It seems like a good start. A lot can come from that. Wether it turns out good or bad is completly up to you, as is with all stories, that being it has potential but only if the creator lets it shine through. You have to be careful with it though. You have to at all costs avoid generic things because this story seems prone to taking a generic turn here and ther, so try to keep it fresh. Also you seem to focus a lot on the villians, they are from a Pokemon movie (Heroes?) right? Wasn't it the one with Latios and Latias? (By the way that was my favorite of the Pokemon movies and sadly, one of the only good/decent ones.)So make sure you flesh the villans out a lot. Make them dynamic, sympathetic in a way, yet still evil. I would still, however, advise against using pre-established characters for this. if you use pre-established villians you have to go by their character. I would rather you use fresh characters for the villians, perhaps ones that served beside Anne and Oakly or whatever their names are. If you use new characters you can only benifit because now you have a clean slate for backrounds, personality, motives, ect. Also I would love to apply now but I'm out of my state right now and the computer I'm using has none of my scripts on it. It's not my computer either so I can't go downloading stuff on it. I mioght get back to you on Sunday so if it's not too much trouble, try to keep a slot open for me. If you want my opinion on anything else story related just contact me and I'll be sure to respond...... eventually.