I don't think I'm someone to go to for tag help, but I'll try. ^^;
I like it, but I can't really see what it's about. It's the earth and a light hitting it, right? It just doesn't stand out, which is what you need a focal to do. I don't think I like black for the text, maybe a cream color in a simpler font? The base image definitely looks dramatic & has impact, so a curly font doesn't really go with it. You've done alright with C4D effects, but they don't really do well when the background image isn't so noticeable.
/opinions
Er so yeah. The main issue would be the prominence of the focal, I think.