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It's amazing how they sold coats the exact same color as Chrome's vest. He couldn't really get over that minuscule coincidence. He also couldn't get over the climate slowly descending with every single step. He was sure there was probably some lesson in school about why Marron City and the area...

It took both Marie and Chrome an entire day of healing before they were even able to accept their reward. Marie didn't train often enough to last such a long time and it was something of a miracle that she did. Chrome, who took most of the actual damage in the fight, was sore from head to toe...

Double battle. A simple concept. Combined with two people physically fighting a single man, it became a bit more complex. Combined with the fact that said man trained his body for years compared to their one week - eight hours a day - and things became difficult. Complex and difficult, that...

From what Chrome understood, when they called these places "gym" it was in reference of them being more like a training ground for trainers of the same type. Similar to how karate fighters train under a different gym than wushu fighters. So, why was it that Chrome felt like he was in an actual...

I like the camp factor of the story (if it was intentional, that is. I'm still unsure). It's gotta a likeable feel to it. A lot of here-and-there grammar issues and some pacing problems that make things feel rushed. Not to mention, wording issues throughout. But, you've got a diamond in the...

Travelling alongside Marie, Chrome found that he was learning a bit more about her every day. After spending a week with her, he saw a wide spectrum of emotions. Facing the unnatural situations they faced, it was to be expected. In the past week, they discovered a kidnapping organization who...

Walking through the Corona forest, a sharp realization cut into Chrome. This is the longest amount of time he has ever spent around a girl at once. Taking in the severity of multiple situations since his journey, he didn't once stop to focus on the things that he should have reacted to as a...

"And that's all happened?" Inspector Jen asked, chronicling the events experienced by the two traveling teens. "That's everything," Chrome nodded. "I have to say, you're quite the trainer." Jen praised Chrome. "Who? Me?" Chrome entered his confused state once again. "I mean, you were both...

"Pichu, use Thundershock!" In a matter of moments, the battle shifted from being Pichu and Shifter against Staryu to Pichu and Shifter against Staryu, Haunter and Cubone. Outnumbered, Chrome and Marie wanted to call out another one of their Pokemon. However, Chrome felt like he wouldn't be able...

Sometimes, Chrome wondered why he even bothered leaving the house. Walking down Route 602, he tried to recall all of the events that actually led him on his way to a journey. Though some things would move him towards the thought, he just couldn't be entirely sure what exactly sparked the idea of...

A few things: - In four paragraphs, you said "Satoshi" nine times. The first one is necessary, but try to cut that number back by at least five. There's nothing wrong with 'he' or 'his'. -I expect it to be vague, as most prologues are. However, I have no idea why he called everyone fools or...

Read the first two chapters and it's off to a good start. ----- Two things here: -At this point, I'd already become long fatigued with the use of Three years as with each time it was said, less and less information about the three-year gap was present. Plus, it was said a lot. -Try not to...

Chrome felt the atmosphere change as he stood before the Gym Leader of Nova City, Lita. She sat on her Leader's Throne looking down at him. Marie opted to rest after finally catching the water Pokemon necessary to challenge Lita. Chrome, not exerting too much of his energy, decided that now was...

Back from business-related mild depression and slight procrastination. Two chapters to make up for the tomfoolery. (Technically, it's four chapters, since the super chapter of the first gym battle is included.) ------ "Hey Marie, have you ever caught a Pokémon before?" "Uh, of course I have...

Nova City. Chrome was exhausted. The run to the Pokémon Center left him tired, laid out on the settee inside the healing station while waiting for his Pichu and Snivy to be revitalized. Such a day’s worth of events were worthy of documentation, he thought. It did discourage him, though. To...