KurlyFries

I hate the character limit :x

But, with the fic and all, here is one thing I recommend that has to do with description: paint an image in the readers head.

I didn't even know I had one up XD

But, go to your User CP > Edit Your Details > Bottom of page
It will tell you what part of the YT video code you need to copy and put in

Synyster Gates, the Lead Guitarist in Avenged Sevenfold.

How did I forget to mention Dragonfree? purple_drake is also an awesome writer.

666? what are you talking about? XD

Well, it was still a little short, but it was a good beginning. Could use a bit more description, take a look at other fics on the board. A good one I would recommend is Nothing, Everything by Bay. I haven't taken the time to read it all the way through, but if you want sort of an inspiration fic to look up to, thats one I would recommend.

XD that brought up a couple wrong mental images. But, I shall read it now.

And, with the rude review of mine... don't worry, I know from personal experience, the first reviews are always the most like not nice ;o

Oy, like, sorry if my review seemed a little rude. Sometimes I type without even thinking :x

Once the prologue is fixed up, I shall read it, and give you tips on how you can improve as a writer. Once again, sorry if it seemed rude.

Yes you can. I need all the help I can get.