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Awesome man, I'll give your fic a check.

Haha, not at all. Ya got some good stuff. So whenever I become friends with a user here I sort of like to ask them what their typical day is on the PokemonCommunity (seeing as I always have time to be on here, but never know what to do!). So if I may: What is your typical day on the forums like?

Hey there. I'm sorry if this sounds weird or whatever but I always make sure to read your posts on the forums. I find them enlightening and strangely intelligent--no offense--in comparison to some of the other posters around here. So Here's to hoping you accept this friend request and we can have some good discussions!

hey person! hahaha! so that's u??? in the vid??? hahaha!

/facepalm
When I say Ghandi, I don't mean that as your nickname.
Gah, don't worry about it.

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The world goes on facts, not opinions.
Damn, Ghandi? Is that you?

No problem! x]

I don't mind that viewpoint at all. ^_^ But I don't recommend switching the viewpoint, otherwise readers will be confused. Whenever you're ready, just send me something and I'll check it out.

One thing I noticed in that half prologue was that I would get confused at who was talking. Every so often, when a long conversation like that is going on, make sure you remind the readers who is who. And a description of how it was said would be nice, too. Just creates a better imagery and sound in readers' minds.

dude. You have to tell me how you get the money from chatting here... o.0

Well, my friend, you have found yourself a beta reader. I think your story has a good potential, and the prologue was very amusing. Or, the half of it.

Oh, nice vid, by the way.

tl; dr

About your prolouge:

I just wanted to let you know that you need a lot more description. You did not describe anything. What where the characters wearing, etc.

I did laugh a little, but I can't beta your fic, Sorry really busy lately.

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I remem you from fs..you wernt that active....O.o Aj banned me XD cause i called him a name XD

Eh, I don't have it, so I wouldn't know.

I saw what you said to LightHunger, she is quite active on Final Smash.

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Holy crap! I'm endangered?! O:

Hey advanced; sorry i didn't get to counting the rest of teh votes. :P I'll be sure to finish up this weekend so you can post the page. ;D

Also, you should use the following list of programs:
A-Map
A-Text
XSE
Hex Editor
Cyclone
Unlz.gba
APE
YAPE