For me to recieve a VM, you'll need to post it on my page. I have a few issues:
There are no such thing as Pokeballs here
And currency is just dollars
And your character has too much an interest in science. i would much prefer you alter that, make his history a little more breeder filled. Well, you don't need to get rid of any of the scienc bits, just give him a little more credit with breedng. Balthazar doesn't just accept anyone to be his apprentice.