Recent content by AmusedRaccoon

In the interest of keeping this a manageable size and of not taking even longer, this covers only chapter one. I have read the others here, so don't worry about spoilers if you respond right away. Notes first. Be warned: this review embraces the essence of nitpicking. Most of the notes are...

Wow. Has it been almost two weeks, really? I have no good excuse; the bad excuse is that I can find a lot to be distracted by when it comes to such demanding things as reading critically and orchestrating my thoughts into words. (That likely doesn't translate well -- it's meant to be wry and...

I'm a little surprised this hasn't been mentioned: every one of these ideas is, kindly stated, nothing more than a rehash of something that has already been imagined and at least partially developed by plenty of people before you. For a "rather big name in the video game industry" as a...

You're going to make an American seriously consider foreign countries? For shame. Well, your posts tend to be from 4 to 7 am and 12 to 2 pm. That more or less rules out the entire western hemisphere and Australia; when you mentioned being awake it was probably sometime in the afternoon or late...

Man, that's a relief. I was completely out of my depth. D: Also no idea how I missed those typos, or how the second one happened in the first place. I'm glad you caught them. I thought about that, but for some reason "start" didn't seem colloquial enough, and besides I'd used it at the...

3. "Aramil, stop it right now." He started, put down his book, sat up. He turned to look at me. "What? What am I doing?" His face was carefully blank, his tone neutral – it was admirable, really, for a seven-year-old. "Moping," I said, "and you've been at it for the past week. Do you think I...

Nope, that's exactly it -- art is visceral, so it feels good even if you have no idea what you're doing, while the process of writing is this cerebral, almost detached thing. Mucking about with words the same instinctual way one does with colors results (well, for me) in muddy word soup. Now...

I feel like anything I could say about how captivating and sublime this is would be totally superfluous. It's a given; it's obvious that these descriptions could stand to be no more inspired. What's worse is that I have no banalities like grammar mistakes to fall back on and bloat this review --...

Jobs -- I wish I could say the same. This upcoming semester of school is purely remedial: I was forced into my first semester, took more classes than I could handle thanks to scholarship requirements, buckled under the pressure and apathy of it and failed them all -- I fear I'll never be...

Conversation starters: how are you? What's your favorite color? What do you, like, do, besides this? (Am I doing it right?) I want answers, Silnaek. In August I start my last semester at my current college before (hopefully) moving away to one with a decent art program. Also, I appear to have...

Short reply -- not that I spend much time here or reading fanfiction in general, but yours is by far the best I've seen as a matter of taste. On top of that you log in less often even than I do, which elevates it and you to something aloof and a little untouchable, at least to me. On top of...

No. No, don't you even--! Would it surprise you that Aftershock is half the reason I started this in the first place? "Man, it must be cool to have a story," sez year-and-a-half-ago me, and so I strung some words together. I know words and how they work but I sure don't know writing, and...

Yep, that's exactly it. I should have bolded it myself, but I rushed that part a little. D: I know, and I felt kind of bad about not offering any sort of suggestions along with the criticism, but I honestly don't know if there's anything that can be done about it. I think in retrospect the fact...

Playing HG and SS side-by-side was totally worth buying my boyfriend a DS. Maybe. Also, not to be all sappy or anything, but our relationship was interstate until around the time HGSS came out, and we even trained up teams on Red/Blue and Silver/Crystal (I don't know how his Silver cartridge...

There's an implied did at the end of that -- you're comparing denizens directly with "every other major urban area", not with the other denizens in these other areas. Using "as if" makes the description prescriptive, as in a wish or fantasy, rather than descriptive, and generally also implies...