Noted. Also, I'm working on the first chapter (I just posted all your comments in the document near the quoted sections, and have put some general notes for ideas), and I guess the only thing I'm stuck on is how to build that tension. I'm not sure what there is for Annie to be tense about, so to speak, since the prologue is what was supposed to create the tension. Not sure if you read it or not, though? (You don't have to - just asking.)