're a bit consevative here. Fanfictions aren't just all about trainer fics or Pokemorphs or whatnots....
What did I say?

My humble apologies for posting a second time here, but I'd hate for misinformation to continue wending its way through the world, using me as a conduit.

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Old July 1st, 2005 (06:29 PM).
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Hey, I closet-read this fic like two days ago and was just inspired to reply (by the caffeine that won't let me go to sleep).

I liked it. The descriptions were accurate and effectively set the mood that I think you were trying to create. Interesting setting too. Makes you wonder what happened to Pallet Town, but I, for some reason, think you were trying to go for something deeper with the setting(?) What was the purpose behind it?

Well, anyway, I liked it.
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I really liked it also. You are a great writer for such a young age, I hope your work is noticed by more people in the future. I wish I could write like you except I write stupid stories that probably end up all boring like nursery rhymes are to 70 year old people in homes.
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